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Reviewer: Duchess Cupcake Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2018 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1

Lovely. Raw and unfiltered but still adorable and charming Jim is the best. Really wonderful.

Reviewer: InternationalBusinessTraveller Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2009 12:32 am Title: Chapter 1

I somehow have missed this one before - I hope you're still reading reviews for it. Because I loved it. Pitch perfect!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: December 27, 2008 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

This story is still just as beautiful and powerful as it was the first time I read it way back when.  In the midst of such a story drought, it's great to revisit a classic like this.  I'm fairly certain this is the story that made me want to join MTT in the first place.  Just beautiful.

Reviewer: kth201 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2007 09:49 am Title: Chapter 1

I know this story was written awhile ago, but I just recently discovered it, and I keep coming back to it time and again. I've read it something like 10 times now, and it cheers me up every time. I love how free-flowing it is, but yet tight and to the point. Everything is wonderful and so in character. Wonderful job.

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: February 04, 2007 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

inspiration comes from the strangest places, but good story

Reviewer: Emma Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27, 2007 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is amazing! I just read it twice, and I think I am in love with it....

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: January 26, 2007 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1

Loved it.  And I like the run-ons.  I tend to do the same thing.:)

Reviewer: Brandy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 18, 2006 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow. If I was a better writer I'd have something more to say than just, "wow"..but I don't.

Reviewer: Catherine Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: October 08, 2006 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow.

Wow.

You wrote a first-person run-on-sentence-filled story, and I absolutely loved it.

Wow.

Reviewer: Leely Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2006 08:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is just lovely, so much so that I can't express it better than that.  The tone and imagery give it a dream-like quality, but it's still very realistic.  Which is damned impressive.

 (And interior monologues are supposed to be run-on sentences.  Never trust anyone whose innermost thoughts are grammatically correct!)

Reviewer: PuffingNoise Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 02, 2006 05:57 am Title: Chapter 1

I love this story, and the run-on sentences. This is one of those types of stories that works really well with the long, run-on sentences. It gives it that certain flow.

Reviewer: MrsKamorri Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: July 23, 2006 12:48 am Title: Chapter 1

I really, really like this. It's different (which is probably why I am leaving a review :)) I love how he's "horrible at dating" (which I can totally believe) yet he planned it well enough for them to be in the park at sunset. Reminds a bit of my own love and the night he proposed. He wasn't fabulous at dating either but he has always had a way of doing those little things.
I am a bit of a run-on sentence maker too. I enjoyed yours a lot.

Reviewer: shannanagin Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 04:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

Absolutely beautiful. The repeating image of the orange light is perfect. I love the use of the "fucking adorable" line.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 08:57 am Title: Chapter 1

I agree with nqllisi about how the run-on sentences work so well with this story. I loved it. I also agree with the others re the straps and the shoulders. Sigh.....

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 08:14 am Title: Chapter 1

Having the story revolve around a light really worked well. The prose was so lovely, and I could really picture their date.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 08:07 am Title: Chapter 1

Your "run-on sentences" totally capture that tumultuous feeling of a first date. This is fantastic (not that I'm surprised).

Reviewer: lano Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 02:14 am Title: Chapter 1

Gah, so lovely. I'd like add myself to the list of people who love the kissing shoulders line.

Reviewer: princesslisa Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2006 12:48 am Title: Chapter 1

I loved it! Such an amazing job at the Jim POV. I just want more.

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 11:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm grateful for the little orange light that inspired you...I loved reading about their first date.

Reviewer: tabitha Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 11:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was absolutely fantastic. LOVE this:

I’m horrible at dating and picked you up too early because I wanted to be there in that garden with you when the sun was setting so that I could see if your skin really would look beautiful against the dying day like I thought it would.

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was fantastic! Just achingly lovely. I love Jim POVs, and you do not disappoint!

Reviewer: yippee Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

so lovely...just really really beatuful.

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

Chelsea just posted the exact line that made me swoon.

Well done - evocative, but grounded. Does that make sense?

Reviewer: Chelsea Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1

I have absolutely no self control anymore and I’m kissing your shoulders, pushing the straps aside.

Hottest thing to imagine Jim doing, ever.

Reviewer: Pixel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2006 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful, as usual.

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