Reviews For The Umbrella
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Reviewer: MissCorporate Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2023 02:57 am Title: Chapter 1

The smile mentioned here reminded me of when Pam condemned Jim to more chatter from Kelly in 'Drug Testing'. Very in character. The POVs were kind of mixed, but I guess that's not a big problem in such a short piece. Nice job!

Author's Response: I think this was the second Office fic I ever wrote, so I"m not surprised that I wasn't yet good at POV. I remember trying to mimic the style of an episode, which is something I mostly abandoned over the years. 

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 10, 2020 03:07 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is just so perfectly them at this moment in canon.

Author's Response: Thank you! I loved those early days, when the will they/won’t they was killing us all. 

Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 02, 2018 08:45 am Title: Chapter 1

Adorable.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I loved those “will they/won’t they” days.

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2009 08:22 am Title: Chapter 1

I would love anything if it was in Jim's car. Wait... um, driving places. Errands. Okay, um... moving on...

My car is only starting to looked lived in, and I've had it for.... 6 years? And its still relatively barren. Right now, its got a hoodie, a bottle of water, and a protien bar in there. And not much else.... and that, honestly, is more than its had ever before. I swear, if it wasn't for the doghair, my car would practically look like it was a rental.

I love that grin also, Jim. :)

I love imagining how high up Pam has to hold the umbrella to get it over Jim's head. Because I am dorky like that.
Oh, and then you mention it which is why I love it even more.

This story was too cute for its own good. I loved it.

Author's Response: Hee, thank you! It turned out well, I think. I was still trying to develop the right tone, to catch that mix of cute and angsty that their relationship was back then. It was before I realized that in fic, you can use any tone you want!

Reviewer: jollyholly Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 05, 2007 02:27 pm Title: Chapter 1

so cute! 'loved so much the 'so worth it' line :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is an old one- I'm glad you came back and found it, and that it still holds up!

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love this. It reminds me of early second season JAM. I miss this kind of interaction between them. They were adorable together.

Author's Response: Oh, thank you for reading back and finding it. I wrote it back when thing were a little more optimistic. :)

Reviewer: allibabab Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2007 02:23 pm Title: Chapter 1

Aww, what a cute story.  I love how you included the talking-head moments -- it was a really good way to finish.  Your dialogue was also really good.  Thanks for this!  Sometimes it's easy to get bogged down by angsty Jim/Pam stuff, so it's always nice to read something lighthearted and fun like this.  :)

Author's Response:

Thank you so much- and thank you for taking the time to look at some of the older stuff!

The angst has been killing me lately, but these two can be so much fun together!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 28, 2006 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

very cute.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it!

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 07, 2006 07:48 am Title: Chapter 1

Adorable!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you!

Reviewer: kyrafic Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 25, 2006 11:55 am Title: Chapter 1

Heeee. Love the card idea, and the banter!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: lano Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 07:28 am Title: Chapter 1

This was very sweet, it's amazing how much effect the smallest touches have.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: sicokitty Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 04:23 am Title: Chapter 1

aww, being soaked all afternoon was worth it! that line was perfect. and it's probably true too, jim would do almost anything for.

Author's Response: Yeah, he likes her a little bit, I think. Hee!

Reviewer: Smurfette729 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 03:52 am Title: Chapter 1

Loved it@ It's making me grin. :)

Author's Response: Grinning is good! Thank you!

Reviewer: katrina87 Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 03:02 am Title: Chapter 1

Very sweet! I loved it! :D

Author's Response: I'm glad!

Reviewer: Shroom Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 02:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Very cute! I like it when they tease each other and I loved Pam wanting to investigate Jim's car.

And very effective use of details, like the totebag big enough to hold Pam's unused sketchbook and that Stanley would notice the high-quality card.

Author's Response: Thank you! That's very nice to hear; it's hard to strike a balance between "rounding a story out with details" and "throwing in stuff that isn't to the point". :)

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed 6 [Report This]
Date: July 18, 2006 02:17 am Title: Chapter 1

Cute! (And poor Stanley)

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 17, 2006 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

Lovely fic. I like it when they tease one another.

Author's Response: Me, too. It's such a fundamental part of their relationship. Thank you!

Reviewer: ella eternity Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 17, 2006 11:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

adorable. i love how you describe pam investigating jims life.

Author's Response: Thank you! I almost took that part out because I think I could write a whole separate story about it. Maybe I still will. :)

Reviewer: princesslisa Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17, 2006 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

Cute! We need more fun interactions like this.

Author's Response: Thank you! It was fun to write.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 17, 2006 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

Never has being caught in the rain outside a Hallmark store been so well written!

Author's Response: Well, thanks!

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 17, 2006 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1

So sweet! You managed to incorporate a lot of detail into such a short story.

Author's Response: Thanks! I was worried I was cramming too much in, but I guess it was OK after all!

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