1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2019 07:12 pm Title: Jim
All of this is well-done, but especially "All that old sick panic was right back in the pit of his stomach. He had kissed her and she didn’t want him and everybody knew it, and apparently nobody was ever going to let him forget it." Very apt.
Date: April 26, 2007 02:19 pm Title: Jim
I don’t have anything left to give you, Pam, you‘ve taken it all.
Oh, wow. That line. It's so true, so exactly what he was conveying in that scene. It's horrible because...what if it is true? What if there's nothing left for them? This is really nice.
Date: April 26, 2007 07:42 am Title: Jim
I love the last line of this story. "I meant to get chips." So great--nice job capturing the tension and turmoil. Gotta love some Jam angst early in the mornin'! -CH
10 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2007 06:59 am Title: Jim
That was really quite good! Yay! And loved the last lines. :-)
Date: April 25, 2007 11:00 pm Title: Jim
I had to LOL at the title of this fic. Hee! FYI, your verb tense is a little inconsistent. I think you meant for the story to be mostly in present tense with the background stuff in past perfect, but it veers off at times. :)
But a good idea. I look forward to seeing where you go with it.