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Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09, 2007 06:17 am Title: Telling him

Oh, but tiny suggestion? Get a beta reader. It's definitely more readable than most unbetaed stories, but the major English freak in me would like to point out some punctuation stuff here and there.

Yeah, otherwise, pretty great, still. =P  

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09, 2007 05:49 am Title: Telling him

I don't know if this means I'm a dork, or the Jam!angst is just getting way too much to handle, but I read this in my college library and I was this close to tears.

This seems like the good, healing sort of angst, though; because something about it excudes this they're going to get through this sort of air, and I love that.

I cannot wait, at all, for an update! Get your writing skillz in gear! 

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