Date: January 28, 2019 12:37 pm Title: Laughter
“For stopping me.”
This is a powerful ending (I mean, the Epilogue is also great but definitely an epilogue, not main story). I really like how balanced this story is, and how efficiently it's told. Thanks for digging it out of your computer and posting it (so long ago now).
Thank you for the review. I loved going back and reading this story again with you, and wow, sometimes I really like it... other times I'm glad to see how much my writing has improved!
Date: October 21, 2010 10:28 am Title: Confrontation
In my opinion I think this is the most realistic description of how that conversation would go down that I've read here. I think its a little more realistic that yelling would be involved.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I didn't see it until now. I'm glad you thought it was realisitic. It probably should have had more yelling, but I suck at writing fights!
Date: December 08, 2008 08:42 pm Title: New Trust
One of my favourite fan fictions I've read so far.
Amazing job. The fight between them was spot on. I could really see it happening like that. It was just... perfect. Hahah. ;)
Thanks for writing this. I'm in love with it.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for that review, I'm so glad you liked it. It means a lot to me, thanks so much!
Date: September 08, 2007 08:18 pm Title: Epilogue
“Hey, Pam, who’s a better kisser – Jim or Roy?” Kevin asked, giggling. Your Kevin is just sooo Kevin!
Great story. Thanks for sharing it!
Haha! That line was all my beta. I sent it to her with "something very keviny here" instead of a real line. and she created that line and was totally awesome.
Thanks SO much for all the reviews. I wasn't able to respond until now, but they made me SO happy every time I thought about them!
Date: September 08, 2007 08:14 pm Title: Laughter
“But Pam, it wasn’t just a kiss. It wasn’t just a kiss for me last year, and it wasn’t just a kiss now.” Sigh. I love Jim. and Pam.
Author's Response: I know. I love them way to much considering they are fictional characters.
Date: September 08, 2007 08:03 pm Title: Once And For All
Since I'm running out of ways to say how much I love this story I decided to give it a ribbon. One of the perks of being one of the admins!!!
Author's Response: When I read this, I nearly fainted. It is SO awesome. Thanks for the ribbon. Wow, I feel totally loved. I love ribbons. And reviews. Therefore, this review is double awesome
Date: September 08, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Memories Of Love
"The second kiss was different. There were butterflies in her stomach as she walked those last feet towards him. The look in his eyes, jovial and light, suddenly darkened as her arms wrapped around his neck. It wasn’t fear; it was hope. At least, that is what she told herself as they kissed. It felt magical, it felt as if everything was finally right. When it ended, she walked out; she didn’t want face reality. As the door closed behind her, her heart fell as she realized he wasn’t coming after her. Maybe it wasn’t hope after all."
Another awesome chapter, another beautiful paragraph. I am truly loving this story (can you tell??)
Author's Response: I love that paragraph also... that was fun to write. :). You rock!
Date: September 08, 2007 07:51 pm Title: Dare You To Move
Karen's reaction was so heartbreakingly perfect.
“You didn’t want time to think. You wanted to talk to her. You wanted to see if there was a chance. You could have come to the Poconos. Forgotten about her kissing you. The Poconos would have been a perfect time to get over her, once and for all. Remember why we are great together. You didn’t fake sickness to think, you were faking so you could talk to her.”
I hope you and this chapter have made up by now, because it was the best Karen and Jim break-up I've read.
Author's Response: That is so awesome to here, because I really didn't know how in character it was, and if it seemed realistic as a break up, so the fact that you think it was perfect just makes me SO happy. How many times have I said SO in my replies. Oh well.
Date: September 08, 2007 07:40 pm Title: Confrontation
I think you hit the ball out of the park with this chapter. The argument was very realistic, it sounded just like them and really brought to the surface what they've been feeling. And these two lines were extra awesome:
"What the hell was I supposed to do?”
“Stop me,” Pam’s voice broke, tears spilled down her cheeks.
And then to have Karen in the doorway, having heard the whole conversation.
I think I'd marry this chapter if I could. Well, if I weren't already married, and if people actually married chapters!
Can I marry this review? Seriously, best review!
And shush, don't tell the other chapters, but this is my favorite chapter. I still love it.
Date: September 08, 2007 07:21 pm Title: Messages
"Normally, just that message would make his heart skip a beat, but right now, it made his blood boil." Great line, it really shows the frustration he's going through not being able to talk to her.
Author's Response: I know. I just really wanted to make Jim angry, and I can just imagine that reaction. He loves her voice, but just that fustration... would drive anyone crazy.
Date: September 08, 2007 07:14 pm Title: Aftershock
I don't know how I lost track of this story after the first chapter, but I'm glad I found it again tonight! I loved Jim's reaction to the kiss - and Kevin's. And I can't help but feel sorry for Karen, not a whole lot of course, but a bit!
I don't know how you did either, but I am so glad that you read it all and left all the reviews and the ribbon.
And yea, I love Karen, but all in all, she is just an annoying obsticle. Which i can't spell. Oh well.
Date: September 08, 2007 07:08 pm Title: New Trust
This was a nice story. I enjoyed it, but didn't rate it higher because it didn't make me feel like I was really there with our beloved characters as well as some other stories do.
Thanks for the review and the rating. I can understand your reasoning, trust me. Its harder sometimes to write that.
Date: September 08, 2007 10:54 am Title: Epilogue
oh I love the Kev line you chose!! hahaha "who's a better kisser" love it!
Definitely worth it man!!! Hee!
You made me happy for posting the ending :)
Author's Response: thankYOU for the kev line. and yeah, i kinda forgot about this story. so glad its done.
Date: August 29, 2007 08:39 am Title: Laughter
Aww, tied up in a neat bow. The epilogue should be fun. Yay!
Yep, I like neat bow stuff. I am ready for the story to be over (I love the story, its just, ready to move on)
And the epilogue is written, but there is one line my beta says is confusing so have to work that out.
Date: August 28, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Laughter
I see my skills have been narrowed down into ",etc." I see how it goes. you can write miles and miles about a chapter but can narrow my abilities into "etc" :) hee. And you would have a case of the giggles. Worst time ever to get those? In church. That's happened to me once. It was horrible.
It wasn’t just a kiss for me last year, and it wasn’t just a kiss now.”
Ah! Notebook likeness :)
But Pam had spoken
Is this like Survivor now? The tribe has spoken. You're out Jim. And yay for Pam stopping him! Yipee.
Sidenote: I got to have some quality time tonight (like 1 1/2 hours) with a certain lanky teller....... hee. :)
Great job! I see you're going to the epilogue, eh? Good :)
Yes. That is all you are... an etc. :D.
I had my giggles while in the pool. I was seriously scaring my mom. Only way I could stop was to dive underwater and hold my breath as long as I could. Which didn't totally work, because then I would start giggling in the middle, and that doesn't really work.
Yes, this is Survivor: Scranton. Actually Survivor: Two Hours From Scranton edition.
Have (or hope you had) fun with some lanky tellers with no rain. Do tell, do share. There is the chance of seeing Mr Cute Science Office Fan today... :D.
And yeppers on the epilogue, I just need to figure out a few things about it.
Date: August 22, 2007 10:54 am Title: Once And For All
Hee! Nice. This next chapter's gonna be a good one; I can feel it.
I like that Pam's "short" shower lasted until the hot water ran out! And Jim waited patiently the whole time. Awwww.
Glad for the vote of confidence. I guess I should get off my lazy bum and figure out the one bit that is having trouble.
And yeah, well, see this is coming from someone who has NO hot water at the moment.... so, my hot water runs out in two seconds... haha
Date: August 22, 2007 08:31 am Title: Once And For All
I've been out of town and I was just catching up on my reading. I'm glad you updated this one, I love it. Especially, ""Hey,” he whispered. He gently brushed a stray hair from her face." This totally rocks. Everytime he brushes hair from her face, I am over the moon. Hope you can update soon, I need to know why he was LAUGHING - hopefully because she has it so wrong! Good luck with the moving and no I do not want your chem textbook, I got a D in Chem.
Oh, you went to 'scottsdale'. I think I have two chapters left of this thing. The next chapter is written, I am just debating one little line... haven't made up my mind about it yet.
I love the brushing hair out of face move... it is just too sweet and romantic, and I can picture it in my head and I swoon.
Nobody wants my textbook.... not even me....
Date: August 20, 2007 02:44 pm Title: Once And For All
Don’t make it harder.
I can't believe I missed this opportunity to thrown in a TWSS when I read this! Gah. I'm losing my touch.
“Hey,” he whispered. He gently brushed a stray hair from her face.
However, she didn’t expect him to start laughing.
I did. Seesh Pam, come on. OK maybe it's because I've already read the ending...... who cares. This makes me want to use the friends like "Don't make jokes now!" But it doesn't fit. Whatever.
Let me know if you need more help with an ending madam and I still am sorry about geting you all riled up over that CPR story!! How about a funny anecdote to cheer you up? Check your e-mail in a bit ;)
haha, wow, I didn'tnotice the twss either. and, no fair you predicting the future cause you read the next chapter before you read this. you should instantly forget everything, duh! and I love that "don't make jokes now" line, but you are right, totally doesn't fit. although, I do think i had a friends scene in mind as i was writing the next chapter, but it is very very subtule.
will let you know about this ending soon... once i decide or think more
Date: August 20, 2007 02:40 pm Title: Once And For All
What? He's laughing! Oh sweet jeebus, I hope you explain this soon! Glad you're back!
Author's Response: haha, next chapter is written, and i hope explains the laughter. i just need to finish the end (decide the end) and post. glad to be back. i love fanfic too much
Date: August 08, 2007 12:26 pm Title: Memories Of Love
Awww. "Sprout" is adorable, too. But what happens next?!?
Author's Response: Hehe. I had the hardest time thinking of nicknames for her. I spent a ton of time doing that. And as far as what happens next, I don't know. But I do know what happens the chapter after next. Just not sure how I am going to get there.
Date: August 08, 2007 12:22 pm Title: Confrontation
It definitely feels realistic- I am just not sure either of them would ever be this blunt or honest. Maybe now, though! Oooh, poor Karen.
Author's Response: yeah, that was my issue with it. i was just kinda hoping that maybe with them being slightly angry and it being late that it could explain it. but now i am trying to figure out how to write more because those two just don't talk how i want them to. darn them.