Date: April 03, 2007 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice. Short and sweet and to the point. I actually like that she wanted that piece of film - both as a reminder of when it was good and a reminder to never to let that happen again.
Author's Response: Thanks belsum! Hope she's learned a valuable lesson.
Date: April 03, 2007 10:15 am Title: Chapter 1
This cannot happen soon enough!!! I don't know how it is possible, but I think I love you just a little bit more than I did yesterday, Par5!
Author's Response: Thanks, lisahoo, you're too kind! My mission here has been accomplished.
Date: April 03, 2007 08:03 am Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful. The prose is spare and straightforward, like Karen herself. It would get ridiculous if you got too melodramatic or sentimental, much as you've portrayed Karen as ridiculous for falling into that trap herself. Your substance and your style mesh so beautifully here that I can't even quote a favorite line. Except maybe the last one, because she's LEAVING. Gorgeous, Par5!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, lis! Coming from the master of succint prose, that means a lot. Glad you liked it and I have to say, the leaving part really is hard to beat! ;-)
Author's Response: Oops - I meant "succinct"!
Date: April 03, 2007 07:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Sigh. Poor Karen :( This was lovely. Loved the comparison to the friend that she never wanted to be. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks Dinkin! Hasn't everybody done something stupid in the name of love? Hopefully she'll learn from this as she moves away. Far, far away...
Date: April 03, 2007 07:43 am Title: Chapter 1
If only it could go this way!
I could definitely see Karen cringing while watching that bit of tape. "What was I thinking? I knew he wasn't into me! Now I look like an idiot." I don't normally feel too bad for Karen, but you made me this time.
You gave a very believable and succinct portrait of "the Scranton months" from Karen's POV! I certainly enjoyed that. And I always love any mention of the camera/production crew.
I've always thought that if Jim or Pam (or Karen) could see just one of the excellent Jim/Pam Youtube videos, things would be so different!
(And yay for movers coming for Karen's stuff. Was that mean?)
Author's Response: What do you mean "if only"?! Don't you mean "when it goes this way"? Don't feel too badly for her - I'm sure she only saw what she wanted to see! Besides, maybe one of the movers will ask her out. ;-)
Date: April 03, 2007 07:37 am Title: Chapter 1
I really like this! I remember liking Karen before she became "just a Jam obstacle" and this is really true to that.
And I can't help but like the fact that she's leaving. :)
Yes, Karen used to be cool and it's too bad she can't stay but you can hear the music coming up and her time is coming to a close! Thank you and we have some lovely parting gifts for you! Now start packing...
Date: April 03, 2007 07:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Glad you got around to posting this...(I kid.) What's so great is how you hit the right notes - Karen is sympathetic, but no one's fool, Jim has apparently come to his senses (a good pop in the nose tends to have that effect!) - but you've kept this succinct and to the point. It gets the job done, packs an emotional wallop, but isn't overwritten or melodramatic. Especially like how Karen notices how Jim is just different in Scranton...perhaps she should have actually gotten to know him before moving for him? Ya think? Anyway, well done, as one would expect from you Ms. Par.
Author's Response: Oh, Colette, ribbing about the pace of my posting? So cold. So very cold. Like your feelings towards Ms. Fillippelli. But judge not as you ask yourself whether you might also have followed a tall lanky salesman to Scranton if there was nothing better on your plate! I think we know how that would play out... Thanks, my dear, as always for your astute commentary!
Date: April 03, 2007 07:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, you so make me want to feel badly for Karen, to throw my arms around her and give her a comforting hug.....
but, nah. See ya, Fillipelli! ;-)
Very nice work. I'll have to talk to your agent about booking us into a joint-act. ;-)
Hee! Yes, I too feel bad for her. For about five seconds. But the minute the taillights of the U-Haul disappear from view, I think we'll be fine. Really.
Date: April 03, 2007 07:09 am Title: Chapter 1
first off, thats what AB repeat is, I hadn't figured it out (i'm a bit slow)...
second, okay, I cave. I like Karen I hate that she is going to get hurt. I feel sorry for wishing her harm way back in Octoberish or whenever. :(. Cause really, its just so sad!!!!
Author's Response: Emily, you've watched CN and haven't used A-B repeat to watch "the kiss" over and over? That's why they invented it! ;-) It's not Karen's fault Mr. Halpert can't be honest with himself but don't be sad when she goes!