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Reviewer: singular_impatience Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

So that was...interesting. Well-written, but I'm a little too shocked right now by Todd Packer getting in the middle of the mafia to give any constructive criticism. Nice.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

Now, I don't condone violence, but... well, he does deserve it (/Jim).  this was really pretty funny.  I love how this guy knows there's a beet farm nearby.  

It's amazing whenever Packer comes on how incredibly obnoxious he is, and yet it always makes for such fun episodes!  You certainly have Packer down in your story!   

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

And that? Is the best end I can imagine for Todd Packer. Bravo.

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