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Reviewer: fangasmpodcast Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: January 20, 2019 10:20 am Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

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Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 05:23 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

beautiful end, i think it made this story a lot better than i admitted in my previous review. great job with this one, and heather was a great addition to the mix. i'll be reading other work by you this weekend, when i have friday and monday off of school. i'm so excited!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 05:18 pm Title: Ain't the Beer Cold?

ah, so cute. i definitely appreciated the frothy chapter, and i hate to say it, but i'm much more of a fan of the 2nd art show than this one. sorry, i just like how the first was more lightweight, more jim AND pam, than the two of them seperate. just a little honest feedback, and hope you don't take offense. ps. love tipsy pam, that's more like it! and i'd give you an eleven for this!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 05:14 pm Title: Staring at the Ceiling

couldn't resist dropping a short review here. i am so delighted to see pam notice what kind of person jim really is. so realistic and completely true! just had to say that, and i'm going to finish then call it a day of reading. my favorite chapter of this story!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 05:10 pm Title: Battle of the Levinsons

very nice, i think you definitely portrayed maj (michael and jan, oh crap, backwards is jam. oops!) very well. i'm running out of time her so i might pull out of reviews. great job though, and i'm excited to finish this!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 05:04 pm Title: The Least Imperfect Man

i actually was expecting this. i think i have a extremely logical brain, so this seemed as realistic as possible for a fictional story. great job with that, and it's nice to see pam's reactions to the art, i like that she doesn't really care. that's great, actually!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 04:58 pm Title: Just Look at Her

very nice. but what on earth does TWSS mean. i feel pretty stupid i haven't caught on yet. i think this was my favorite chapter so far of this story, great job!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 04:51 pm Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

i love lisa, good for her, that's just what they needed! that's all i'm going to say.

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 04:47 pm Title: Disappearing Acts

whew. that was intense, nice display of the anger, it was very well done showing both of their sides, i like how you didn't use any bias. i feel bad for both of them, but i really hate seeing pam so mad at jim. he does so much for her, and i know she loves him, but she can get really angry. a suggestion, try to show jim being angry at pam for something, but that's probably too late, you're already done with the story. nice job with this chapter, though!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 04:39 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

i love the quick pace, yet still leaving attention to details, you certainly have a gift for that! i definitely do see a different pam in this chapter especially, she seems very independant and in charge of herself, but i'm not so sure i like it. i wonder what's going on now, though...

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2009 04:12 pm Title: You're Telling Me You Slept with Willie Nelson?

yay pam. i'm so glad to see that all these people have respect for her art, she certainly deserves it after putting up with all that shit from roy. though i do feel for jim too, it must be hard to come home from a day on the job not to be alone with pam as he wanted. great job, brokenloom, this is a great story!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 04, 2009 11:21 pm Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

ah. very nice. i love how you described jim's feelings of watching pam paint and her art in general. very well written (i love that i've never seen a typo in any one of your stories or chapters!!!) and i can't wait to read more tomorrow!

Reviewer: variella Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2008 08:34 am Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

Nice. Jim and Pam may be adults, but I think they're both adolescents, emotionally speaking, so this seems a natural consequence of that. Loving Lisa in the fic; nobody can succeed without a mentor or role model of sorts and that is a role Jim simply could not take on.

You're right about relationships having one issue that will keep coming back to them, and this seems to be theirs.

Author's Response: Wow, it's neat to get some new reviews on an old piece.  I'm gratified you're reading and appreciate your thoughtful comments.

Reviewer: variella Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2008 08:28 am Title: Disappearing Acts

Speaking as an extraordinarily moody woman (and officially diagnosed as such :) ) with very nearly the same issues as Pam... you are more than fair, and describing the feelings in Jim that my extraordinarily understanding and patient man has had to deal with.

I thought you did well at 'painting' Pam's feelings without too much sympathy or taking sides with her. I really liked knowing that you are writing Jim from personal experience to some extent- something I think is missing sometimes with the majority of writers being women.

Enjoying this so, so much.

Reviewer: albie_ Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 21, 2007 08:22 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

I just reread both your art show stories and got to enjoy them all over again. I really love the dynamic that you capture here with Jim and Pam and the very delicate balance of couplehood. I also liked your attentions to Pam's dipping into the art world and Jim's own advancement adn development. I do hope that you'll return to this universe again and maybe give us a fourth art show :)

Reviewer: MixedBerryJam Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07, 2007 07:41 pm Title: Battle of the Levinsons

you have captured jan PITCH PERFECTLY!!! OMG.

 you are so one of my new favorite writers.



Author's Response: Thanks MBJ, I'm very flattered.

Reviewer: Stilla Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 04:25 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

You did a great job with this; your attention to the strange combustion engine that is Michael and Jan was great, and the way you went into Jim's reality - you know, being perfect and still a little flawed, and actually maturing into being a boss? Really fantastic. A nice happiness that's not complete saccharine. 

Author's Response: Thanks, what a nice little bonus to get your review.  Happy without being totally saccharine is pretty much what I aim for, glad it hit the mark for you. 

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11, 2007 06:39 am Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

I really liked this epilogue, Loon. It was the perfect way to conclude the story -- bringing things full circle, to have Pam mentoring, inspiring someone the way that Lisa did to her. And then to have *that* be a flash-forward, bringing the story back to the present for the conclusion...just a really effective plot device. Plus Jim with champagne, up on the terrace that was such an important symbol of 'realizing her dreams' to Pam...just perfect.

Loved it. Can't wait to see what else you have in mind for Doggerel...that one's not finished is it? Or else what ever other story ideas you have floating around! 



Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much.  When I read it, the ending still feels a little off to me, so I'm glad for the positive feedback.  Doggerel   isn't done, but I'm a little stuck on it.  I have some other ideas simmering, one of them very ambitious.  Thanks a ton for all the kind feedback. 

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11, 2007 04:43 am Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

I really love the idea (though I've come to loathe the word) of Pam evolving enough to be able to help another young woman in a similar situation or mindset someday.  Very cool idea.  

And the bit at the end?  Oh Jim.  Swoon. :)



Author's Response: Thanks xoxoxo...the saving Heather bit was in my head from the beginning and motivated me to write my way to the conclusion.  I adore Pam so much, I love writing about her doing well. 

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 10:01 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

So much to love about this chapter! What a GREAT thing that would be to happen to Pam. To find someone that she could really sort of mentor. I think it would help HER so much in becoming more secure in herself. And a glimpse into Jim's future as well.  Awesome! Thanks for this story.

Author's Response: Thanks LoveFool.  I really like the idea of Pam as mentor as well.  I tried to convey here that her very Pamness-being a little unsure of herself and nervous but naturally kind and compassionate-made the connection possible.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 08:49 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

Oh, this is just so lovely!  What a wonderful way to end it!  I love how you introduced this other character and fleshed her out quickly and inserted her into the world we know and love, updating us on Jim and Pam in the process.

This story has been a lot of fun.  Thanks for it. 



Author's Response: Thanks TLK, I'm so glad you enjoyed it.  It's definitely been my favorite of the stories I've written, and I will likely come back for another installment at some point.  

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 08:38 pm Title: Heather Kent's Teacher

SO SWEET! what a great way to end a wonderful fic! it's so awesome that Pam can become a haven for someone else to talk them out of the hole they've put themself in. i love Heather's character, even though it's so opposite of where Pam was, there's such a strong parallel. great job! i hate that it's over! 

Author's Response: Sorry I somehow missed responding to this sooner.  Thanks so much for thie kind review.  I had this ending in mind before I started.  I may come back to this little universe and check up on Heather and Mr. and Mrs. Halpert at some point. 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 01:32 pm Title: Ain't the Beer Cold?

I don't remember why the baseball stadium wouldn't be a happy place.  Was that from a prior chapter?  If so, I've probably read hundreds of things since reading that, so... I don't remember.

I do remember the redwoods reference, though!  That one's hard to forget! 

I really like the line "Hey, maybe we can go to Chili’s after the…oh, never mind, we can’t."! 



Author's Response: Jim spent a miserable evening in the baseball stadium in Chapter 5.  Thanks as always TLK, I just posted the final chapter which I hope you enjoy. 

Reviewer: JRAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08, 2007 08:56 pm Title: Ain't the Beer Cold?

Just caught up on the last two...

 I definitely liked Jim's musings in the last one about getting ready to be the boss, I think you totally nailed that one

And I'm glad that Pam is going to paint for herself for awhile...I think she'd be a great art teacher, but I don't really see her as doing the whole gallery thing all the time

 Them at the baseball stadium was so cute--and Jim is the best husband ever!

 

Keep up the great work! 



Author's Response: Thanks...I wonder if somewhere down the road Jim will face that issue on the show.  It would be interesting to see him figure out a way to be in charge but still be true to himself.  Of course I mean his real self, not the current bitter, frustrated version.  The baseball part was fun to write, glad you liked it.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08, 2007 08:23 pm Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

Oh man ok Pam and I officially have something in common...slim knowledge of baseball but a great love for stadium snacks. Loved the light and frothy chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks, the froth was fun to write.  And it's always fun, albeit expensive, to eat at the stadium.

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