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Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 27, 2023 11:32 am Title: Safety First

So that was a range of feelings for this chapter. Clearly there's some deeper issues going on with Jim that he just wants to numb out. Now I get it in this world and with him being an ally and all. He's probably been exposed to quite a bit. So yeah when his seeming source of life and connection goes away he just wants to check out.

Then when Pam comes back he's everywhere past gone. Very much an "in vino veritas" kind of moment with Drunk Jim saying some of the stuff he really wants to say. Though it also kinda felt like Jim was taking advantage of the situation and I'm not sure Pam has all the wherewithal to recognize it. It's not like anything felt forced, but when one is drunk and the other isn't, even in a committed relationship, for me at least, it feels questionable. So, we'll see what happens going forward.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 18, 2023 09:02 am Title: Safety First

I like this look into the hosting duties Jim performs. Kind of feels like another step for easing Pam into things as well. Giving her a code name, saying they're married prior to the actual thing.

Jenny was adorable and Jim was great with her. I also understand why Jane would be so hesitant. She's got a lot on her plate at the moment and in this world nothing's really safe. Though Jenny's whisper to Jim I'm sure was a tough pull on his heartstrings. Really glad Pam is there to help him now. Feels like he's needed a partner in crime for a while and he can share some of this burden a bit more easily.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 14, 2023 07:06 pm Title: Safety First

Forget a bit of what I said last chapter. I mean if there's ever a time for the first declaration of love, I mean, that would be it. Very sensual and then tender afterwards.

Pam picking up the guitar and being so proud of herself is all sorts of adorable. And Jim comes in and it blows his socks off was great to see as well. They really are wonderful together in a space like this. Now of course because of the setting there's an underlying edge of tension to be sure, but at the same time it's great to see them like this as well.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 14, 2023 06:58 pm Title: Safety First

Time to dive in with this one.

Well that got off to a rather quick start. Considering they're trying to be slow about things, I just wonder how long they're going to last. But I'm getting ahead of myself.

There's a feeling of canon in the opening here. Jim and Pam's biggest issues with each other, in my opinion, has always been lack of communication. I see that here. Jim not telling her about where things are located, them both still not telling each other they love the other one, things like that. Feels very in character for them.

Everything else was deliciously hot and descriptive.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31, 2023 07:11 pm Title: Freedom First

And the shoe finally drops. Even without the detail, one can imagine what might have happened to generate that kind of response in her. The curtain shielding her eyes is finally gone. Yeah, not pleasant, but I also think it's a bit of a refining fire. Something that's burning away the slag which will leave a solid core of hardened steel in its place.

Jim taking care of her though is very sweet. Best thing is to just hold her and he does just that. Bravo. Looking forward to delving into the rest of the world for sure.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 31, 2023 07:04 pm Title: Freedom First

Making out to "Princess Bride," excellent! Though interspersed with some of the realities they have to deal with which of course stretches over everything in this world.

Getting tipsy off whiskey and cokes is quite fun to watch as well. They're getting so in tune with each other and as I've said quite a few times before, it's wonderful to see. Methinks they'll need a bond as strong as iron in this world. Especially if Pam is going to become an Ally and what that might entail. Great to see it forming here.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31, 2023 06:51 pm Title: Freedom First

Very cute Pam making dinner. Though that pales in comparison to the fire blazing between them. It's just amazing to see them falling in love like this. To be able to be together is just great to watch.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 08:23 pm Title: Freedom First

Nice to have people in higher places. Always like David. He mostly seemed to always be looking out for the genuine well being of people. I'm also going to go ahead and headcannon that now in this universe Roy and Karen are assigned to each other (unless future reading says otherwise). As careful as one must be it's still kind of refreshing to see Dwight being so Dwight in this chapter. Very early season kind of Dwight too. Very much stuck up about the rules and telling everyone about the beet farm.

Delightful JAM banter too what with the post-it notes and such. Great fun to be had there for sure.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:51 pm Title: Freedom First

So for all the fact that they're adults there's this certain charm about them that neither of them has gone past first base at this point. Something they'll get to experience together so that's a nice thought. Still loving all the fun JAM-my flintiness with this one.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:45 pm Title: Freedom First

Lovely to get a first date. Annoying that they have to present ID like that though. Still tons of fun banter which is always fun to read. Especially now that they don't have to hide it.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:41 pm Title: Freedom First

So that was a rollercoaster of a chapter for sure. Kind of nice that my theory on stopping at a gas station kind of came true. It's not quite the canon proposal in the rain, but as close to as we can get in this world. I'm just relieved that she wasn't assigned to marry Roy and Jim assigned to marry Karen or something like that. So one weight off their shoulders. They can actually be together now. Wonderful.

Very touching moments at the gravesites. Having to think their thoughts instead of being able to say them hurts though. Still that's one place where they'll always be free.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:25 pm Title: Freedom First

*In my best Leonard McCoy voice* Damnit Jim! Of course he would toss his letter aside without even opening it. Sometimes out Jim just doesn't think things through. So yeah, I kinda get why Pam would run away like this. Though if she needs to stop at a gas station, that could be a set up for something interesting. Nice bit of tension building that's for sure.

Author's Response: I'm watching Star Trek 2009 as we speak! 🤣

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:19 pm Title: Freedom First

Awww, look at Pam getting all dressed up for Jim. Yeah 100% he clocked it, but of course he has to keep it under wraps. Shades of canon there. He notices everything about her, but has to keep it to friendship.

Lots of really cute back and forth banter between the two of them. Loved the bit with the post-it notes. Her drawing for Pete was incredibly touching as well.

Really curious to see what was in the envelope and why it's elicited this reaction from her.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30, 2023 07:08 pm Title: Freedom First

Oh to be young again and to venture forth into the wilds of the internet. All those abbreviations and emoticons. Ah the days before emojis. Good times.

Nice that they're getting to know a bit more about each other as well. Heartbreaking to hear about Pete that's for sure. Also America is fighting Canada? I mean it kind of makes sense for sure, but still.

Also, Pam's drawing again! Hooray! That's tons of fun to think about for sure.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27, 2023 09:25 pm Title: Freedom First

Lots of fun ways to put in canon moments in this one. Jim and Pam going on a lunch date that's not a date. Maybe even a little NewSpeak from "1984" in there too. "Undate," and all. Michael burning his foot and his ridiculous meetings. Then of course what could be this world's 27 seconds of silence between the two of them. Good night the tension between them just keeps building.

Fun that she can have her own computer now. Hopefully that opens up a whole new world of possibilities for her.

Author's Response:

Thank you for diving into the universe, warrior4, and for your kind reviews. The written works of Edgar Allan Poe, Lois Lowry, George Orwell, and Ray Bradbury are all near and dear to my heart.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27, 2023 09:16 pm Title: Freedom First

So this is an all new kind of pining for Pam. Clearly Jim is head over heels for her, but the thought of being able to be with her romantically is so fraught with danger in this world. Pam, while maybe not aware of some of the dangers herself is equally entranced by him. Lovely to see how this is all blooming, even if there's a minefield ahead.

So the government can tap and trace phones and text messages, but not the internet? Seems like an oversight on their end, but at this point I'm also not complaining. Sad to hear that it was after WWII that things started going downhill for America until it became the very thing it was fighting against. Provided that in this universe WWII turned out the way it did in real history that is.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27, 2023 08:54 pm Title: Freedom First

Now I'm getting some "Fahrenheit 451" vibes as well. The underground memorizing books and all that. Makes things compelling for sure.

Some really cute moments between the two of them here. Pam leaning in to hug Jim like that is just all kinds of sweet.

Really liked that he's giving her more information about her past, about FF, and how the world works. Some big Underground Railroad vibes too what with allies supposed to house and shuttle refugees to Canada. More great world building.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 27, 2023 08:40 pm Title: Freedom First

Love a nice cute moment between the two of them before we get into heavy stuff. Pam's hesitancy to utter a single rude word is excellent world building. Feels like said things are frowned upon but the authorities, or by how her father raised her, or both.

The idea of teaching someone freedom like this still continues to be very interesting to read. It kinda feels like a dimmer switch slowly being turned on. Gradually more and more light shines in. Thing is more light can also illuminate things one would rather keep hidden for good or for ill. Still at this point it's very sweet to see Pam starting to get used to a bit more light, even if she still has to be guarded.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27, 2023 08:30 pm Title: Freedom First

So the thing about this chapter is that it kind of reminds me of a lot of the freedoms we actually take for granted. The ability to choose what we want, when we want it, how we want it, how we can say it. When one thinks of people who can only listen or consume what the government says they can, it's really kind of heartbreaking.

Excellent song choice with "Free Bird." I really like the idea that it's music that gives Pam her first real taste of freedom. That something like that song can be what feels like the door to her own cage opening up. A cage she didn't even know she was in until now. But now that cage is open and she's starting to peak out. Clearly there are dangers afoot but at least here at the start she seems ready to explore.

Pam's mom was one of the original freedom fighters? That puts a whole new spin on things for sure. .

Reviewer: Receptionitis15 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 26, 2023 12:17 pm Title: Death First

That was all super interesting, didn't expect this little twist. Glad that they got a decent deal from Lena. Hopefully this will give them a bit of safety and protection for a while though it is dystopia, so I look forward to the next twists and turns...

Reviewer: Receptionitis15 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 26, 2023 12:15 pm Title: Death First

This was definitely a dramatic rollercoaster! Jim saving Pam was intense, glad she is okay but definitely tough with it ruining their safe space.

Reviewer: Receptionitis15 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 26, 2023 12:12 pm Title: Death First

First, so excited to see updates for this!
So good that Pam is getting to do something she likes for work, a cool venture for her and maybe a port of calm in the storm of this dystopia. Love them making use of their new garage so quickly.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 25, 2023 02:34 pm Title: Freedom First

Finally started diving into this series. Already there seems like a lit of intrigue and things going on behind the scenes. Cameras everywhere, everything being assigned for people, all that kind of thing. It reminds me a little of the book, "The Giver." But more sinister.

At first Jim seems like his normal self. Pam too but obviously quite a bit more naive. Should be fun to see where we go from here.

Reviewer: MrsKHalpert Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 19, 2023 03:51 pm Title: Death First

Literally was so excited when I saw you’d updated SO MANY CHAPTERS!!! And jeez, they were all so good!! I absolutely love this world you’ve created, I’m on the edge of my seat the whole time. Love love love it. The only thing I want is more!!

Reviewer: jts Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2023 11:10 pm Title: Death First

YAY!!! I can't wait for updates! Thank you for writing and I hope you're well!

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