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Reviewer: Desslok Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: October 01, 2008 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 10

Great story. Very touching and sweet. I really enjoyed it.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: September 21, 2008 09:02 am Title: Chapter 2

Aw I love larissa :(

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 21, 2008 08:48 am Title: Chapter 1

omg poor jim:( I love it!

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05, 2007 07:09 am Title: Chapter 10

Nice ending, malcom lake!

Andy will never fall for a "let's have a threesome, you start without us" line again.  Well, maybe he would.

I love the whole frying pan conversation.  Lovely and realistic.

I like how you slip in little things like Angela actually eating some of the food, but complaining about the amount of pepper.  That Angela has to complain about something. 

I'll watch for your next story! 

Reviewer: Ceciel Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05, 2007 03:53 am Title: Chapter 1

Well done! I really enjoyed it.

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed [Report This]
Date: July 04, 2007 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 10

Great conclusion to an excellent story. I really enjoyed this. Thanks!

Reviewer: luchy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23, 2007 10:49 am Title: Chapter 8

Ok, great story so far...but what the heck is up with Karen?

She's freaking me out!
luchy



Author's Response: Sorry to freak you out.  Hopefully now Karen's actions are more reasonable.

Reviewer: PixieGrrl Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 12:27 am Title: Chapter 8

Okay serious audible gasp here. Please tell me there's more coming soon.

Author's Response: Hopefully the gasp will turn into a happy sigh now.  Sorry this took a while, but I wanted to get through everything to make sure there weren't a lot of questions going into the last chapter.

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 8

I'm assuming this Karen thing is some kind of good natured prank?  Or is it?  Hmmmm...... 

I like that you even made me feel jealous when Karen was helping Jim in the office.  But when Pam and Jim drove to her apartment, there was a real feeling of comfort and security between them in that scene.  Well done. 

I love the idea of Pam taking care of him of course.  Oh yeah, I also love his mom here, good characterization!

Love that you're still going strong here.  Good work. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing.  I hope i've cleared up Karen's motives in a way that makes sense, but you guys will be the judge of that.

Reviewer: jinx Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 8

Great chapter.  I like how you're setting up some interesting twists and turns. 

Eagerly anticipting the next chapteer



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.  Hope you like the latest developments

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 07:03 pm Title: Chapter 8

Can't wait to see what Karen is up to. I love the way you write Larissa. She's a great mom.



Author's Response: Larissa is a lot of fun.  Hope you like the bit with her in this chapter.  Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 8

Wow, this just took a real turn!  Andy and Karen in cahoots, Jim being Mr. Responsible, Karen kind of coming on to Jim, Andy, and Pam...Yikes!  

What is going to happen next!? 



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.  Hope you're okay with the way the story's turning out - ml

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18, 2007 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 7

You did a terrific job with the different characters here.  They each seemed very true to themselves, even in such an AU setting.  I could really see Phyllis and Kelly acting just like that.  And Kev's list - wow.

Karen was obviously different, but I was thinking what a missed oppty she was in the actual show.   I would have liked to have seen Pam and Karen interact like this in real life.

Keep it up. 



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you liked this part.  The Kev bit was the most fun to write.  The hardest thing was deciding the songs to leave off.

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18, 2007 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 7

I just got caught up with this story. and I really like it. It's interesting to see how the Office characters interact in a more dramatic setting. Looking forward to more!



Author's Response: Glad you like it and thanks for reviewing.  I wanted to try something a little more "grown up" but hopefully it's in the spirit of the show.

Reviewer: BaraJam Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18, 2007 02:41 am Title: Chapter 1

What is up with Jim...is he pushing himself because Andy called Jan to make Jim look too weak to be the ARM? Because if this is the case....I could totally see FNB and the rest of the dunder-mifflinites beating the pyschological and professional crap outta Andy.

Author's Response: I haven't written the next bit yet, but I don't think that Jim would push himself just because of a threat to his job; maybe to someone else's job, especially if the person being threatened is a friend of his.  And I do think Andy is going to play a key role in what happens next.

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 17, 2007 06:31 pm Title: Chapter 7

I liked Pam's interaction with Karen in this chapter.  I really don't think Karen is a crazy bitch, so I appreciate any story where she is realistic and not totally insane.  I'm a little concerned about Jim in this one.  Is he up to something?  He seems a little cagey. 

Author's Response: One thing I am sure of is that Karen will not go crazy during the course of the story.  Beyond that, we'll just have to see.  Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17, 2007 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 7

The part with Karen was interesting.  At first, it seemed like she was going to tell Pam she was going after him too...

I think Pam should've met Jim and his mom at Jim's apartment.  I would've been all over that.  (Um, in a totally heart-healthy innocent way.  Yep.)  I still don't trust Karen.  A nice Thai dinner with Pam is not making me trust this rendition of Karen... 

The Kevin bit was great.   

I'm curious to see what will happen with Michael and Jim. 



Author's Response: Glad you liked the Kevin bit, it was fun for me.  We'll have to see how Karen ends up in this story, haven't made up my mind yet either, normally the story kind of tells me how folks should behave

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17, 2007 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 6

Oh, the naughty nurse and Charlie sending her! Fan-TAS-tic!  And stay away from room 205!!!  Love that.

Really good chapter.  Aside from the above, I also got quite a kick out of Dwight "from sales", and the thing with the tongue.  All kinds of awesome, malcom! 



Author's Response: Glad you liked it.  I wanted Pam to kind of get over being embarrassed about things, so I made everything embarrassing until she reached the point where it was time to pass it along to someone else.  I hope I can keep that up for her through the next few chapters.

Reviewer: Ceciel Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17, 2007 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 7

Oh and I love the list of songs from Kev, good details!

Author's Response:

Yeah, I kinda figures Kevin wouldn't have anything from the past decade on his playlist.  Besides, I enjoy playing music snob.

Reviewer: Ceciel Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17, 2007 01:09 pm Title: Chapter 7

Loving it! Does not suck in any way.

I love how this story somehow keeps building  up. Can't wait for more.



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.  I always get nervous when I post a new chapter.  Will try to update soon

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 07:09 pm Title: Chapter 6

This was excellent, you have really hit your stride here.  I loved Charlie, so funny.  And I loved how tender Jim and Pam are with each other.  Sexual side effects, oh you went there, but seriously I think even I blushed with the tongue comment.  The part with Angela was really good.  It was plausible and a good portrait of her.  I think she really does care about people, but doesn't let it show.

 

Great job!  Update soon! 



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.  I'm sure I was blushing when I wrote the bit about the tongue.  Sometimes, the characters just surprise you.  I was rereading the Angela bit.  I never categoricaly stated that Jim didn't have an affair with Angela.  Hope most folks understood that.

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 03:51 pm Title: Chapter 6

Charlie sounds like a good friend.

Author's Response: The people who review me are so kind.  Nobody thought that Charlie was the guy's evil business partner who's trying to do him in before he can get his much needed surgery.  It's part of why I like my reviewers so much, they make me feel better about humanity.

Reviewer: Mad Hatter Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 02:57 pm Title: Chapter 6

awww...that was the best chapter ever! this story is soo awesome! I can't wait for the next part the doctor said only 10%. Hopefully Jim is not in that pecentage! But love the comedy in tru Pam and Jim form. Can't wait to see what is in sotre for he two lovebirds next. Great part!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the nicest review ever.  Hope you like the next bit - ml

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 06:33 am Title: Chapter 6

Hello Saucy Pam!  I like it.  Good work.

Author's Response: Saucy Pam.  Never used the word Saucy before.  I'll have to try and sneak it into a future installment.  Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: BaraJam Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 01:23 am Title: Chapter 6

Awwww poor Jimbo. Hopefully he won't get punished too terribly with "side effects", that might be a little too cruel for the poor boy.

Author's Response:

Dwight would say "Life is cruel.  You should just get used to it."  Fortunately, Dwight is not writing this.  There will be happier days ahead.  Thanks for reviewing

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