Date: March 10, 2007 09:02 am Title: Elephant
haha, i can get that song for 88 cents :) course i am so broke that yes that is way to expensive for me.but i will add it to my list of songs to download when i have money.
but i really like it.
but the one line " and she may wisely cling to the ground, cause i'm lately horny, so why would she take me thorny?" made me think of a deleted scene from valentine's day where michael got everyone woman in the office a plastic rose with a card that said me so thorny. so, yeah. odd unexpected laughter happened. :)
Author's Response: I just laughed really hard. I had completely forgotten about Michael's roses- too funny!! Thanks for the review!
Date: March 09, 2007 01:55 pm Title: Elephant
Oh, this was really sad and lovely. And I love the way you used the lyrics - normally in song fics when there's whole chunks of lyrics I just skip over them but a line decorating it here and there was a nice touch.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was hoping the lyrics spread throughout would set a certain tone. I'm glad you liked it!
Date: March 08, 2007 03:34 am Title: Elephant
Really like how spare this is - no histrionics, just the plain truth of it. Sad though it is when Karen sobs, I don't think he's cruel for being blunt - ultimately, as you aptly say, he's gone (love that) and there was nothing he could say to her other than - I'm sorry. Continuing it would be more demeaning at that point, for both of them. Now, if only the show could be this direct. Really nicely written.
Author's Response: This show? Direct? That'll be the day I squee so loud I pop a vocal chord. I was hoping Jim wouldn't come across as being too cruel, or dismissive, in the car- I don't think that would be very 'Jim' of him. In my head, he did the very best he could. Thank you for the review!
Date: March 07, 2007 10:15 pm Title: Elephant
Okay, I love Jim and Pam (*swoon*), but damn, Jim suddenly seems like a deuche bag. Seriously, I'm kinda pissed at him now.
But thanks for this.
Yea, I think this has been Jim's season for douche bagginess. Thanks for the review!
Date: March 07, 2007 08:52 pm Title: Elephant
The image of Karen sobbing while kissing him is just a little to beautiful to handle, especially the way you wrote it. Sad but such a wonderful sense of hope at the end. Great work.
Author's Response: Thank you! It is my solemn prayer that if we ever do have to see Jim and Karen kiss, its in a situation like this. Glad you liked it!
Date: March 07, 2007 08:50 pm Title: Elephant
I like it. In fact, all this great post-Cocktails fic is really helping me through the hiatus. Thank you for being part of this self-help group.
This seems very realistic to me: "He wanted his feet to be back on the ground, but his entire body felt like it was somewhere else. What was about to take place in his car was important, there were very real feelings at stake, but his heart wasn't there anymore. His heart was waiting for him in Scranton. He looked at Karen and knew. It was over, he was gone..." I liked your (too brief!) message from Pam. If Pam said she (still) has feelings for Jim, he could be off like a shot.
Thanks for this.
I'm so glad you liked it! I'm also relieved to hear that Jim came off realistically. S3 Jim has been so hard for me to wrap my head around. (Um, TWSS?) Its hard for me to tell what he's thinking lately, and I think this is just one of the many ways he could potentially respond to hearing something like that from Pam.
And I agree, all the wonderful new fanfic is totally holding my hand through this hiatus.
Date: March 07, 2007 08:24 pm Title: Elephant
Enoyed it a lot. Simple and elegant. The poetry of the lyrics and your spare, crisp writing style are a neat combination.
Thank you- this kind of sums up what I was trying to go for. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Date: March 07, 2007 08:15 pm Title: Elephant
Keep it going! Great job so far!!!
Author's Response: Aw thanks! Not sure if I'll add anymore to it or not. I have a feeling once Jim gets to Pam's place things would get smutty, and I've put myself on smut punishment. No more for awhile. Glad you liked it!
Date: March 07, 2007 08:14 pm Title: Elephant
omg every time i hear elephant, it reminds me of the whole love triangle thing. and i'm SO GLAD someone finally put it into a fic. love it!
Author's Response: Thank God I'm not the only one! If I had any editing skills at all, I'd make a fanvid of the quadrangle to this song. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks!
Date: March 07, 2007 08:12 pm Title: Elephant
I've never heard of Damien Rice or this song, but you did an amazing job tying the lyrics in to your story. They were a perfect match. Karen's desperation in the car was so realistic and so very sad to read. Being a Jammer at heart, I loved the ending.
Blower's Daughter is probably Rice's best known song- it was featured in Closer with Julia Roberts & Jude Law. I'm glad Karen came off as realistic- I wasn't sure how far to take her. At one point I had her slapping Jim, and then I pulled her abck a bit. Viva los Jammers! :o)
Date: March 07, 2007 08:11 pm Title: Elephant
I really liked this. I enjoyed the lyrics in between the text. And I laughed out loud at your review request!
Author's Response: Thank you! Reviews really do mean so much. I'm glad you liked the lyrics- hopefully they set the mood I was going for.