Date: May 26, 2007 08:48 am Title: Chapter 4
I was just seeking out this story the other day as I was wondering where it went off to. And here is an update! I really enjoyed this story and what respect you gave to all relationships. If you never write another fanfic, this was a great note to come in and go out on.
Author's Response: Thanks alot, albie. I really appreciate your compliments. How nice!
Date: May 25, 2007 11:23 am Title: Chapter 4
Very nice, Daoust. This was a wonderful first story, and I really think you should keep at it. This was such a great story, so you've now got the challenge of topping yourself. Keep up the great work; can't wait to read more of your stuff!!!
Author's Response: Awesome. Glad you liked it. Thanks for your support and encouragement. 11:59 Rocks my socks off!
Date: April 27, 2007 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 3
Sorry, I left a review a while ago but I didn't phrase it write, i deleted it...so here is my new one:
I really like this story. Im really suprised it hasn't been done before and you are doing a great job with it. I love that you write Jim and Pam very open with each other, i've had enough of them denying everything. I really liked this and can't wait to read what you come up wiht next.
Date: April 20, 2007 10:10 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh it just keeps getting better and better. Good name for the daughter too, though that's my dog's name, and now I can't get the image of a brown puppy out of my head when I read this story hehe.
Your pacing of this story is great and I can't wait to see where it's going. Great work!
Date: April 20, 2007 08:16 am Title: Chapter 2
Hmmm...okay, now I really have to know what's going on. I really like the way that you've presented Pam in this fic, struggling with her feelings, but still being a good person.
Thanks so much.
Date: April 20, 2007 07:52 am Title: Chapter 2
Nice story. I'm guessing Karen and Jim are divorced. Hoping anyway!
There are some definite spelling errors and such in your story, you may want to ask someone to beta if you didn't already. Plus, I think Pam envisioned herself as the mother of Jim's kids, not the father.
I like the little daughter; she seems pretty much like a regular kid (hiding behind Daddy's legs, etc.) - very realistic.
Ooh, maybe he never married Karen, but she was pregnant when they left Scranton! They've been sharing custody, but not living quarters, all this time. Yeah, I like that one!
I'm interested to see where this goes next.
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments, Kev. Yeah, there probably were a few more spelling and grammar errors in this chapter than the last one. It was published a little quicker. I do have a three year old daughter of my own, so I hope I have a few of the mannerisms down. Thanks again!
Date: April 20, 2007 07:29 am Title: Chapter 2
Hmm. Now you have me intrigued by Jim AND Karen! But I loved how despite Pam's upset, that she and Jim just naturally drifted back into smiles and banter. *sigh*
Go Pam, wearing her hot jeans again! Yay!
Can't wait for more!
Date: April 19, 2007 05:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
OMG! Man, I was NOT expecting THAT. But it's believeable. I can't wait to hear exactly what's been going on with Jim for the last three years...
One small nitpick -- if the child is supposed to be Jim's, you might want to watch how complex her speech is. I have a three-year-old, that's why her language stuck out to me as a little advanced. (And what would Jim's daughter be by now -- two-and-a-half?) But it's just an observation, and my kid could be exceptionally slow, speech-wise. Don't mind me!
You've got me hooked. (And I LOVE long chapters!) More, please!
Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism, lapdog. I hadn't thought about the complexity of her speech, but lets just say in my mind Jim's daughter is at least as old as you assume she is, maybe older. So at that age, I believe she could say what I have her saying. Thanks for your input though.
Date: April 18, 2007 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting. Can I assume Jim's divorced? (I hope, I hope, I hope?)
I'm interested to see what happens next.
Can you control the size of the font, though? Those letters are really teeny (unlike in other stories), and I had to go get my drugstore-special 1.25X magnifier glasses to read it. And found that I wish I had gotten the 2X magnifier glasses! So, for those of us with old eyes, if you can make that font bigger, please do. Thanks.
Author's Response: Is Jim divorced? Only time will tell. Yeah, sorry about the font. I don't know how to fix it either. Oh well. I'll make chapter 2 a bigger font.
Date: April 18, 2007 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, Daoust! It's a GREAT story and it's breaking my heart. Keep it up by!
Author's Response: Thanks, alot! Sorry about the small font. I can't fix it either for some reason. Chapter two is done, I'm just waiting to see how Ch. 1 is received.
Date: April 18, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Did not see that coming.
I love the angst factor that you've presented here and I cannot wait so see what else you've got up your sleeve.
Thanks so much.
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind words. This is my first attempt at fanfic, so hopefully it is generally well received.
Date: April 18, 2007 10:48 am Title: Chapter 1
First of all, aww poor Creed!
Secondly, yikes! I did not see that coming. Somehow while reading that Jim was so glad she wasn't married, I didn't even think maybe he is?
Author's Response: Hey thanks! I'm glad it fooled you! That means it worked! Hope you stay tuned for the next installment!