10 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2007 09:42 pm Title: Intricate lace
I'm in love with this beautifully written story. Excellent job!
Author's Response: thank you!! I'm glad your liking it.
Date: June 27, 2007 09:21 pm Title: Stillness and Snow
Great chapter! I'm wondering what's going through Pam's head and if she'll tell Jim about the fight on their walk. Can't wait to read more!
Date: June 27, 2007 03:41 pm Title: Stillness and Snow
I love this story so much! The tone is perfect! I can't wait for more!
9 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Burn and beat
I am really enjoying the stylistic choices that you have made. Especially in the second portion of the chapter with the repectition of each stand alone sentance starting with she and being followed a verb in the past tense: She slammed. She took. She called. I love how it creates a rhythm and I think it establishes a sense of urgency and determination.
On a completely different note, I love how Jim 'threatened a woman with macaroni and cheese'. That was great!!!
Furthermore, you did an excellent job of creating visuals. I also love all the added pauses and stuttering during that awkward and confusing moment on Jim's doorstep.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks so much (sorry for the delay on the response.) I actually feel like rhythm is really really important in my writihg, so that's such a great compliment that you felt that. Lol and I love the mac and cheese moment too ;-)
Date: June 27, 2007 10:39 am Title: Stillness and Snow
I really love this it's just beautiful your style is just so full of moments. Update soon!
10 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2007 07:11 am Title: Stillness and Snow
I love this of course...the whole situation you have Jim in is just amazing to think about. I love how he lets her cook for them-many authors would have Jim immediately whipping up a gourmet meal, but this rings truer and serves Pam better. And I love how he puts her first, suppressing what must be an overwhelming desire to know the details. Cannot wait for more.
10 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2007 07:00 am Title: Stillness and Snow
I really like the slow pacing. Well done. :-)
Author's Response: thanks!
Date: June 27, 2007 04:02 am Title: Stillness and Snow
We hope, too.
Love this, of course - you have a writing style that's unlike nearly everyone else's here, and it's just exuding a quiet, lovely feel of things, and it's amazing. I also adore what you write, not just how you write it - saying Jim dips his head [which fits better than any word I've known - why haven't I seen that used as a description before?!] and she nods - that's the perfect way of describing things. And how they smile and thank each other and there're favours.
Love this. Seriously. We hope, too. A lot.
Author's Response: thank you!!! your review is soo great and complimentary. ::blush:: Keep reading!!! Let me know how you like the rest.
Date: June 27, 2007 03:54 am Title: Stillness and Snow
We need more, please
Date: June 27, 2007 03:52 am Title: Burn and beat
Sounds interesting. Off to read more
Date: June 26, 2007 11:05 pm Title: Stillness and Snow
oooooooh man this is good. Beautifully romantic...totally my kind of stuff to read. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: June 26, 2007 10:56 pm Title: Burn and beat
oooh this is gonna be soooo good. The inspiration for this - Boys and Girls - has always been one of my favorite episodes for this thread alone. I always wondered HOW on earth after THAT giant juxtaposition between the man she was engaged to and Jim...how could she stay with Roy....:::sigh:: I'm so glad you decided to tackle this!
Author's Response: me too ;-)
Date: June 22, 2007 05:04 pm Title: Burn and beat
Wow! I loved this! and I can't wait to read more.
10 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2007 12:27 pm Title: Burn and beat
The 'Men become husbands who become fathers' reminded me of John Mayer's Daughters, except the opposite. Great, powerful chapter.
Author's Response: haha! That's so funny cause in my other long fic, fathers and daughters. women and men, one of the chapters is actually named after that song. Guess it's one of my favorites ;-)
Date: June 18, 2007 11:41 am Title: Burn and beat
Wow, this one is gonna be a doozy....I'm so excited.
Can't wait for more!
9 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2007 08:25 am Title: Burn and beat
So glad to see more from you. This was a beautiful beginning - simple yet really powerful. You have such a lovely style of writing so please...hurry with more.
Date: June 16, 2007 01:04 am Title: Burn and beat
Ooh, this is excellent! I really enjoyed your last story, and I'm enjoying this one. You have such a great handle on the characters, and put them in such realistic situations with realistic reactions. I love your style, so keep at it. :) I can't wait for what's coming up.
Date: June 15, 2007 06:50 pm Title: Burn and beat
Very interesting style. Really liked it though. Different from the norm.
I really liked how Pam didn't need to explain what hapened. Jim just understood she couldn't talk about it yet, didn't ask questions, and welcomed her into his house. That was great.
Author's Response: thanks! I always wish people would do that when I don't want to talk about things, lol. I guess I just write how I wish the world was.
Date: June 15, 2007 03:57 pm Title: Burn and beat
I really wish that Pam had blown up at Roy over that...so I'm definitely anxious to see where this will go...hope to see more soon!
Author's Response: thanks for reading! Glad I could give Pam a little oomph for you.
Date: June 15, 2007 02:44 pm Title: Burn and beat
Very nice, I really enjoyed this and I hope that you'll be adding more soon!
Date: June 15, 2007 10:40 am Title: Burn and beat
love it. update soon.
9 [Report This]Date: June 15, 2007 08:26 am Title: Burn and beat
Jim is such a bad ass with his Easy Mac. Sorry that made me laugh a little. I thought this was well put together. I really like stories that elaborate on their internal thoughts. Great job
Date: June 15, 2007 07:49 am Title: Burn and beat
wow. i really like this! first off, Pam leaving Roy is always a good thing. Second, staying with Jim is an AWESOME idea. :) I love the format and I especially love Jim's poem at the end. Leaving boyhood and becoming a man is the perfect image for him in this situation. I can't wait to read more!
Date: June 15, 2007 07:43 am Title: Burn and beat
Love it so far. Can't wait for more!
Date: June 15, 2007 07:28 am Title: Burn and beat
Ooh I like this story. Continue soon!