Date: May 20, 2007 11:19 pm Title: Chapter One: If I Say So Myself
That was very cute. I think you did a good job. The pace of your dialogue was very good. You had a few verb tense switches and some little things like "Giving him a disdaining look" (it should be disdainful look), but those were small things. well done.
Date: May 20, 2007 07:37 pm Title: Chapter One: If I Say So Myself
That was adorable. I'm really enjoying these post-finale stories, especially when they continue right after the end of the episode. I was trying to imagine what would happen after Pam left the conference room and I really enjoy your version :).
Date: May 20, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Chapter One: If I Say So Myself
Really cute, believable scenario! I got thrown a little bit with the switches between past and present tense, though- maybe next time a beta reader could help you smooth that out. I love their conversation, though. Nice job!
Date: May 20, 2007 07:41 am Title: Chapter One: If I Say So Myself
Happy sighs :) This is great :) I love all these aftermath fics... the ones with tension and the ones like this where they just have an understanding and are just so happy right away. Thanks for my morning fix of JAM. lol