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Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 4 - The prophecy of the Scottish Knight

Does Anne the servant have a cat named Ash?

I like the part with the slippers.  It's too bad she can't just tell Roy that she kissed the knight.  He'd throw his tankard of ale at something and she'd be done.  Although she might be branded and run out of town or something, so... probably not good. 



Author's Response:

Why yes Anne does! It's named after the ashes of the church. As is Cinders and Smoke.

If she told Roy that she kissed the knight by all the rights of chivalry he would be allowed to pierce her organs with his sword. Of course, Pam's brothers and fathers would then kill Roy. And then the Earl of Nuneaton would bring his army to bear..... So you're right.... not good.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 3 - A yearning for pure potash

You're painting a very rich picture here; I really like the detail.  I like how James son of Halpert is intrigued by the girl he almost smiled at.


Author's Response: Yeah, well, she's the girl. Gotta be intrigued by the girl.

Reviewer: KittyCat Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 10:51 am Title: Chapter 6 - To the health of Big Trout

I am lovin this story but I am confused as to which character Athelinda is representing, it sounds like Angela but seems like Katy/Karen

Author's Response: Yeah, every girl sounds like Angela... Angela SHOULD live in medieval times, she'd be so happy.... and horny. Athelinda is Karen which will become obvious, hopefully.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 10:10 am Title: Chapter 6 - To the health of Big Trout

Andy and the Big Trout!  OMG, you are an evil genius, Muggins!

Author's Response:

Well, good lord, wasn't it obvious?
As soon as I found out that Halpert was a Scottish name when I was researching for another story, I was like OKAY I have to somehow write a story about god knows what because Andy and a Scottish Jim Halpert would have the same FREAKING patron saint and Andrew's also the Saint of Fishermen and how freaking awesome is that? So AWESOME! It took some doing....

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 4 - The prophecy of the Scottish Knight

I know this doesn't add much from my last review, but holy smokes, I am FLOORED by your writing.  Wowsa.  The details about everyday life, the characters and their hard freaking lives are all so detailed and true to the period (as far as I know, heck!).  To quote Pam in 'The Convict', *surprised grin* "Wow!"

Author's Response: The lives were amazingly hard. If a person lived to 30 they were amazingly lucky! Everyday in every way I am glad I live in the 21st century and that I own a toilet. God bless toilets.

Reviewer: janelle Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 03:10 pm Title: Chapter 4 - The prophecy of the Scottish Knight

Oooh, I love this! It's very different, but the characterizations are still on. I've always liked stories about this time period :-)

Author's Response: I love this time period too! Thank you for reading!

Reviewer: Night Swept Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

This is really cool, really creative.  This could NOT have been easy to write such consistent, authentic sounding diction from feudal times, so this minstrel stands humbled by the brilliance of what thine quill hath wrought.  Yeah. It's not easy all right.  Great job!


Author's Response: so this minstrel stands humbled by the brilliance of what thine quill hath wrought. Wow! Very nice compliment in keeping with the theme of the story. I am humbled before your praise.
I'm fortunate/unfortunate that I work with medieval manuscripts day in, day out; so there's kind of this groove thing you get into once you start talking. I actually found it much harder to write the Kama Sutra thing that I did. I agonized over that one.... This kind of just rolls off the tongue.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 01:36 pm Title: Chapter 3 - A yearning for pure potash

Muggins, how do you do it?  This is amazing!  James, the knight in not quite shining armor.  Le sigh.

And I grin like an idiot each time a new character is introduced.  Hee! 



Author's Response: I'm dying trying to figure out how to fit in Dwight Schrute. It's such a German name. I'm going to have to get pretty creative on that one... luckily he's not showing up until the knights enter the lists, so I have some time to figure it out.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 30, 2007 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Her heart's desire, the King's Knight

I love how James, son of Halpert keeps catching her eye.  Drat that Roy of Neneaton, though!

Author's Response: Roy's a nasty piece of work.

Reviewer: Swedge Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

This was fun, keep it up. I'm not sure if this was your intent but it reminded me so far of Bernard Cornwell.


Author's Response: I've never actually read Cornwell. He writes the Sharpe's books, right? About the Napoleonic War? I may be getting him confused with Frobisher. Both writers are popular with my Dad so I'll tell him you said so. It'll make his week!

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

I love this idea!  I especially love the "epic" flavor that you put into the narrative.  Please continue!

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

Aw. How adorable.

Reviewer: Weetzie Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 12:10 pm Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

Interesting, I really like this a lot! I hope you write more! (Even though, I miss Girly Girl, a lot!)

Author's Response: Luckily I settled out of court with my Beta so now I can start publishing Girly Girl, too! So...second drink!

Reviewer: Becky215 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 11:03 am Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

Canterbury Tales meets "The Office?" Interesting...

Keep it up!



Author's Response:

The Wife of Bath's tale wouldn't DEFINITELY be the way to go.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2007 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1 - A plague drove him forth

"holy msn" , Muggins!  The Halperts were really space-age back then.  Or that's a typo.

Interesting setting for your story, and of course, I'm a fan of James, son of Halpert no matter what the era.  I'll be interested to see where you go with this.

I really like that he almost smiled at her!  I'm sure she saw it in his eyes. Neat.



Author's Response:

Thanks for finding the typo! I should have you beta everything!

I know this is a departure for MTT but I live and breathe this stuff at work each day so I thought it would be a nice challenge to see if I could incorporate the characters in to a typical Medieval village. The hardest part will be keeping Kelly from saying "Oh my god! Oh my god! Oh my god!" I'd have to burn her as a witch....

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