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Reviewer: carebear13178 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 10:48 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear

Wow. Karen's kind of a bitch. :)

Reviewer: Jake Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 10:00 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear

Really nice work! Thanks for resolving elements from my earlier chapter, I was hoping someone would take that on. Also, I LOVE-LOVE-LOVE where this is going!

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07, 2007 08:31 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear

This was awesome!  What a great chapter. Amazing set up for chapter 17, whoever has it.  Also great tie up of the previous chapters.  

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood

I loved this chapter, VB. You've done a great job here. I loved this chapter.

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood

Excellent plot development, VB. I love how Jim has art. I can totally see that.

I say we make Brian really write the lryics.



Author's Response: Don't tempt me. I've got enough on my plate as it is, but I will get lyrical on y'all if I have to.

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 14 - The Girl in the Dirty Shirt, by LookAtThesePurses

Yeah, the Fleebles seriously rock. But so does Oasis. :)

Stellar job, LATP.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 12:18 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood

The Halpert boys cooking (are you kidding me?) that is too adorable for words.  Pam will never be able to resist Jim once she sees that.  (As if she ever could).

Reviewer: ameliakrasinski Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Saturday in the park with jam, by ABZ

that was seriously the best thing i've ever read. it made me so freaking happy you have no idea. thank you all for being such amazing writers :)

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 10:01 am Title: Chapter 13 - Saturday in the park with jam, by ABZ

I don't care if everyone thinks I'm geeky for reviewing this story here and on NA.  I am what I am. That's Popeye.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 07:03 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian

Oh!  Nice chapter.  I think you're right, Brian.  These two would be having the nicest morning they'd had for a long time.   Or maybe ever.

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02, 2007 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 12 - Trouble, by lemonade

Holy hot stuff! That was a fantastic fanfic chapter. This little story is developing very well, methinks.  Go NA!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 01, 2007 06:45 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian

Yay for happy breakfasts!  A great transition chapter, Brian!

Reviewer: Single Tear Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01, 2007 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian

Morning Sunshine? Is that what the kids are calling it these days? Great job, **Brian**.

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01, 2007 04:09 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian

Fantastic effort, Brian!!! This is my favourite chapter of them all so far.  Although that smutty chapter was pretty great too.

Great work NA'ers. You all make me so proud to be a part of it. 

Reviewer: Jake Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01, 2007 01:29 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan

To add to NeverEnoughJam's collection, I love this line:

"She took care not to move too quickly, lest he dislodge himself, lest he ever roll away, lest she lose him."

Such a lovely and simple way to describe that subtle desperation of sustaining what is inevitably temporary.

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 11:16 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian

Aw, Travis! I'm just mad that you got to include a reference before I did. :)

The line about burning new neuro-pathways was my absolute favorite. I'm a total neurology geek so nice job.

Reviewer: blue Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian

I think you all have done a great job of writing a cohesive story that flows from chapter to chapter. I enjoyed checking out the thread over at NA and reading the 'behind the scenes' of the collaboration. The fun you all are having there really shows up in the story. I look forward to future chapters and other works from all of you!

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Pam's Place, by Single Tear

“Would you watch a chick flick with me too?”

Jim laughed, “No. No way. You’d have to put out for me to do that.”

Hee.  That was very funny.  Ah, poor babbling and anxious Pam.

 

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian

Good job!  I like when they chat and have fun on a date.  I think you captured that well. :)  You Pam and Jim were fun to read.

Reviewer: mcmuffins Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 08:58 am Title: Chapter 4 - Life in a Shoebox, by Jake

Ok, another great chapter.  But what you should hear FIRST is that describing the sofa as kneeling is BRILLIANT!  What an amazing image :)

Reviewer: mcmuffins Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 08:44 am Title: Chapter 3 - Pam's Place, by Single Tear

hahahahahahahaha!  “No. No way. You’d have to put out for me to do that.”  Loving this so far, and reading on, but just had to comment on that last bit.  Heee!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 02:38 am Title: Chapter 4 - Life in a Shoebox, by Jake

Pam would save everything they had shared between them. This is one of the most romantic moments between them I've ever read--intimate, connected, making their shared history not only the bond between them but the bridge to their future. Is it crazy to say that it makes them seem simultaneously hot as new lovers but as comfortable as old marrieds? Yet it does. 

Stroke of genius, that. 

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 02:33 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan

how to wipe it all out, the other loves and the past hurts, the nights they'd both laid awake grieving for each other and those damn days they spent when hope lifted them, just to be stolen again. 

What a fabulous summation of their history. And so sensitive of Jim to be thinking of her now like this.

ridiculous trappings as they were.  Naked at birth, naked at death, naked too few times in between.  

Poetry. Really lovely lines.

slipping his arm beneath her head so that he cradled her as they kissed

Nothing in the world is sexier than a gentle man. Wonderful imagery! As is this:

she could tell his scent in the air when no one else would smell skin, would smell Jim, would smell love....she moved her lips to his earlobe just to be near his pulse points, to press her nose in his hair, to hear him rumble in pleasure. 

Finally, a hint of the sensual, artistic Pam! I do think you need to fix this, however:

She encircled her hardness

This is a truly original and stunning image:

She saw him beautiful in her hand, thinking of how as a girl she chose walking sticks in the woods behind her parents' house, testing their sturdiness and stability before she took them on the trails.  I choose you, she thought, stroking, 

God have mercy, what an image. And this:

his cheeks soft and mouth full of sweet things to say,

is one of the best closing images EVER. 

This is some remarkably original writing. I really enjoyed it. Very individual, very interesting. I hope to see more. Thanks for this story. 

 

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 02:20 am Title: Chapter 9 - Best Laid Plans, by Jake

grasshoppers in his stomach

OMG what an image. Indelible. 

Question: Why does Jim drive a Toyota in Chapter 2 and a Saab in this one? Or did I miss a memo?

 



Author's Response: I was stuck in season 2 when Jim drove a Toyota but he's driving a Saab now. I got it corrected. Thanks! -Single Tear

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31, 2007 02:15 am Title: Chapter 8 - The Conference Room, by Brian

"Interoffice relationships are a cancer in the workplace, destroying morale, hurting productivity, stealing all the covers and drinking all your booze,"

Great line. 

And Pam's Dundie for Jim? Awwwww. 

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