Date: September 23, 2008 08:42 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
Very nice story. I'm really enjoying it. I'm a little confused about whether or not the documentary is airing or not. I think you mentioned that it was early on, but then that went away. Any chance of a Pam POV? Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: I'm not sure what you mean about the documentary airing or not. I have taken the episodes that I thought were meatiest and extrapolated what might have happened after the cameras went away; but everything I've written takes place within the framework of the show as it aired for real. If that's not helpful, email me and I can explain it a bit better! :)rnrnAnd... yes! I am planning a Pam POV... and, for a change, a Roy POV as well. I think I might put them together as a series to make it easier to figure out. Let me know what you think!!!
Date: September 23, 2008 07:51 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
I'm so glad that you came back to this story! Please don't make us wait too long for the next chapters. I love your perspective on Jim's inner thoughts and actions. I'm so curious about what comes next.
Date: September 22, 2008 07:35 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
"Jim seemed to carry the brunt of the adoration, mostly from the under 30 female crowd, which was nice in the beginning but which had turned into a burden he wasn't sure he could handle."
Just the under 30 crowd? What is up with the women in Scranton - he should be adored by all women in Scranton. I know I'd volunteer to be the first over 30 woman in line!
Date: September 22, 2008 07:25 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
"Until you’re left standing in front of her, used up and burned out, on a cool spring night and all you can see is the shimmering blue of her dress and all you can smell is her perfume, and you wonder if he even noticed how beautiful she was as he drove off without her."
Poor, poor Jim. This really shows the depth of his anguish after CN. Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks kaystar! I really enjoy writing the thoughts more than the dialogue, and I think it's really a testament to the actors. They convey so much through their body language and expressions that it's hard not to wonder what they're thinking. I'm glad that you approve! :)
Date: August 29, 2008 01:28 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
Hey, Lynzee - Just caught up on a bunch of chapters. This is really moving along nicely. Great tension. These internal thoughts of Jim's are just heartbreaking. Can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Thanks Nan -- I hadn't realized how hard it is to portray internal conflict without being too repetitive or boring. I hope I don't fall into that trap with this one! Again, thanks for taking time to review! :)
Date: August 29, 2008 11:00 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
This chapter killed me -- but in a very good way. I loved it from beginning to end. The way you capture every little reaction that they have to each other, the descriptions - simply fantastic.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, kerber! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it and that I'd doing justice to the characters. Hopefully I'll keep it up! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: August 29, 2008 10:20 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
That chapter was perfection and so Jim and Pam. Their conversation felt as real as anything I've ever seen on the show. Pam talking about flowers...I don't know why but that really got to me, beautiful writing. Can't wait for more. This is the best I've read in a while.
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the compliment!!! I hope I can live up to this for the rest of the story! :) Thanks for taking time to review, as well.
Date: August 29, 2008 08:28 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
Angsty-angst to the max. Oh, the delicious torture that plays out in Jim's head. I kind of miss the little tap-dance with the truth these two used to do. But not so much that I'd give up Canon Jam.
Nice chapter, Lynz.
Author's Response: Ugh I know -- what is it with me and angst? I agree that their "tap dance with the truth" (great line by the way -- may I borrow it? :D), and it's why I go back and re-watch Season 1-3 all the time! But it won't always be like that, because these two need to get hitched!!! ha ha! Thanks for the kind review, lisahoo!
Date: August 29, 2008 07:41 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
Such a great story, Lynzee! I love it. You capture everything so clearly. Bravo - more soon I hope!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you think it's clear and still enjoyable to read. And yes -- I will post more soon, for sure with more consistency than I have been! :D
Date: August 14, 2008 06:31 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
I just wanted to say that I"m really enjoying your story. I've been checking it for updates and glad to see this one. Hope Jim will have the nerve in his "current" state to tell Pam how he feels. Look forward to your next update, which I hope will be soon. :)
Author's Response: Well, he didn't tell her... but I hope that what did happen moves them forward a bit! Thanks for the review! :)
Date: July 31, 2008 10:05 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
This is seriously the best line ever.
"I can’t carry a torch for Pam; I am the torch."
I want to embroider it on a pillow or use it as a sig file. :D It's completely awesome. I'm looking forward to more of this story, short chapters but interesting. I'm curious where you're going with it, I'm definitely along for the ride.
Author's Response: Thanks! I liked it too -- like I said in response to another reviewer, I thought it might be too much of a fire metaphor, but I liked it too much to take out! The chapters will get longer and more detailed as more stuff happens, I promise! :)
Date: July 31, 2008 06:42 pm Title: Guilty Cubicles
Oh, it's going to be a happy little trip through S2 angst, eh? I'm enjoying the 'filling in' of the moments that happened between episodes, Lynz.
Author's Response: Glad you like it! I hope I can keep the momentum going and keep people interested as well! Thanks for reviewing :)
Date: July 31, 2008 03:51 am Title: Guilty Cubicles
Really liked this, Lynzee, especially this: This is my life. I’m so tired, but I can’t help it. I’m still burning. I can’t carry a torch for Pam; I am the torch. There’s a difference. Wow. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I thought I might have gotten carried away with the fire metaphor, but I liked it too much to get rid of! :)