9 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2011 11:39 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Azlin, not sure if you'll see this since this story is an oldie-but-goodie, but I just wanted you to know how much I enjoy revisiting it now and again. It looks like I never reviewed it, which is truly egregious. I must have first read it way early in my fic-reading days. I never tire of first-date fic and this is one of the best.
Date: May 30, 2007 04:31 pm Title: then and now
VERY NICE. Loved it. I actaully really liked the style of going back and forth... :) Keep it up! I hope to see more from you!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate the review, and I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: May 29, 2007 10:39 am Title: then and now
Hum, this is not related to the story at all, but you know when you hover over some things, it says something right near the little mouse thing? Well, as the page was loading this chapter, it said "clean up messy code" near the mouse. and that confused me... hum.... oh well. I can ignore it!
"How could he be so perfect? He was everything. He was funny and smart and ridiculously good-looking and on top of all that he was the best friend she’d ever had."
I know, damn him! Any relationship I have now will henceforth be compared to Jim. Seriously, I read the Mean Magazine article this morning, and its just like, GAH, he is perfect even as John! Wow, am I getting a bit to obsessive fangirl crazy? See, moments like this are when i realize I need a life OUTSIDE of The Office and Fanfiction, and maybe interact with the real people every once in a while...
I loved Pam thinking about the future with Jim... so great.
Okay, so, besides the fact that this firmly cemented the fact that I will be
1) grinning like a fool all afternoon
2) thinking about JAM all afternoon
this was awesome.
Now really, I have to go out and face the real world, because yeah, it doesn't care if I want to read fanfic, no, it says calls need to be made and letters mailed and things returned. Darnit real life.
Author's Response:
What? There's life outside The Office? Insert my sombrero-snort of doubt here.
And oh yes, that Mean Magazine article was completely HOT. Sigh. I'm in love--again. Or maybe still. Who cares? He's awesome. :)
Thanks for the reviews. I'm so glad you liked this!
Date: May 29, 2007 10:33 am Title: fancy new Beesly
"But tonight she wanted to scrape at her skin a bit, rid herself of the grimy build-up that was the past and just start over fresh."
I really really really like that anaolgy. Scrubbing off the past. Awesomeness.
"Was it wrong to be this happy?"
No Pam, you deserve to be this happy... now my question is, is it wrong to be this happy about two fictional characters? um, I will leave that question unanswered, because I am quite sure that I don't want to know the answer.
Yes Pam, Jim In Jeans = one of the hottest things imaginable!!! Gah, my brain just melts with the thought of it!
Even though this chapter had a bit more of a sad undercurrent talking about what it would be if Jim didn't return, he did return, and so, yes. Still happy.
Author's Response: Hm... is it wrong to be so happy about fictional characters? I think that all depends. It would be very, very wrong to be happy about Packer and Meredith hooking up, but Jim and Pam? No way.
Date: May 29, 2007 10:28 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
So, about an hour ago, I was like, okay, I will read one fanfic and then get to real life... and yet, here I am, an hour later. But really, this will be the last one. I need to get to target and the post office. And so, I decided since this really will be the last one, I needed to make it something good.
I don't lie awake with memories, I lie awake with daydreams... way to often. Its this show I tell ya. This show and fanfic. Suddenly, I have to just spend days and days dreaming about Jim... and just everything about this show. But mainly Jim. And there is a lot of grinning on my end. Hehe. I was grinning just reading about Pam grinning. I am such a dork.
"Just Jim." Okay, so I totally did a Just Jack/Will and Grace flash when I read that!!! AHAHAHAH
GAH! So smiling!!!
Yes, so my face has a huge smile, and a weird little giggle is coming out of my mouth, and my hands where making wierd little movements until I calmed them down enough to type this, so I consider this chapter a sucess...
Author's Response:
Okay, since I don't mind outting myself as a total dork, can I just say that your saying "I needed to make it something good" in reference to picking my story totally made my day!
Also, I think weird little hand movements may be one of the early warning signs of hot dog fingers, so if you start feeling the urge to dip your digits in ketchup be sure to get that checked out. ;)
Date: May 28, 2007 09:10 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
"I love you, Jim. I love you, I love you, I love you..." She smiled again and rolled over onto her side. This was exactly what she had waited for.
Perfect, this entire story. Don't worry about it being too sappy at the end, woman; Jim and Pam are dating for chrissakes, sappiness and tears of joy are to be expected and encouraged! Hee.
Wonderful job with this, Azlin!
Author's Response:
Oh good! I can definitely do sappy, but I didn't know if I'd gone overboard on this one, so I'm glad you thought it was okay. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 28, 2007 11:35 am Title: then and now
I love this. You've captured their newvousness and excitement so well. I love how Pam keeps playing the date in her head. Simply lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it. I know if I was Pam, I would totally be doing that all night long!
Date: May 25, 2007 02:17 pm Title: then and now
So nice! I love where she's envisioning her marriage and her future with Jim, and realizing that she didn't envision that with Roy, even before.
I like how he holds her as she cries.
The back and forth between now and earlier in the day is good and very clear. And again, you are the best self-beta'r ever.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks. I try, but even as an editing student there's stuff that I'm prone to miss. That's why betas are the best EVER!!! Woo!! Okay, seriously though, thanks for the review. You (and everyone who reviews, really) make The Office worth writing about. :)
Date: May 25, 2007 12:14 pm Title: fancy new Beesly
Not just to stay her friend no matter what, but she trusted him to keep her from doubting herself.
Excellent!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it. To me, that line is just one more thing that makes him perfect for her, and vice versa, of course.
Date: May 25, 2007 12:08 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
Hooray for Pam's stream of consciousness! It's really lovely, and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
I think she's lying in bed, not laying in bed, but I wouldn't bet my life on it or anything.
And your unbeta'd stuff has fewer mistakes than most people's beta'd stuff, so, I think you have a pretty good eye for those things.
Author's Response: Yep. You're totally right. It's lying not laying, because you lay something down, but to lie down is to recline/rest. Anyway, I knew that, but it's one of those things I always forget to check, so thanks for pointing it out. I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: May 24, 2007 06:19 pm Title: then and now
AZLIN! This is simply lovely. I love the flash backs and the total insight to pam's feeling. This is as good as a very good thing!
Author's Response: Oh, McGigi, you're making me blush. Seriously though, I had a lot of fun with this, even if it was a little over-the-top sap-happy toward the end. ;) Feel better soon!
Date: May 23, 2007 09:58 pm Title: then and now
Ok...I'm crying. Maybe it is because it's one in the morning, and I should be sleeping and all, but the lines about their future and watching their daughter graduate from college=me crying like a baby. This was so sweet and lovely! Fantastic work :)
Author's Response:
*passes tissue to dramaqueen* I honestly didn't plan this as a tear-jerker, but I think it ended up that way because I was just so happy for them. Anyway, thanks for the review. I'm really glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2007 03:24 pm Title: then and now
This is great! I really like the story and the way you told it. It was neat to read Pam's reactions to the date along with the date. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I really liked writing it, though I kind of think it might have gone a little too sappy toward the end. Oh well.
8 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 08:24 pm Title: fancy new Beesly
"She had spent most of the evening trying to keep herself from actually physically trembling with joy." I just love how you are capturing the happiness Pam is feeling so poetically and so beautifully.
Author's Response: Thank you. That's such a nice compliment. I've always wanted to write something really beautiful, and this idea of Pam lying in bed, thinking about everything was just such a beautiful moment to me.
8 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 08:15 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
"And when five o'clock came, her whole body felt like it was fluttering around in swirling circles on the inside and she couldn't be sure that she wouldn't just float away as soon as she stood up to gather her things. But then he looked over at her and smiled and even though the fluttering got worse, she knew for a fact that his pull on her would be more than enough to keep her on the ground." Those lines were such a beautiful way to put her feelings into words. PS I don't find your style confusing at all! My thoughts are always wandering so it's quite normal for me to read!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm so glad you liked it. My thoughts tend to wander too, and I do a lot of my journal writing in this style, but I wasn't sure if it would work for an audience that was bigger than just me, so I'm glad it wasn't too confusing.
Date: May 19, 2007 02:19 pm Title: fancy new Beesly
I love reading Pam's thoughts and memories like this. And I love that they kept they first date casual. Seems very them. And her saying his name and "I love you" over and over to herself...gave me happy chills.
Author's Response: Yes, this story is full of happy chills moments, because that's how I feel every time I think about the two of them finally getting it together!!! Thanks for the review!
Date: May 19, 2007 01:06 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
I love it. It's ok that it's wandering (it wasn't hard to read) because I am sure that's what was really going through her head after. I love how she's crying for happiness and how she knows how honest she was being all day. Absolutely lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it and that it wasn't too confusing. I really like writing this new version of Pam. It's nice to see her so happy, you know?
Date: May 19, 2007 05:45 am Title: fancy new Beesly
There were secret smiles to come and kisses to steal in the elevator and whispered conversations in the middle of meetings.
This is exactly why I can't wait until next season! Gorgeous. I love this story!
Author's Response: I know! Next season is going to be fantastic! I really hope we get to see some of this kind of stuff, even though I realize it's called The Office, not The Jim and Pam Love Story, but hey, if we don't get enough of it on TV, there's always fanfiction, right?
Date: May 19, 2007 05:40 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Today she sang them as a victory anthem.
Oh, yay! Gorgeous. The "wandering" style is spot-on. It isn't confusing at all, and it captures the tumult of her emotions perfectly. So pretty!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad the style worked. I was nervous when I posted it, but the more I wrote in it the more I enjoyed it!
Date: May 19, 2007 05:37 am Title: fancy new Beesly
Again, there are so many great lines and wonderful images here, but this line: "she wanted to scrape at her skin a bit, rid herself of the grimy build-up that was the past and just start over fresh." was just fantastic. Also, your exploration of Pam's learning to prank Dwight by herself got me to thinking about some of the early episodes in season 3 where some people were complaining that Pam seemed out of character. And I kept thinking "of COURSE she's out of character! That's the whole point!!" The Pam that we saw playing with Dwight's new regime in The Job had been practicing for a long time to get to that point. And while it wasn't the same as when she was with Jim, it was every bit the indication that she was earning the title of "Fancy New Beesly."
So there's a little bit more rambling from me. This is just fantastic, and I look forward to more. You've just made my favorite author list. :)
Author's Response:
Glad you liked the chapter, of course, but more importantly: favorite author list! Wow. I have so many people to thank for this honor... ;) Seriously though, I really am flattered.
Date: May 19, 2007 05:23 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Hey, don't be so hard on yourself. This is really well written, and I personally love the almost stream of consciousness feel to it. I had no trouble following the style you'd written in, and I think you've captured Pam's thoughts and experiences perfectly. Okay, I'm off to read the second chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so glad you like the style and Pam's characterization. She's a lot more fun to write now that FNB is showing her true colors! Thanks again for the review!
Date: May 18, 2007 11:15 pm Title: fancy new Beesly
Oh, I LOVE IT. I'm so, so, so, SO psyched about Jim and Pam now, like -- seriously. This is huge fancy new Beesly and she really went all out and it really paid off. And I remember my first date with Mr. GF and how it was kind of awkward and weird but giddy and happy and just ... AHHHHH, I love it. Please write more, I love this new medium of creativity that's sparking everyone because it's really real now!!
BTW: I liked the little bits of Pam remembering and thinking about what happened... I think the format works okay for me.
Author's Response: Thanks GreenFish! And yeah, isn't it great that so many people have come out of the woodwork to write some amazing stuff right now? I'm loving it too! Oh, and I'm so glad you liked the format, and that you didn't point out any mistakes, because I had THE WORST time with verb tenses in this one. Drove me up the wall.
Date: May 18, 2007 10:12 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
I just love the idea of them looking at each other for the first time without having to worry about what anyone else thinks. YES! I have to say, I got a little teary-eyed :)
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I started this story as my own personal form of catharsis, just trying to process everything, and I'll admit to a few tears along the way too.