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Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2007 06:39 am Title: Succubus

With my addiction to vampires I just loved this.  I vote for more.

Reviewer: kells8995 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2007 05:29 am Title: Succubus

This really made me smile.  Jim being so in love that he is sure his wife has him in a trance?  Perfect! Great job!

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2007 04:55 am Title: Succubus

I loved this! I love stories that use uncommon themes to describe Jim and Pam's relationship, and this one was so original! Lots of great images here, just the right mixture of comedy and tenderness--just like the show. 

One nit pick: in the sentence "Of yogurt lids and flower peddles," I'm sure you meant to say flower petals." :) That's the kind of thing I always miss in my own stories, since you spelled "peddles" correctly, the spellchecker wouldn't catch it!

anyway, I loved this thoroughly. It stands perfectly on it's own, but if you wanted to expand it, you could have one from Pam's point of view where she suspects Jim is a Werewolf, perhaps?  

Reviewer: sherlockelly Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2007 12:00 am Title: Succubus

Oh. My GOD! I love this!!! It's so... YES!

I love this so much, there really aren't any words. I can absolutely see all the work that you but into this.

 

Stellar! *favorites*



Author's Response: That review right there, made the whole thing worth it.

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