Date: February 09, 2007 03:46 pm Title: In the end...
Oh, how did I miss this? My life is not that interesting! The repetition of "in the end" is just so effective here. The last line especially. I loved how you just convey how bizarre it is to see someone outside of work, especially for Jim and Pam, but in the end that's what they need. Ugh, this is like the worst review of all time but I'm just so glad I got to read this!
Author's Response: Nah, pennylane - I can think of worse reviews ;) Glad you got to read it!
Date: February 06, 2007 08:10 pm Title: In the end...
Oh, Pam just seems so heartbreakingly lost here! It's a nice, subtle ending - I love that you don't have to actually *show* her say it, just let us know that she does and that somehow puts them on the road to okay.
Author's Response: Thank you, Semby! Honestly, we all know what Pam needs to say. Or what we need her to say, anyway ;)
Date: February 06, 2007 04:34 pm Title: In the end...
Your stories never cease to amaze me! :) My favorite part:
She seems to notice the room now. "Do you need beer?"
He shakes his head.
She raises the box. "Spoons? I have some."
He smiles. "No."
LOL It made me giggle. :) Thanks for sharing this. Keep up the brilliant work!
Author's Response: That's awesome, threeholepunch - thank you! Makes me feel good :)
Date: February 05, 2007 05:44 pm Title: In the end...
Love this. Darkness aside (which I also love), I think that when it happens on the show, it'll be in a situation like this -- something understated and ordinary and seemingly anticlimactic, only not because it's them.
You really capture that feeling of compartmentalizing someone and the strangeness of seeing that person outside the box, so to speak.
Gorgeous, as usual.
Yeah, I kinda think we saw the big dramatic moment last May - this one'll be low-key in contrast, I bet. Thanks, girl7 :)
Date: February 05, 2007 02:57 pm Title: In the end...
I was so happy to see a new story from you, Shan! And from reading the other reviews, the rest of your fan club was too! This was just beautiful, as yours always are. And this line - "Because, in the end, it's the beginning." is just so perfectly perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you, kaystar :)
Date: February 05, 2007 02:42 pm Title: In the end...
So beautiful, the repetition of 'in the end' and the way they speak to each other and how simple it is that this is what makes it all come out and all the places it doesn't happen and The utensils are like ribs rattling against a pine box and OH. nomadshan, this is just GORGEOUS. You say so much with so little and the effect is just a little mind-blowing. Thank you for this.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks, allibabab! I really appreciate that :)
Date: February 05, 2007 02:39 pm Title: In the end...
I agree with what you've written here, and I enjoyed the subtle dig at what Jam fanfiction has become in recent months (not that I'm not enjoying it, but..). The clichés were getting old, this was fresh.
Author's Response: Well, I'm guilty of all those locations, I think, and probably a grocery store, too - but thanks, Luna - I'll take the compliment :)
Date: February 05, 2007 11:21 am Title: In the end...
wow. weird, and a bit dark, and so good. i like the idea of pam just kind of losing it a bit and jim finding her that way and forgetting everything else. nice imagery, and of course, nice ending.
Author's Response: Thanks, super_perfect - I'd love to see something like this on the show, but that'd be a bit hard on Pam :)
Date: February 05, 2007 11:15 am Title: In the end...
I love that it doesn't happen at a wedding. or any other of the aforementioned places.
i don't know why, but the idea of her dumping out boxes of forks because she can't find the spoons is just very striking to me. It really does solidify the frustration of it all.
Seriously, this was done wonderfully well.
Thanks so much.
Author's Response: Thanks, Lex :)
Date: February 05, 2007 10:50 am Title: In the end...
Shan! Your writing rocks as always. This was just so perfect: "Do you need me to say it?" He exhales. "Yes." She would have named everything in the store before getting to herself. Ha! You are so concise and precise in your writing, making it all the more powerful.
Author's Response: Thank you, Morning Angel :)
Date: February 05, 2007 10:43 am Title: In the end...
oh yeah, i also wanted to say i like how it was just a casual everyday place because... some of us lead boring lives where a shopping trip is exciting (case in point, most exciting thing i have today is laundry!)
Author's Response: This show's a funny cross of the ordinary and the absurd - but the ordinary definitely works for these two. Thanks again, EH! :)
Date: February 05, 2007 09:56 am Title: In the end...
My first reaction:
YAY, new fic from nomadshan!!!!!
Second: Heh, she's totally calling us all out. Yes, yes, we're not as original as you, shan, but there's only so much genius in the world. :)
Third: Oh, Pam. Oh, oh, Jim.
Fourth: "Do you need me to say it?"
He exhales. "Yes." YES! OMG, YES. Geez.
I love this. I love you. Welcome back. :)
Author's Response: Oh, I'm calling myself out, too! Thank you, Lis ;)
Date: February 05, 2007 09:19 am Title: In the end...
Oh Shan. These two are driving me bonkers. I love the idea that in the end it'll be something quiet. The scenarios I've written myself are more like blockbuster romantic comedy or dare I say - soap-like (shiver shiver). I'm sure it won't be - but writing it that way sometimes makes me feel better. :)
I love how unsettled you have both of them here because that's the way I'm seeing them now. Like they're both standing on ice with the surface cracking and there's only one thing can fix/save them.
Author's Response: xoxoxo! Take that line ("Like they're both standing on ice with the surface cracking...") and write something for it, because that is so visual! And thank you :)
Date: February 05, 2007 08:40 am Title: In the end...
She dips her head and sets the box aside. Her fingers weave together and she finds his gaze again. "Do you need me to say it?" How perfectly Pam. Still needing reassurance and a prompt after all this time! Lovely.
Author's Response: Thanks, Par5!
Date: February 05, 2007 08:25 am Title: In the end...
You're back! Where have you been! This is so great, and so different - and you hit it on the head with this: buffered from everything not-them. Ah.
Author's Response: I've been in time-out :) Thanks, mcmuffins!
Date: February 05, 2007 08:18 am Title: In the end...
I intended just to do a quick fly by to see if there was anything new to come back and read later - saw this and had to read it now. I absolutely love the very ordinariness of where/how they finally connect; how it could almost be incidental, but of course is anything but; the metaphor/image of Pam surrounded by plastic forks - all her disarray and finally, the last vestiges of not expressing what she really needs. All that (and more) is here in such an eloquently understated way.
Favorite part? He exhales. "Yes." Second time in two weeks that word coming out of Jim's mouth has spoken volumes. Just wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you, Colette - it's really gratifying when a reader picks up on things like those. Not that I'm a master of subtlety ;)
Date: February 05, 2007 07:42 am Title: In the end...
You had to post right as I'm supposed to be heading out the door. But, seriously. Just the image of Pam in the middle of the aisle with forks scattered around her feet was so heartbreaking and- something else that I can't really name, but it made me hold my breath then. And just everything about this is so amazing. Their conversation in the back room is perfection.
Oh! Also, this: "...and he knows without having to be too close that the forks are nested snug against one another..." I don't even know how to describe how much I loved this line, because- just because.
You're amazing, is what I'm trying to say.
Author's Response: Aw, you rock, unfold - thank you! :)
Date: February 05, 2007 07:35 am Title: In the end...
Gah! I made an actual noise when I saw that you had posted a new story! This was so good, short and sweet and avoided all of the trappings of a typical "Pam tells Jim how she feels" story. Just wonderful :)
Author's Response: Thanks, DinkinFlicka - I appreciate it :)