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Reviewer: PBandTuna Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2019 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Please continue this! Your writing style is fantastic and captures the true essence of Jim and Pam.

Reviewer: BecauseOfYou Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2018 08:35 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

If ever the convo in chapter one were to have happened this is exactly how it would have gone. This is Pam 100%. This story has earned a spot in my favorites because the first chapter is so exceptional. And this third chapter is so emotional and intense that I found myself holding my breath. I’m so extremely saddened to never know what was to come next.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2010 04:29 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

Amazinnnnnng!

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2010 04:29 am Title: Chapter 1--To Recreate Us

I forgot how much I love this story!!!

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2010 04:18 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Okay no, you have to update this...

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11, 2009 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Nooooooooooooo!  I'm totally sucked into this story and there's nothing more to read!  Are you still out there, The Library Clerk?  I'd love for you to continue! 

Reviewer: albie_ Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1--To Recreate Us

Missing this fic. Hope you update soon!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: April 23, 2007 06:42 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Just read all three and can't wait to see where you go with this.

Reviewer: Cate the Great Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22, 2007 02:46 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

I love how you had Jim just knock Dwight over, it really made my day. Also, I like Greg. He just seems like a cool guy.

Keep them coming! ;)

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22, 2007 11:54 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Ohhh, this is pretty heartbreaking. Wonderfully written, but painful!

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22, 2007 09:10 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

This story has got me mesmerized. The idea of something major, catastrophic happening just as Pam and Jim are FINALLY ready to be together, all emotions out on the table...seriously, it is just fascinating to me.

I loved Pam's discussions with Greg, Jim's reactions to Pam's accident...I wish I could be more specific, but I just really really like thi story a lot. It's well written and the characterization is spot on to me. Especially Michael wanting to be drawn semi-nude, then playing on the stretcher, then throwing up. 

Can't wait for more. Well done! 

Reviewer: oypoodle Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22, 2007 07:51 am Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Love this story. You are an amazing amazing writer. I love how you change viewpoints and the characters are spot on. Also, I love this line:

“I’m in love with him. I told him Friday night. He loves me back. We’re supposed to go out on a date.”

It made my heart happy. So adorable. Please continue.

Reviewer: juteux Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 10:59 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

I must admit I am a huge sucker for H/C so I am loving this. Poor Pam! Poor Jim! I can't wait for more.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

I think Pam wouldn't be that embarrassed.  Terrified, yes, because she'd probably immediately think about whether she'd be paralyzed, or whether she was going to die, or something like that.  Also, focused on all the pain, certainly.  But embarrassment is more of a teenager response to an emergency, I think.  Pam would know that she may have just tragically altered her entire life in a single misstep.

Other than that, this was certainly interesting.  I like your description of how people kind of froze until Pam screamed.  I like how Pam sort of babbled about personal things, and how Greg said "I think if you love each other, a date is pretty reasonable"!

You were promising eventual JAMmy sex in your review responses!  You will be held to that! 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the critique--I appreciate your points re: Pam.  I can definitely see some areas to work on about that--I did want her to feel *somewhat* embarrassed, but that shouldn't have drawn away from the whole "Will I ever walk again?" thing. ;-)  Thanks so much for that!

 Oh, the Jam sex will arrive.  Don't you worry about that.  :-)



Author's Response: ETA:  This chapter has officially been altered (see: removal of Pam's more childlike qualities) by Yours Troolee.  Thank you, and good night.  

Reviewer: angie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

I liked it. Not confusing or boring at all.  I would definitely suggest that you keep going.

Reviewer: the_squirrel Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

it wasnt confusting or boring. its really good and i hope to read more of it.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks!  I really appreciate that.  :-)

Reviewer: sakuod Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 1--To Recreate Us

I am really enjoying this so far, although I really hope that Pam is just hurt and not paralyzed from the fall.  Also, despite the fact that Pam was injured I  must admit I laughed out loud when you described Michael first being on the gurney and then throwing up...very Michael like.  Please update soon and try not to be too brutal with Pam's prognosis.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  For the record, I know a kid who did this--was around an accident, felt nauseated from looking at it, and hopped on the gurney meant for the critically injured person!  He even asked if he could share a ride to the ER to be looked at.  Frustrating kid, that one.

 Re: Pam--what, do you not trust me to be kind to her? :-D

Reviewer: Jen74 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

Oh, I thought it was great.  I liked how we got both point of views.  I hope you can update this soon.

Author's Response: I hope I can update it soon, too.  My husband keeps yappin' about leaving the computer and participating in "quality time" or some weird crap like that.  :-)

Reviewer: sundancekid Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 3--Every Day is the Wrong Day

I'm really curious about where this is going; I haven't read anything else like it.  I liked the touches about Angela staying calm, getting Pam's info to the paramedics, and Michael throwing up.  Very realistic.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review--I really appreciate your comments.  One of my concerns is that it won't be realistic, or that it will be realistic in a way that gets sort of boring.  I'm excited about the next chapter, though.  There was one part I was really looking forward to writing, and I think it came out really well.  Now, if I can get my laptop charged without my power cord starting to melt again--seriously, *melt*--I can get crackin' on the edits.

Reviewer: Geinnob Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 06:10 pm Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

I am favoriting this RIGHT NOW.  I asolutely love this - and I love your phrasing and writing style.  The cliffhanger is very nearly killing me - in short, brava!

Also, I re-read the first part, and have to reiterate my previous statement about "You're breaking my heart Beesly."  That just does me in.

(Are you a librarian?  I spent many years employed at the public library - I may have to express some book geek solidarity.)



Author's Response:

I'm a year or two away from starting my MILS, so I'm just a lowly clerk right now--but there are perks (Book repair!  Fine cancellation!  Cat-eye glasses!  Comp time!).  I love it, and couldn't imagine working anywhere else.  I really appreciate the review--it makes me feel warm and bubbly inside.  :-)  Look for the next chapter on Saturday--hopefully I can maintain people's interest with the next one.

 

Happy National Library Workers Week! 

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 09:35 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

oh my gosh. now i'm dying to know what happens! will you PLEASE update soon!!!


Author's Response: Since you're polite, I feel obliged to say yes.  :-)

Reviewer: Clare Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 09:30 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

wow! This is really well done. It feels very.... real. Michael was spot on, and I loved the "Do we get new names?" from Pam. I can't wait to see what happens next.


Author's Response:

Me neither.  Whenever I start to visualize it, I interrupt myself by thinking about the funniest parts of recent episodes, and then instead of writing I'm replaying the episode on my computer and laughing.  It's really distracting.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: maryuc Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 08:51 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

Oh no!  Please dont have ranything bad happen to Pam!  i love that they are togetherbut still all shy.  I love it!  please dont hurt Pam though!! please!!!

Author's Response: I think Pam's emotional shyness in endearing and adorable (while sometimes frustrating), and I was hoping that shyness she has was reflected adequately in the piece.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 07:12 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

No, no, no, no, no!  Just when we have single Pam and single Jim in the same town, with an agreement to JAM things up, Pam slips and hurts herself?  Aaargh!  And you didn't even let them have sex yet.  You are evil like a hobbit.

Next chapter, please?  And don't make Pam paralyzed or anything, okay?  Little teeny bump on the head, little teeny gash that Jim has to take her to the hospital to be stitched for, something like that!  (Can't take too much angst!) 



Author's Response:

Evil like a hobbit?  Sweet. 

Thanks for the review--it was wonderfully encouraging for me.  I'll write regardless, but you guys make me want to do it so much faster!  Also, I can personally guarantee that there will be several instances of hot, sweaty, deliciously awkward Jam sex.  I just can't help myself.

Reviewer: such_a_dork Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 18, 2007 05:30 am Title: Chapter 2--Sound of Sounds

Hi! Ok, so this is my very first review that I've ever written and I'm a little nervous for some reason... Anyway, I just wanted to say how much I absolutely,completely adore this fic. It's so great. I love how you insert details that are completely in character and natural and... my brain is frozen and I can't think of how to exactly explain it... "He watched as her arms flexed to cross in front of her chest, and she put them back down at her side. *What are you so conflicted about?*" is an example of what I'm talking about. It's so in character and natural for Pam to physically move that way in that moment and for Jim to notice it. Another example is "*Come on, don't do this,* Pam told herself was she wrapped her sheets tighter around her." I've noticed on the show that Pam sometimes hides her hands under her cardigan sleeves, uses the material to wrap around herself like one would with your safety blanket as a kid. In the first chapter, how Pam confronted and talked to Jim was such a perfect balance of assertive Fancy New Beesly, the 'old' Pam's deep caution, and Pam's inherent kindness and caring. A scene like that seriously needs to happen on the show. You've written such a great story I could just end up quoting the entire thing back to you of examples of things I like! It's very rare for me to read a fic that so seamlessly incorporates character details/insights like you have in this story (and I read a lot of fics, I probably spend too much time obsessing over this show than is healthy! I just keep reasoning to myself that it's a hobby I'm very dedicated to, lol). I have a tendency to ramble and things just always sound better and make way more sense in my head then when I write them so I hope you're able to some sense of what I'm trying to say ;-) Basically, it's just awesome! It's an awesome story and you're an awesome writer. I cannot wait to read the next chapter! And the chapter after that, and the chapter that... ;-)
-Lisa



Author's Response:

I am so unbelievably flattered by your review.  It means a great deal that you took the time to say all this!  I'm very glad you enjoyed it, and I'll be issuing the next chapter shortly (just as soon as I know half the words aren't misspelled).  I also have a problem with reading far too much fanfic for my own good.  I guess I just have waaay too much free time, but I like the idea of it being a very dedicated hobby . . . :-)

 

 

 

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