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Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 26, 2010 10:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Yet another fic that I remember reading and thoroughly enjoying...yet I didn't review it!  I can only attribute it to the fact that it must have been when I was a newbie and devouring every fic I could get my hands on--so selfish.  Aaaanyway, hopefully you'll see this.  I love this story and it has stuck with me over the years, particularly the image of MorningAfter!JimAndPam cooking in Pam's kitchen.  I love Pam's giddiness, their joy and uncertainty.  Great job.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved that Jim was killing time by making faces at himself in the mirror!  And Pam tearing her closet apart was so realistic, who hasn't been there?  Very nice.

Reviewer: Rowena666 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06, 2007 09:40 am Title: Chapter 1

“Pam! Pam Beesly! Together we are fabulous!”

Hehe! Excellent fic. I love the nervousness to their thoughts and actions, but still the feeling that they fit well together.

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 06:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

You would think I'd be sick of FirstDate!Fic by now, but I'm definately not after this.  My taste has refined if anything and this is definately the kind of stuff I want to read.

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 04:42 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow, DFTF!!  This is truly outstanding!

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05, 2007 09:32 am Title: Chapter 1

Wonderful! I love how there's a good realistic balance between completely awkward and comfortable/sweet. I love the "chemistry" talk during breakfast preparations.

Reviewer: Jake Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 1

DftF, if this is JAM fanfic from the future, then I can only hope I improve enough to write like this when that day comes.

Terrific story, beautifully described.

Reviewer: bossbeth Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is exactly the sort of thing I read fanfic for.  Thank you do much.  This was beyond charming and delightful, and my day is the better for having read it.

Reviewer: Single Tear Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really great, Linus. It was so real- especially everything about Pam from the mess in her room and the call to her mom to her 2 pairs of jeans. And I loved that she put on Jim's shirt the next morning. Hope you can contribute to our collaboration!

Reviewer: counteragent Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

"What had once been a nice and orderly closet had now become two completely different things: a pile of unsorted clothes on the bed, and a gaping empty space in which she could have sworn there should have been something more."

Hee! Isn't that always the way? I love this; so halting and hopeful at the same time.

Reviewer: collardgreens Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:46 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was the best first date story I've read yet. Just it seemed more real. Pam not knowing what to wear. Her clothes everywhere the cute little akward scenes. Perfect. 

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love how they are both so deliciously nervous and awkward, but in a fun silly way, not overly dramatic.  And the phone -- gah!  So adorable!

Reviewer: CatherineZetaJones Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 1

You're a really good writer, Linus.  This is how I would have pictured their first date.  Loved it!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 1

very cute and very sweet. just like our favorite couple

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

 “I liked it in there,” he said, somewhat wistfully. “Good things happen to me in there.”

 

That was my favorite line....so perfectly sweet and nervous and adorkable all over the place.... 

Reviewer: PamPongChamp Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

this was cute.  But I really think you can lower your rating to a T...it will give you a lot more readers :)

Reviewer: Post_it_Thief Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love this. You're a good writer, but you already knew that. The re-naming of contacts made me laugh a lot. When are you going to contribute to the Round Robin? Because you should.

Reviewer: carebear13178 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04, 2007 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was fantastic! I'm LOVING all of this first date fic that people are putting out. This was very sweet. :)

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