Date: May 11, 2007 09:34 pm Title: Stamford
Well, my heart is just broken. Nice one, Jim. I'd slap you if I could.
But, honestly, I sort of wish we'd seen a scene like this on the show. I'd like to have seen Pam reaching out to Jim, only to pull back at the last minute, because then we'd know for sure how she felt about him, and the parallel between her and Jim and their rejection of each other would be complete.
Well, that was a ramble, huh? Anyway, I loved the chapter. Very sad, but I loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. In my original outline of this chapter, I was going to have Jim and Pam talk and to have him tell her that he was trying to move on, but as I was writing it, this just sort of popped out.
9 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 09:33 pm Title: Lake Scranton
Awww, Dwight and Angela to the rescue. I love the way you have Jim ask Dwight to move- the words sound like Jim to me.
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm always glad to know that I got someone's voice right.
Date: May 11, 2007 09:31 pm Title: Atlantic City
Killer last line in this chapter. Poor Pam. I don't think Roy was really this much of a jerk, but it works for the story, so I'm all for it. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked the last line. As I said in another review, I didn't like to write Roy so mean, but I needed a way to get Pam on the bus.
Date: May 11, 2007 09:29 pm Title: Sleepaway Camp
Oh, how sweet. I love seeing Pam as a child, because she still has a childlike quality to her, so it really rings true. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks! Pam does have a childlike quality to her.
10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 06:16 pm Title: Stamford
Oh my... so awesome. I'd expect it from you! I can't wait for the BG one. -twitches while waiting-
Author's Response: Thanks so much Tasha! I appreciate your reviews!
Date: May 11, 2007 02:01 pm Title: Stamford
So cruel, but so well written. I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm glad you like my cruelty : )
10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 01:10 pm Title: Sleepaway Camp
Wow! I am totally hanging onto every word of this story. I can't wait until you post the last 2 chapters!!!
It's so heartbreaking! All of it! You've done a great job of writing it so far. :)
Author's Response: I'm so glad you are liking this story. Thanks so much for the kind words.
Date: May 11, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Stamford
She dialed the number and watched as Jim pulled his phone from his pocket. She watched as he flipped it open, read the caller ID information. In just a second he’d be smiling and she’d be talking with him like old times.
Then she saw him close the phone. She read his lips as he told the hussy, “Nothing.” Saw him keep laughing with her and follow her into her car.
Oh, wow! This would definitely explain the "why didn't Pam call Jim after she cancelled the wedding" issue. Ouch. Very creative!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'd like to think there was a reason. As always, I appreicate your reviews.
Date: May 11, 2007 12:34 pm Title: Stamford
Oh, GIITC, that was heartwrenching! And my emotions are already raw from last night! Nicely done, though, am looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I think many of us are still reeling from BG.
Date: May 11, 2007 12:34 pm Title: Stamford
Wow. Right in the grief bone!
Author's Response: Yours and mine!
9 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 12:21 pm Title: Stamford
oh wow, ch. 3 just broke my heart
nice work
Author's Response: It broke mine too! Thanks for your review.
Date: May 11, 2007 10:55 am Title: Atlantic City
Oh, poor sad Pam! This Roy is maybe a little worse than what we usually saw, but I think the details and the voices feel very realistic. I'm sure she was beautiful and everyone wondered why the pretty lady was crying.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hate to write as stereotypically bad!boyfriend, but I needed someway to get Pam on the bus. I really like Roy. I think he was just having a bad weekend.
9 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 09:07 am Title: Sleepaway Camp
Aw! Adorably cute first chapter. :) Looking forward to reading more!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it.
Date: May 11, 2007 08:59 am Title: Sleepaway Camp
Oh, poor little shy, sad Pam! Very realistic. She just needs some encouragement!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm always unsure about writing stuff that comes before the show (and this was long before). I appreciate your review!