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Reviewer: BaraJam Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15, 2007 12:13 pm Title: Chapter 16 - Great Nations Unite, by Sweet Chariots

Hey! I love this fic. I concur with what everyone esle has said about how so many different voices are melding into one really cool story. I just had one problem with this chapter. Continuity wise, shouldn't this have come before Ma Halpert's Boys, Since in the Dwight and Baseball chapter Dwight asked Jim to Double date THAT night, but the BBQ happend two weeks after that? Not a big deal but it was confuddling me a bit/

Author's Response: Thanks for the note!  I was having some computer problems last night that were confuddling me a bit, too.  It's posted in the proper place now.  :)

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 15, 2007 08:48 am Title: Chapter 16 - Great Nations Unite, by Sweet Chariots

I don't think I've reviewed any of this story yet.  My compliments to all of the authors.  So funny and touching.  Everyone clearly has their own style but I like how this is all melding into one fun story. 

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15, 2007 04:33 am Title: Chapter 16 - Great Nations Unite, by Sweet Chariots

Ha ha.  This is great.  Angela and Dwight sound a little too militant for my tastes, but still, the chapter works very well.  Is someone going to continue the date? It can't be over yet.  I want them to go roller skating and then have Jim and Pam trick them into going to a burlesque show or raunchy night club...

Author's Response:

Hey Daoust, Post-it Thief here. I *think* I'm next in line and I most certainly want to keep going with it. I'll keep your suggestion in mind!

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 23 - Making Up and Moving On, by Jenna Loves Josh

JLJ, you write Jim and Pam really well. If they ever did have a fight (heaven forbid!) I would want it to be like this.

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 04:46 pm Title: Chapter 21 - A Hot Summer Night, by Jenna Loves Josh

I really like your trio of chapters here, JLJ!  All that pent up anger really couldn't just dissipate because Pam & Jim finally got together.  I like how you're handling this!

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 22 - Men are From Mars, and Women are Meteorites Crashing into Mars, by Jenna Loves Josh

That was intense, but real. i'm sure they'll have fights like that.

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 10:52 am Title: Chapter 23 - Making Up and Moving On, by Jenna Loves Josh

Ahhhh make up sex.  The cure for all life's ills. 

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 10:45 am Title: Chapter 22 - Men are From Mars, and Women are Meteorites Crashing into Mars, by Jenna Loves Josh

wow. Angsty.  Who's in charge of steering this ship back into boinkenberry jamlike waters?

Reviewer: jinx Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 08:25 am Title: Chapter 20: The BBQ by Vampiric Blood

Thanks for creating such a warm and loving family.  You've written this chapter in a way that made me feel like I could see and feel everything.  Very real.

Reviewer: SheaHeyKid Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 05:46 am Title: Chapter 20: The BBQ by Vampiric Blood

Just fantastic, VB. Such great detail, and the pacing was really well done, building up to the birthday gift. Well worth the wait.

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14, 2007 04:55 am Title: Chapter 20: The BBQ by Vampiric Blood

Hoooooooooooly crap this is great!  This chapter flowed like....(searching for similie) hot fudge on a Dairy Queen sundae.  It was sweet to the taste and I didn't mind when it got all over my face... Um.  That totally takes away from what I wanted to say about this chapter, which is that I absolutely LOVED IT.  The humanity and the reality you gave to the characters was just awesome. 

Also...giving Jim's brothers the names Brian and Nathan...nice nod to NA.  Maybe they have a pet goldfish named Daoust???

Again, great work! Fabulous.



Author's Response:

Thanks, Daoust!  This one was a LOT harder than the first chapter.  I really struggled with it and was worried that it might be a little boring.

Thanks for noticing my little NA shout out!  Nope, no goldfish though.  I'm pretty sure Daoust is Amanda's hamster.

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08, 2007 09:48 am Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

oh my goodness this is precious. i really love it :) i would like to go on in detail but i just can't. it's too good. there's a giant grin on my face, if that tells you anything. 

Reviewer: mcmuffins Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08, 2007 06:27 am Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

OMG wow!  I LOVE this!  So sweet, so tender, so silly, so everyday, so perfectly them :)

Reviewer: LookAtThesePurses Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 05:45 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian

I don't even know where to start. Holy. Crap. Great stuff, gang!

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 05:35 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

This is unbelievably well written.  I actually want to have sex with this story.  That's how good it is.  I'd enjoy it. The story would say "eh, I've had better."

Reviewer: littlejerryS Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian

I just wanted you all to know how much I am enjoying these stories. Well done! Keep it up. Please and thank you.

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

Have I mentioned lately that I love this story? Really, I almost don't want to contribute any more because I don't want to mess it up. But at the same time, I can't help but want to continue to be a part of it.

Love the long arms. Love.



Author's Response: This works so well because it's a group effort, different voices exploring different directions. Yet, I think we all bring a similar, sincere fondness and respect for the characters. Plus we like boinking scenes, and there's some of that too.

Author's Response: Exactly. It's got it all-I'd bet even the kitchen sink is mentioned at some point as well.

Reviewer: killerqueen Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

I love how intimate and sweet this is, as well as funny and warm. Good work!

Reviewer: Jake Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

Another thing of beauty, LL. Lovely.

Reviewer: Single Tear Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

Your poetic side shows in your fiction. It's very nice and unique.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood

Lovely!  I can't wait to "Meet the Halperts".

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear

Brilliant!  A blind double-date.  Well, blind for Pam anyway.  And I love that Karen was the cause of the car trouble and the canceled reservation!

Reviewer: SheaHeyKid Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

Can we comment on our own story? Because that was delicious.

Reviewer: fasterthansnakes Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 12:41 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian

that last chapter was so adorably spot on as to what real couples in love are like :) more please and soon!

Reviewer: Stilla Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 19: Eight Postcards, by Linux Linus

It's almost painful, how perfect this is.

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