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Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:35 pm Title: Chapter 9

I loved it.  The ending was perfect.  I'm so glad Pam made the U-turn.  I thought we were going to have to wait until the next night.  You did not disappoint. =)

Author's Response:

Yeah, I was trying to be a little sneaky about the u-turn -- but it was also to sort of justify how/why she'd decide to just go for it all on their first date.  Heh.  (God, what I would not GIVE if TBTB decided to give us a similar surprise on the show.)

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lama Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 9

I am far too drunk on this update to be reviewing right now- HOLY CRAP that was good.  So much I loved about it.  I'll just have to reread.  And reread.  And reread.  Two quick things though:

When Pam did the u-turn, I clapped and cheered.  Alone.  In my apartment.

This description of Jim: His profile was illuminated by the streetlight as he deposited her gently onto his bed, leaning over her and resting on his forearms, looking like some sort of vision she'd conjured - his chest bare, jeans resting loosely on his hips.  

Yeah... I'm pretty sure I won't be able to get that image out of my head for a long time. 



Author's Response:

Eee, I'm so glad you liked it!  Love it that you cheered for the u-turn; I was hoping it'd be sort of unexpected. 

And yeah, whenever I write descriptions of Jim, I tend to fall right into the JK lust; I'm kind of a hussy like that.  :o)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 9

Wow -- this was soooo worth the wait.  I am so glad you let it go the 9 chapters that you did -- it did the story justice, allowing them to sort out their feelings and treat each other with the integrity they deserve.

You have written the combination of their passion, both physical and emotional so vividly, it makes my chest ache. 

And you put the recent speculation on JK's shirtless movie scenes to good use!   (Pam asking for 'trouble', yowsa!) 



Author's Response:

Yay - thanks so much!  I think this one has taught me to shut up with the, "It'll be three chapters, I swear."  (THough I cannot believe this ended up being nine!  Good god.)

Thanks so much for reviewing, as always!

Reviewer: StarryDreamer Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 9

When I finished this chapter (this story, ultimately) I let out a huge sigh.  I guess I must have been holding my breath the entire chapter! lol  When Pam took off, I was secretly willing her to turn around and just say "fuck it", so I was pleasantly surprised when she DID turn back.  A great story, as always.  I continue to enjoy and marvel at your talent and your workmanship.  The bottle of wine you used was worth it. ;-)

Author's Response: Wow - thanks so much!  I'm glad you liked that part, because I struggled with the whole "should they or shouldn't they" thing, so I thought that might be the most effective way to address it.  As usual, you are such an awesome reviewer!  Thanks!

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 9

Gah.

I totally don't know what to say.  I am SPEECHLESS.

 

You should DEFINITELY drink more wine, girl7.  Because,well...WOW. 



Author's Response: Heh, Maybe Once - I think I drank all the existing wine in the universe last night, believe me.  :O) Hope the speechlessness is a good thing....

Reviewer: Jen74 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 04:04 pm Title: Chapter 9

Holy Mother of all that is good and pure in this world.

 If I promise I'm not crazy, will you give me your address.  I have a case of wine to send you.

Anytime they are lying on top of each other on a kitchen floor is good, good, good.  And I loved Pam's realization that it could have gone another way, the merger might not have happened, they might not have happened.  And going back to him.  They had waited long enough.  And when he realized that she was back, and he just knew why....  And the kicking the door closed as he pulled her in, I just love that move. 

Finally, the mere thought of Jim whispering "com.e" in her ear, Oh. My. God.  That was aaaaamaazing./kelly.

 Good things come to readers who wait.  You are beyond awesome!

 



Author's Response:

Your review has me sitting here grinning like a lunatic...thank you!  I'm really glad that you liked it - and I'm especially glad that you liked her going back.  I wrestled with that, because in all honesty, I don't believe those two characters would immediately jump in with both feet; they've taken such baby steps toward one another for so long (which could, of course, be an argument for why they'd decide to go all in).  At the same time, though, I understand why some readers find it not plausible that they'd stop themselves because they're both experienced adults who obviously love each other.  So I tried to find a balance here - exploring the possibility of them not taking the leap, then a sort of "surprise" (in a way) when they do.

I think this response may have made absolutely no sense whatsoever. :o)

Anyway - thanks so much for such a thoughtful (and funny!) review; you rock!

Reviewer: grapenutbeats Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 18, 2007 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 9

Giddy!  I am giddy!  Thank you!  I'm the kind of person who usually reads until the I-love-you's and then bolts (it always gets so desperately cheesy and I'm all about the torment, which is why I'm secretly glad they're still not together on the show), but I definitely liked this!  Cheesy but awesome!  The Office is making me like smut and fluff!

Author's Response:

Wow - thank you so much!  I'm a big fat romantic, so I have to be careful not to get too carried away; I know I lapse into schmaltzy territory a lot, I'm sure, so it's really nice to hear you say that you liked this!  (And I'm sort of about the torment, too - love watching JK get that guh look on his face -- but I'm also ready for them to get together, damn it!)

Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 8

Wow...this was amazing.  Pam's toast was perfect, I loved the kitchen banter, the awkwardness at the office (last chapter maybe...I read 2 at once).  Just wonderful happy Jamness.  When's the smut coming? ;-)

Author's Response: I'm really glad you enjoyed it - and the smut is up as we speak.  :o) Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Par5 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 07:26 am Title: Chapter 8

I've been following along here but been a complate slacker about leaving reviews. Sorry! Just had to say I'm definitely liking where you're going. And of course had to mention....the forearms! Rock on with your bad self!

Author's Response: Hey you!  It's good to hear from you again!  Glad you're enjoying this - and there's more forearm love in the last chapter.  I swear, I don't know what gets into me.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14, 2007 08:46 am Title: Chapter 8

okay, so I went back and figured out the problem:
The unexpected wave of feeling was much like the kind of inexplicable, irrational emotions that out of control hormones could produce...only this wasn't hormonal.

It was simply life: real, a miracle...a blessing, really.


for some reason these lines kinda bother me. I think it's the wording. i understand what you're saying, but the actual paragraph seems...awkward.

and, just for the record, Jim's forearms are just about the sexiest things ever.

and if you ever need feedback that's brutally honest, come find me. ^_^
email me any time amalia_kensington@yahoo.com or find me @ LJ amaliak.

cheers.
--Lex

Author's Response:

Gotta agree with you here - an awkward sentence, totally.

And I also agree that Jim's forearms are the sexiest things evah.

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14, 2007 08:23 am Title: Chapter 8

Oh, this was just so satisfying, even without the steam. The knowing looks, the smiles, the amazement that they're finally here. Gah. It's so awesome. And these bits were just the perfect ending to the chapter:

...a thought suddenly struck her: It's time to go all in.

So she simply said, "To the future...to walking toward it instead of trying to run away from it.

*sigh* 

You left me with a huge grin at the end. Now, bring on the smut! 

 



Author's Response: So glad I left you satisfied and smiling (couldn't resist!).  And the smut has arrived!  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 8

Hear Hear!!!
*raises beer bottle* (so, I'm a little uncouth. Sue me.)
Yey for dinner together!!! Damn, the idea of Jim is just so hot. *drools*

Although, I gotta say that I feel like a lot of their emotions are...unexpectedly unexplained. Does that make sense? It's like they're acknowledging them, sure, but not the reason for them (it's just mentioned a little too often). I'll have to go back and re-read it, but that's my initial impression (will you hate me terribly if I think that this chapter feels a little rushed? Hmm...maybe it's just because I'm reading it in a hurry...)
Anyway, the Better Homes and Gardens Cookbook is the BEST COOKBOOK EVER. I have one, and I've given it away to two of my friends that have just gotten married (we all SWEAR by it). It's like an idiot-proof guide to cooking. have you looked at the glossary? Now I know what all those weird looking things at the store are!! And I know the difference between long grain and short grain rice! Yey!
btw, the apron is like this: http://us.st11.yimg.com/us.st.yimg.com/I/laraines_1940_26975540

Also, I'd like to mention that I love you.

^_^
Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex

Author's Response:

Beer, wine - it's all good!  And no, I do not hate you for offering constructive criticism - please, I would so not get fussy over that!  (Now, if you said Jim's forearms aren't that great - well, then you'd have a problem on your hands.  :o))  Actually, I do see what you're saying here - even though they (sort of) acknowledged where they are weeks earlier (in this fic, I should clarify), it might be weird that they'd be cooking dinner together without having gone back to that conversation.  And to be totally honest (embarrassing writer confession here): There are times when I'm writing these two when I get all emotional; like when they're sort of wrestling over the cook book - it was meant to be a funny/sexy scene, but all of a sudden I thought, wow, this would be amazing for them, given the distance between them now (on the show) and given the fact that they're taking conscious steps toward one another (in the fic, heh).  So I got sort of teary thinking about it and that's where some of the unexpected emotions came from (in the story). 

Did that make any sense at all?  Probably not. :o)

Anyway - you are awesome for reviewing so faithfully and honestly! 

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 8

"It's time to go all in" is right!
Really enjoying this an dlooking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, desert island!  Hopefully I'll get it finished tonight!  Thanks for reviewing -

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 8

He'd also extracted the splinter almost painlessly, talking to her in a low voice the whole time - about stupid things, like whether or not Dwight used any kind of product in his hair, or if Kelly drew hearts around her signature.

In doing so, he'd successfully deflected her attention from the pain - something he'd do again and again in the months to come until he couldn't handle it anymore. And ironically, that was when his pain became hers.

BEAUTIFUL. Just so completely true to the characters. Lovely.



Author's Response: Thanks so much - I'm glad you thought it was true to the characters.  (I really could envision JH extracting a splinter for some strange reason.)  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 8

AWwwwwwwwwwww......nice fluff, with a little Randy! Pam thrown in for good measure.....Yeay!

Author's Response: Randy!Pam - heh.  :o) Hope this cheered you up a little!  Thanks for the review --

Reviewer: lama Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 8

You are SUCH a tease!  Now I'm dying for the next chapter.  And this: 

As her eyes flicked to his forearms - his sleeves rolled up in a way that struck her as oddly sexual - she was convinced that maybe there was something wrong with her.

Aw hell yea. The most perfectly crafted forearms in the history of humans.



Author's Response:

I'm a big tease - I own it, sister.  :o) And YES, JK should get the award for best forearms EVER.  (Actually, I never noticed forearms - anyone's - until his.  They are very [/Jim] good.)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: unfold Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 8

This was just- I don't know how to explain the feeling I had at the end of this chapter. It just felt like a period, you know? The end of a sentence, because this new sentence is going to start now.

And I could feel the journey and the struggle that they've gone through to get to this point. It wasn't explicitly talked about or said or anything, but there was just this feeling to the scene in his kitchen, like this unheard echo of years gone by, of their history together, of all the things that got them to this moment. It was natural, it was real.

And I know I'm not explaining this very well, but it was just- LAFjasf. Beautiful and wonderful and it made me all teary eyed and you could end it here and it would be so amazing, but I'm not going to complain if you want to give us steam/smut. So.

Also, moving underwater? Yes. I don't know that there is a better metaphor for Jim's time in Stamford.



Author's Response:

I tell you, unfold, even your reviews are beautifully written.  :o) It means a lot that you say you got the sense of their history ("this unheard echo of years gone by" - god, what a beautiful phrase!), because that's what I was going for.  Much of what makes these two so amazing, IMO, is the depth of their history and the things they've been through. 

THanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 8

girl7 -- don't you dare end this story until it is ready to be done!  Pam & Jim clearly have more thinking dirty thoughts about each other to do.... "it was a mystery to her now just how she'd fought this for so long" -- damn straight, woman!  Don't fight it!

And the red & white checkered BH&G cookbook?  Freaking classic.   



Author's Response: Hah - they have more thinking dirty thoughts about each other to do!  Glad you're enjoying this - thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 8

Smut? Yes, please!!! 

This chapter is making me ridiculously happy - I think the effect of this is different than your other fluffy-aftermath-chapters because - OK, I don't know. I was going to say it's because they've acknowledged they love each other, but that's happened in other stories, too, and I was going to say maybe they both have had their fair shares of setbacks and changes, which makes more sense, but uhm. >< I've lost my train of thought. 

I loved this, though; the way they interacted, and talked, and looked at each other, they were just so much more - liberated, I think. When Jim/Pam get their crap together it's going to be wonderful and that's what's got me still hanging in there.

You can't take this long for an update, now! The prospect of smut is keeping jumping in my seat.  



Author's Response:

I'm really glad that you found this different; I readily acknowledge that when it comes to coming up with creative premises for my stories, I totally suck. :o)  And I believe, too, that when we finally see them together on the show, they'll both be just so much happier and - as you say - liberated.  And we shall all squee until we damned near die.  :o)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Jen74 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 8

Okay, first of all, I loved, LOVED, the splinter story.  So much double meaning in that whole conversation.  Of course he would never hurt her.  And she so knows that, and always has.  Then, I loved how she realized he was more of a man than the boy he was when he started DM.  Because he so is. And the slinging of the dish towel over his shoulder, so hot.  And I have that cookbook, and am so going to look up that recipe.  And as for the smut, please sir, may I have some more.  Okay, yeah, that's for gruel, but it works here too :)  Loved it!

Author's Response:

Yay - glad you liked the splinter story!  (I just thought that'd be such a Jim Halpert thing to do.)  The boy/man thing is something that strikes me whenever I watch season one - he seems light years away then from the man we see on Casino Night.  Not to say he's nothing in season one, but...he strikes me as more boyish (except in "The Alliance" when he's leaning on her desk rubbing his hands over his face - guhhhhhh). 

The spinach lasagne thing is actually stolen from my real life - on our first date, my (now) husband & I made that dish, using that cookbook.  It's actually a great recipe.  :o)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: DinkinFlicka Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 8

I'm writing this as I read so I don't forget anything...

Jim: You're impossible. You know this, right?

Pam: What kind of dressing should I bring?

This? Was precious (and now I can get my font to change).  The splinter story was so adorable, especially that he talked her through it, and the dog-bag??  I love the little details like this that you put in your fics.  Chest hair?? *dies* Forearms?? I love you. Dish towel on the shoulder? I think Pam and I have the same brain in this.

You are the best, as always.  

 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked that - in re-reading this (minus the wine-induced giddiness in which I wrote it, hee), I worried that that was too abrupt a shift from the tension in the elevator.  But I wanted to a) get them back to a semblence of their old banter/dynamic (b/c I felt like to have her show up at his door after that prolonged elevator tension...well, they'd have just jumped each other immediately, I think).  and b) I wanted to also illustrate that there was a kind of release - comfort - in finally taking that step toward one another.  So I'm glad it translated for you.  :o)

Oh yeah, I get totally carried away writing about the chest hair and forearms sometimes...

Thanks for reviewing! 

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 8

Beautifully done.  My favorite line:  The look on his face was so...amazing: completely open adoration with a hint of veiled sadness, speaking of the lengths they'd traveled to get here.  Yes indeed.  Your stuff is just absolutely great.

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much - every time I envision him looking at her openly once they're really together, all I can see is that absolutely smitten look he had on his face at the poker table. 

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 8

Sigh, thank you for this...

I love how the pain of the splinter ties into their pain:

In doing so, he'd successfully deflected her attention from the pain - something he'd do again and again in the months to come until he couldn't handle it anymore. And ironically, that was when his pain became hers.

And, of course, I'm all for the chest hair and the forearms and the jeans and the green eyes...

Sigh, again.

 



Author's Response:

Glad you liked the splinter story - as I mentioned earlier, that just came to me all of a sudden.  And girl, you know I'll come through when it comes to chest hair/forearm/jeans/eyes lust! :o)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Sibilate Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 8

Ditto the splinter story - you have Jim down exactly there! And I'm so glad that Pam finally asked Jim about Stamford.  It was such a painful and confusing time for both of them.  I'm glad your Pam realizes that.  Thank you!

Author's Response:

Thanks - all of a sudden I was thinking that Pam would probably want to know what his apartment in Stamford was like and it occurred to me that to ask him about it would've likely brought back bad memories for him.  Strange train of thought there, but...there it is.  :o)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 07:21 pm Title: Chapter 8

Another great chapter! I'm sure there'll be all kinds of squeeing about Cooking!Jim...there's just something about that man that screams homemade lasagna!

Author's Response:

Oh yes - what I would not give to see Jim Halpert with a dish towel thrown over his shoulder making lasagna.  Sigh.

Thanks for the feedback!

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