Date: June 07, 2007 10:48 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear
Wow. Karen's kind of a bitch. :)
Date: June 07, 2007 10:00 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear
Really nice work! Thanks for resolving elements from my earlier chapter, I was hoping someone would take that on. Also, I LOVE-LOVE-LOVE where this is going!
Date: June 07, 2007 08:31 am Title: Chapter 15 - Dwight and Baseball, by Single Tear
This was awesome! What a great chapter. Amazing set up for chapter 17, whoever has it. Also great tie up of the previous chapters.
Date: June 05, 2007 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood
I loved this chapter, VB. You've done a great job here. I loved this chapter.
Date: June 05, 2007 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood
Excellent plot development, VB. I love how Jim has art. I can totally see that.
I say we make Brian really write the lryics.
Author's Response: Don't tempt me. I've got enough on my plate as it is, but I will get lyrical on y'all if I have to.
Date: June 05, 2007 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 14 - The Girl in the Dirty Shirt, by LookAtThesePurses
Yeah, the Fleebles seriously rock. But so does Oasis. :)
Stellar job, LATP.
Date: June 05, 2007 12:18 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Halpert's Boys, by Vampiric Blood
The Halpert boys cooking (are you kidding me?) that is too adorable for words. Pam will never be able to resist Jim once she sees that. (As if she ever could).
Date: June 04, 2007 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Saturday in the park with jam, by ABZ
that was seriously the best thing i've ever read. it made me so freaking happy you have no idea. thank you all for being such amazing writers :)
Date: June 04, 2007 10:01 am Title: Chapter 13 - Saturday in the park with jam, by ABZ
I don't care if everyone thinks I'm geeky for reviewing this story here and on NA. I am what I am. That's Popeye.
Date: June 04, 2007 07:03 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian
Oh! Nice chapter. I think you're right, Brian. These two would be having the nicest morning they'd had for a long time. Or maybe ever.
Date: June 02, 2007 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 12 - Trouble, by lemonade
Holy hot stuff! That was a fantastic fanfic chapter. This little story is developing very well, methinks. Go NA!
Date: June 01, 2007 06:45 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian
Yay for happy breakfasts! A great transition chapter, Brian!
Date: June 01, 2007 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Morning Sunshine? Is that what the kids are calling it these days? Great job, **Brian**.
Date: June 01, 2007 04:09 am Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian
Fantastic effort, Brian!!! This is my favourite chapter of them all so far. Although that smutty chapter was pretty great too.
Great work NA'ers. You all make me so proud to be a part of it.
Date: June 01, 2007 01:29 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
To add to NeverEnoughJam's collection, I love this line:
"She took care not to move too quickly, lest he dislodge himself, lest he ever roll away, lest she lose him."
Such a lovely and simple way to describe that subtle desperation of sustaining what is inevitably temporary.
Date: May 31, 2007 11:16 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian
Aw, Travis! I'm just mad that you got to include a reference before I did. :)
The line about burning new neuro-pathways was my absolute favorite. I'm a total neurology geek so nice job.
Date: May 31, 2007 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Morning Sunshine, by Brian
I think you all have done a great job of writing a cohesive story that flows from chapter to chapter. I enjoyed checking out the thread over at NA and reading the 'behind the scenes' of the collaboration. The fun you all are having there really shows up in the story. I look forward to future chapters and other works from all of you!
Date: May 31, 2007 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Pam's Place, by Single Tear
“Would you watch a chick flick with me too?”
Jim laughed, “No. No way. You’d have to put out for me to do that.”
Hee. That was very funny. Ah, poor babbling and anxious Pam.
Date: May 31, 2007 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Good job! I like when they chat and have fun on a date. I think you captured that well. :) You Pam and Jim were fun to read.
Date: May 31, 2007 08:58 am Title: Chapter 4 - Life in a Shoebox, by Jake
Ok, another great chapter. But what you should hear FIRST is that describing the sofa as kneeling is BRILLIANT! What an amazing image :)
Date: May 31, 2007 08:44 am Title: Chapter 3 - Pam's Place, by Single Tear
hahahahahahahaha! “No. No way. You’d have to put out for me to do that.” Loving this so far, and reading on, but just had to comment on that last bit. Heee!
Date: May 31, 2007 02:38 am Title: Chapter 4 - Life in a Shoebox, by Jake
Pam would save everything they had shared between them. This is one of the most romantic moments between them I've ever read--intimate, connected, making their shared history not only the bond between them but the bridge to their future. Is it crazy to say that it makes them seem simultaneously hot as new lovers but as comfortable as old marrieds? Yet it does.
Stroke of genius, that.
Date: May 31, 2007 02:33 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
how to wipe it all out, the other loves and the past hurts, the nights they'd both laid awake grieving for each other and those damn days they spent when hope lifted them, just to be stolen again.
What a fabulous summation of their history. And so sensitive of Jim to be thinking of her now like this.
ridiculous trappings as they were. Naked at birth, naked at death, naked too few times in between.
Poetry. Really lovely lines.
slipping his arm beneath her head so that he cradled her as they kissed
Nothing in the world is sexier than a gentle man. Wonderful imagery! As is this:
she could tell his scent in the air when no one else would smell skin, would smell Jim, would smell love....she moved her lips to his earlobe just to be near his pulse points, to press her nose in his hair, to hear him rumble in pleasure.
Finally, a hint of the sensual, artistic Pam! I do think you need to fix this, however:
She encircled her hardness
This is a truly original and stunning image:
She saw him beautiful in her hand, thinking of how as a girl she chose walking sticks in the woods behind her parents' house, testing their sturdiness and stability before she took them on the trails. I choose you, she thought, stroking,
God have mercy, what an image. And this:
his cheeks soft and mouth full of sweet things to say,
is one of the best closing images EVER.
This is some remarkably original writing. I really enjoyed it. Very individual, very interesting. I hope to see more. Thanks for this story.
Date: May 31, 2007 02:20 am Title: Chapter 9 - Best Laid Plans, by Jake
grasshoppers in his stomach
OMG what an image. Indelible.
Question: Why does Jim drive a Toyota in Chapter 2 and a Saab in this one? Or did I miss a memo?
Author's Response: I was stuck in season 2 when Jim drove a Toyota but he's driving a Saab now. I got it corrected. Thanks! -Single Tear
Date: May 31, 2007 02:15 am Title: Chapter 8 - The Conference Room, by Brian
"Interoffice relationships are a cancer in the workplace, destroying morale, hurting productivity, stealing all the covers and drinking all your booze,"
Great line.
And Pam's Dundie for Jim? Awwwww.