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Reviewer: BecauseOfYou Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07, 2017 09:14 pm Title: Then you came and caused a spark

This is adorable! I really loved this line

"Now they were here, together, and she was grinning from ear to ear and skipping like a child and he finally felt like he could reach out and touch the place he wanted to be."

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 10:41 am Title: Then you came and caused a spark

awwwww....all that mutual adoration just takes it out of you, doesn't it?  That was definitely some gooey, delicious fluff.  I need a glass of water.  ;-)

More, please!!  And will Pam leave drool marks all over Jim's shirt?  Inquiring minds must know!!!



Author's Response:

If Pam does leave drool marks on his shirt, of course he'll think it's the most adorable thing ever! Also, not sure if it was the mutual admiration on the large rum pineapple drinks, but surely all that adrenaline flowing means a crash sooner or later.

The fluff is all for you, baby! You know left to me, Pam would dress in black, never leave the house and write bad poetry while listening to the Cure night after night. J/K! Love me some fluff too. Good times...

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 07:01 am Title: Then you came and caused a spark

I like how you intersperse classic Jim/Pam banter with moments of serious discussion - feels very natural, and I think that's how it would happen more often than them sitting down to have a 'serious talk.' Love his comment on how Karen saw him vs. how Pam sees him (precisely, my dear;) his giddy nervousness as he internally debates what she meant by not driving home, not wanting to be presumptuous...; wanting to apologize again - how come you write my Jim so well?

And once again, your 6 or so last lines turned me into a puddle of Colette. I hope you're pleased.

Needless to say, looking forward to Pam taking advantage of him (who me? Live vicariously?) Do carry on.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I get the feeling they'd avoid the serious talk stuff, at least for a while. There will be no "5 nights of talking about our relationship" thingy here. They're not discovering each other completely, they're just sort of filling in the blanks and it will take some time and be haphazard but mostly I think they'd be giddy and happy and start to develop a confidence that they can talk about the hard stuff, just not all at once.

I am pleased about the puddle of Colette! Turnabout is fair play, after all. I'll fetch my mop! Living vicariously? Isn't that what we're all doing here?! ;-) Thanks my dear!

Reviewer: Donnelly Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 04:48 am Title: Then you came and caused a spark

awww tht was such a cute way to end the chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks Donnelly!

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 12:46 pm Title: Then you came and caused a spark

What about the making out? j/k if i had the opportunity, I would fall asleep in Jim's arms as well :) this chapter is SUPER cute! i love his list of things he loves about her and their debate over what candy to buy. 

Author's Response: Don't worry about the making out! The date ain't over until it's over, after all. ;-)

Reviewer: malcolm lake Signed [Report This]
Date: June 13, 2007 03:48 am Title: I used to ramble through the park

Loved the idea of how Pam wanted to associate Jim with her favorite place.  Very nice

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed that.

Reviewer: Cassandra Mulder Signed [Report This]
Date: June 13, 2007 01:26 am Title: I used to ramble through the park

You're right, there can never be enough first date fic, and this one is utterly adorable! It made me misty in a couple of places, and it made me smile and laugh in most of the others. I'm really enjoying it. (Btw, the accent thing is easy - hold down the alt key while typing in 0223 on the number keypad, and voila! You have an é. :) Don't worry, it took me forever to learn how that was done, too. Comes in handy, though.)

Author's Response: Thanks for the tip! I can freakin' program HTML but I never remember to look it up and I'm way to lazy to look when I'm posting. Now I can use all kinds of new words! And thanks for your lovely review as well!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 07:08 pm Title: But now that the stars are in your eyes

"Now they were here, together, and she was grinning from ear to ear and skipping like a child and he finally felt like he could reach out and touch the place he wanted to be."  Such sweet and lovely sentiments that make me feel so happy inside.  

Author's Response: Me too. Kaystar, you're onto me! I'm just trying to make a happy little Jammy world of goodness for myself to pass the long summer waiting to see how great they're going to be together. Yay!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 01:22 pm Title: I never went in for afterglow

"I thought we agreed on amnesty"  THAT is a great idea. Clear the air, make way for happy times.  JAMnesty. 


Author's Response: JAMnesty! Perfect! Now why don't you write fics again? Oh yeah, you're a genius with PS. I think you could do both - just sayin'! Thanks lisahoo!

Reviewer: Donnelly Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 01:04 pm Title: I used to ramble through the park

really cute

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 12:41 pm Title: I used to ramble through the park

First - love this chapter title. Not sure why, but it seems just right. And kinda lyrical.

And this chapter has such a great blend of classic J/P banter, and giddy I-can't-believe-we're-doing-this flirting, and serious talk about things that need to be said. And I also think they'd switch gears back and forth like this - kind of scatting around to figure out how it all works between them now. So romantic too - waltzing in the dark with no music, her telling him about her grandpa and talking about Jim crying? Oh.

And, you end every chapter with a perfect cliffhanging line. Must have more. (What was it you said in your reply to Mox, about them 'laying down'? Oh, am I taking that out of context? Dang. Make it so, girlfriend.) 



Author's Response: Figuring out how it works, exactly! They know how to be friends, they know how to flirt, they definitely know how to hurt the other, now can they just let it all go and carve out a new niche for themselves. Of course they can and the journey is going to be so much fun to watch! Give me some time and I will try my bestest to make it all so. Thanks, you!

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 12:04 pm Title: I used to ramble through the park

it's funny how they're so obviously rushing back to her apartment but Pam knows she can put that on hold and share something sweet with Jim and it's ok. in fact he loves it just as much as she does. great chapter. very sweet :) 

Author's Response:

She's finally comfortable enough to do that, I think. After all the aniticipation of what it might be like to be with Jim, I think she would include some revelations into herself. At least, I hope she would. Thanks much!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 10:04 am Title: I never wink back at fireflies

I've enjoyed all of the first date fics we've had posted here but I truly must say that I think this is my favorite first part of the first date and first kiss of the first date chapter.  It is just magical, so believable, so them. And when Jim said  "If I could have had anything in the world at that one moment, it would be for you to still be in my life in ten years."  I almost melted.  This was so lovely.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much kaystar! I think we've all been waiting for this first date even longer than Pam has so I wanted to infuse a little bit of awe and wonderment into the mix. They tease, they flirt, they dance around the truth, but every now and then one of them does say something that's just so real. I love that!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 09:57 am Title: I never cared much for moonlit skies

"A panicky thought crossed her mind that even though he'd asked her on a "date" it might be a goodbye dinner."  It's funny, I thought of this too.  Pam isn't aware of why Jim is there yet, so for all she knows, it could be a goodbye dinner!  I love their bantering, and her cute little comment about getting to see her apartment later.  Oh, and Kelly asking Michael to tell Ryan to stop lying to her was precious!!

Author's Response: Although judging by Pam's huge grin after Jim shut the door of the conference room, I don't think she was even worried it wasn't a good date! But I know I'd wonder about his intentions. I feel bad about using poor Kelly as window dressing and leaving her there to sort it all out with Michael. Might have to touch on that again later after, you know, some other touching goes on!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 08:17 am Title: I used to ramble through the park

There is a sense of "manic" in their conversation - especially in Pam, and I think that rings exceptionally true to how they would be the first night they are back to being "the way they were" (sorta!).  I mean, there's an abrupt shifting of gears conversation-wise from light and fun to reflective to downright deadly serious and back to fluff again.  And it's a bit winding to keep up with, but it rings as very, very true to me.  Like there is some much Pam's been keeping inside to tell him "one day" and now that "one day" has finally arrived, she doesn't know where to start and she's probably not yet had it sunk in that he's not going anyway again.  Does that make sense?

I'm sure an evening of making out on her couch with Jim will certainly help calm her down.  (or not...)  :-)

Nicely done, as always.   



Author's Response:

I'm glad that sense of "manic" comes through. Think of Pam sitting there waiting for Jim to return after the Merger, dying to tell him so many things and then she gets shut down for months. And then thinking he's moving to NYC never to be seen again. Ouch. All those things she has bottled up inside and she doesn't want to wait any longer because he's here now and it's spilling out in uneven batches! I know that's how I'd feel - wanting to try out this new flirty thing, wanting to tell him the serious stuff that he needed to hear after CN, and wanting to just hang with her best friend. It's going to take a while to define the relationship but they're already laying down the foundation. That's probably what makes this so fun to write!

Thanks for your continuous love and feedback! And thanks for a new DL installment!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12, 2007 07:45 am Title: I used to ramble through the park

What?  It's a Thursday night and they're not in front of the TV?  I hope Pam has TiVo.  And I'm guessing they're not going to see much of Casino Royale, either...

Author's Response:

Hee! Well, Pam might get all hot and bothered from watching Mr. Bond and whoa - what's this? Mr. Manly-man Halpert right here within reach on my couch??? Yes, they may have to go back and rewatch some scenes later...

Reviewer: Donnelly Signed [Report This]
Date: June 09, 2007 04:31 pm Title: But now that the stars are in your eyes

soo good.

Author's Response: Thanks Donnelly!

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 05:29 pm Title: I never went in for afterglow

Oh man!!! What a great chapter!!! That's the perfect cliff hanger ending too.  I am really enjoying this story! Great job!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much Daoust! I'm having too much fun writing. More will be coming soon! TWSS...

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 01:52 pm Title: I never went in for afterglow

I've been on board with the Jell-O wrestling for months now.

Author's Response: Mud, Jello, oil - I'm sure you'd approve of any Pam/Karen wrestling! So do you think Pam would overpower Karen or is Ms. Fancy Pants too scrappy? Hmmmmm. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 09:38 am Title: I never went in for afterglow

Starting with the last...another perfect final line. (And, not rushing things? Alone with him? You are such a tease.)

This has such a great balance of fluff and substance - just enough meaningful convo to make it feel like them and acknowledge how they got there. Glad they talked - at least a little - about Roy's attempted smack down. Cause...come on, that has to still be hanging there in the air. Love the restaurant (want to go there NOW,) love: 'It cleanses the palate!' Love that Pam likes burning stuff (ahem?) Not to mention the evil underwater lair..guess I just love funny, free, assertive Pam. Unlike Jim's recent dates, indeed. How much more fun is watching them together going to be than his endless blah-fest with Fancy Pants?

As usual, there's a great pacing to this that just pulls you along. And hooray for bringing the fluff without a side of cutesy.  Just how I like it. Now stop with this having a life nonsense, and write the next chapter ;-)



Author's Response:

Okay, I don't think they're rushing at all but that Pam's just getting used to this new honest and open way of life so you know she'd be thinking about going slow. And our boy Jim is a gentleman and let's not forget he's been burned before so caution might be the word du jour. Or the bad memories could all dissolve in the alcoholic frenzy of suffering bastards and mai tais! I'm not sayin' just yet!

I'm glad you liked the pacing - I just feel like they'd have a bit of fun, then some burning question would arise, then they'd need a bit more fun to offset the angst. Honesty with a slow reveal, I guess you'd say! Thanks for coming along on the ride, you, and I promise to keep you satisfied and smilin'! Of course, TWSS.... ;-)

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 07:31 am Title: I never went in for afterglow

OMG - it totally sounds like Pam and Jim ended up here:  http://www.kahiki.com/about-us/supper-club.aspx 

The Kahiki was a landmark restaurant in columbus - I was fortunate enough to get there before it closed.  And it looks like Pam and Jim were too!

I like that he asked her why she did the coal walk.  :-)

Now I'm wishing my weekend away looking forward to the next chapter!  Good Job, as always! 



Author's Response:

I didn't plan on it being this restaurant (and yes, your link probably nails it on the head!) I think I just wanted Pam to have a drink in a pineapple for some reason. I LOVE me some funky retro tiki a la Trader Vic's and that sort of thing and I thought it might be kind of fun for them to have a low key dinner. There's probably not one within miles of Scranton but that's why they call it fiction!

Thanks much and I hope your weekend doesn't pass by TOO quickly! You can let your imagination fill in the rest of the date for a few days and then see how close you are to my version after! Or you could just keep writing your own wonderful fics to pass the time. I seem to remember you have 17 ideas going! ;-)

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 06:11 am Title: But now that the stars are in your eyes

I love Pam's enthusiasm.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, gotkona!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 06:09 am Title: I never wink back at fireflies

wow, kissing before dinner. If I was Pam after the flowers I would have been on him.:)

Author's Response:

Absolutely. But that would've made for a pretty short date! Not that there's anything wrong with that!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 06:07 am Title: I never cared much for moonlit skies

Such the gentlemen our Jim.

Author's Response: For now anyway! Later? Who knows!

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 07:07 pm Title: But now that the stars are in your eyes

I really like this story, Questionizer.  Especially that line in the last chapter about Pam kissed Jim, then Jim kissed Pam, and then they finally kissed each other. That was great.  Keep this one going!!!

Author's Response: Thanks Daoust! I have so much more that this may go down as the longest date on record!

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