Date: April 29, 2007 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Adorable. I liked how Pam explained how Casino Night was good for her even after all the hell they went through since then. (Hopefully we'll be able to say the same soon).
Author's Response: I hope so too! It's about time.
Date: April 29, 2007 10:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Good awkward small-talk. I got a really good feel for Pam's frustration in her 2-word replies. These two are definitely like a copier that keeps jamming - nice premise!
Author's Response: Yep, sadly, they are like a copier. Thanks for taking time to comment!
Date: April 28, 2007 09:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really liked this story. Especially the way you added the little ensemble bits to make it really realistic (Phyllis and Stanley's adroitness with other machines) to the feel of the show. And their conversation at the end was nicely done. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad it worked well within the framework established by the show.
Date: April 28, 2007 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the changes you made. It flows much more smoothly now. I really hope that it plays out something like this - a quiet recognition of mutual mistakes.
You should write more often my dear. ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the beta, my dear! It was so helpful. And I can't believe I forgot to add my dearest thanks to you in my author's notes. Where is my head tonight? I'll remedy that right now.
Date: April 28, 2007 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very well done. It's interesting, they could finally coneect after some epic struggle, or it could be something as matter-of-fact as this. I found their exchange very realistic and thought you did a particularly good job in writing Jim's voice. One thing...the genre is misleading, I think, I would add "romance" as well as "angst". I almost passed on it because I assumed it would be nothing but angst.
I always though that it would be a little thing that would finally tip the glass over, and make them be finally honest with each other but I'm glad it works for others as well. I'm glad it felt realistic because that is totally what I was aiming for. :) Thank you!
Oh, thanks for pointing out the genre stuff! I was a little distracted and missed adding the romance label. Bad admin me.
Date: April 28, 2007 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
What a sweet and happy little story to read tonight! Nice to know the PLoD can become the PLoL, yea! And since I think this story deserves a ribbon, and I know you would agree if someone else were the author, I as a co-admin will give this story a ribbon that it richly deserves!
Author's Response: Oh, you're so sweet to give me a ribbon. Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And yes, they need to make better memories in this parking lot.
Date: April 28, 2007 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
As someone who is always asked to find the paper jams of the copiers at work, I can completely relate!!! Of course, if it were Jim that needed help, I wouldn't roll my eyes and curse people under my breath:)
Fantastic premise and wonderful execution! Loved it!!
Thank you so much! :) I agree that if Jim were to ask me to look at the copier for him, I'd be more than happy to do it... It must suck to be the one to deal with jams for everyone in the office! I only have to deal with my own jams and what annoys me most is that the copier won't stop beeping and flashing. I know you're not working, stupid copier! Just give me a second! Hee.
Date: April 28, 2007 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Have to say, the set-up of this story was possibly the most relatable of any I've read! Who hasn't done battle with the copy machine? What a great - and delightfully appropriate - premise. Love that Jim was excited to be doing something a bit 'more' in his job, love that he NEEDED Pam and mostly loved her giving him what for. (Spare me, Halpert indeed.) Give yourself a ribbon!
Author's Response: I am glad you found it relatable, because that was exactly what I was aiming for! I really enjoy stories that are grounded in the office setting, and this seemed an idea I hadn't read and couldn't pass up. I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed this! :)
Date: April 28, 2007 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Haha! I was like "what?" I didn't post anything! Oh! It's the title! Dummy.
So glad to see something by you. I loved it! Especially the part about copier repair by phone. So true. Great dialogue!
Author's Response: Hee. I realized the title was an odd coincidence, but it seemed too appropriate! Thank you for the nice comments. I'm always intimidated to post, especially since there are people like you who are just so talented at fiction writing, but I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)