Date: March 16, 2007 08:12 pm Title: You Used to Talk to Me
fyi - you can respond to reviews on the reviews page :). makes it easier.
good writing for being only 13.
some of the formatting is weird, with no line breaks, makes it hard to read. i think that was just a copy paste error.
liking the story so far :)
Author's Response: haha thanks im a little new at this... thanks for the tips i think ill fix that today when i get time =)
Date: March 16, 2007 05:13 pm Title: Love what I got, or got what I love
Its good. I always wanted a mood ring when I was little. My brother got one, and he didn't want it, but he was just evil enough not to give it to me.
Anyways, ignoring my childhood. This was a great story. I liked Karen's POV. She knows he is perfect, but she also realizing that she may be not a source of happiness. great job
Date: March 16, 2007 04:39 pm Title: Love what I got, or got what I love
Interesting. I'm not sure Karen really thinks Jim loves her, or that he actually has said he does at this point. Still, a nice look into a possible POV for Karen.
I look forward to the next chapter. Pam is one of my favorites, so it's great she's next. (Oh, heck, I like 'em all!)
10 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2007 03:57 pm Title: Love what I got, or got what I love
This is good! It's sooo believeable for Karenn! Can;t wait to read Pam's!!