Date: May 24, 2007 05:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Perfect. So perfect.
Date: May 24, 2007 05:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Perfect. So perfect.
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks for the kind words
Date: May 21, 2007 08:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Ryan ducked behind a tree. Kelly looked in the direction of the shot and saw Dwight. "You shot me in the boob you jerk!"
Too funny, and I can totally imagine Kelly saying that. Cute story!
Author's Response:
Something similar actually happened to one of my friends while she was in a paintball game. I thought is suited Ryan and Kelly. Thanks for reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 01:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so funny. I could picture it in my head just like an extra episode. Voices--spot on. Things I loved... Angela shooting Kevin (three times!), Jim and Pam's understated moment while putt-putt golfing (and then they both prayed it was a "Pepsi-only place," heh), Jim not shooting Pam, Andy losing it (of course), Michael chatting up the referee. The ref's talking head was my favorite of many funny talking heads: "Yeah, I think I'm quitting after today. I'd like to work with a higher class of people... Maybe I'll be a stripper." Loved it!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing. I liked writing the coed character. Maybe I should have added more between her and Michael.
Date: May 19, 2007 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
"I guess I win," Creed said.
Too funny.
Author's Response: Creed is a lot of fun to write because you can make him say almost anything. Thanks for reviewing.
Date: May 19, 2007 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Creed: Which one is Ryan?
Hilarious. Karen and Toby.... interesting! Dwight and Andy were hysterical.
I loved this. Wish there was more!!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I only just noticed that there was a way to respond to reviews. I know, not really very observant. I think Karen and Toby could compliment each other. Course I could be wrong.