9 [Report This]Date: December 21, 2009 08:50 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Very sweet and very true-to-character.
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2009 04:53 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
AH!
Wow! I can't even put into words how amazing this is! Wow! All of it was so perfect and so in-character! WOW!!!
More please! :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 08:09 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Oh, how adorable. The sofa comment sounds just like Jim, and Ebola talk at dinner made me laugh. Plus, I felt pretty bad for Pam when no one bet on her. Great fic!
Date: July 30, 2007 06:57 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
You write the best "55 word" fics. After reading the Creed one, I didn't think it could get better.. but this is too cute.
Author's Response: Why thank you. After the Creed one I didn't expect to write another, then this just sort of happened.
Date: July 24, 2007 11:09 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Wow. Way to make me really unproductive at work.
This story owns me. Your dialogue was so incredibly perfect, I can't stand it. You could give those writers a run for their money.
You have to write more. "Jim and Pam Go Grocery Shopping in 55 Words" I'll wait here while you write it :)
Author's Response: Hah! Thanks for the review.
9 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2007 04:55 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Excellent job. Short and sweet. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2007 04:56 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
So enjoying this.
Random Moment I loved: Pam trying to climb into the passenger side.
Oh, and Jim making the reservation in advance? Oh yeah, sweet, perfect, thouhtful, yeah.
Hum, "I was so nervous on Beach Day When I Made That Speech." Sounds tasty!
Jokes are a safe place for them... a place where they can go... I don't think my words will make any sense, but I love the ebola line and it made my brain think.
Such a sweet story, and i love how all are 55 words and they all combined together to make a story... so great.
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2007 03:26 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
I love so much about the things that you choose to be. These were simply brilliant. I think I snorted the loudest at this part:
"I have a sofa."
"That's cool," he said. "Goodnight Pam, it was great. See you tomorrow."
As he fell asleep as his place he finally understood her sofa comment.
"Dammit."
Hee!!
Date: July 11, 2007 10:18 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
"Kevin had a pool going," Pam explained. "I was the only one who bet on me."
and
As he fell asleep as his place he finally understood her sofa comment.
"Dammit."
Were my favorite parts...both spot on!
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2007 08:51 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
haha! loved these! sweet and funny all at once.. brilliant use of the challenge!
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2007 12:43 am Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Outstanding job. I loved all of these.
Date: July 10, 2007 10:46 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Oh my god that is great!
"Kevin had a pool going," Pam explained. "I was the only one who bet on me."
!!!!!!
And the last part was, of course, brilliant.
Also thought I'd point out that Pam did wear red in Benihana Christmas.
Date: July 10, 2007 10:18 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Oh that was GREAT! TOTALLY getting favorited! I can't even tell you which vignette was my favorite because they all rocked my socks off! That side of burned feet line did make me laugh out loud though. GREAT STUFF.
Author's Response: Thanks. My first review in caps!
Date: July 10, 2007 08:45 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Can you please please PLEASE expand this into a full story? It really is so perfectly written.
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I don't think it would work as a longer, regular story. But I appreciate the thought and the review.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 08:12 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
This was absolutely lovely and hilarious. You captured their voices wonderfully and with humor.
Date: July 10, 2007 08:06 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
"Kevin had a pool going," Pam explained. "I was the only one who bet on me."
that line is perfection. i can't even tell you.
9 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 06:19 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
What a creative way to use the 55 word challenge. Your use of humour is so clever and engaging. I like it a lot.
Date: July 10, 2007 06:17 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Swedge -- a pu pu platter is a little assortment of yummies. Or as Michael would research it: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pu_pu_platter
Author's Response: Oh, I learn something new every day.
Date: July 10, 2007 06:04 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Swedge,
Love, love, love every single line of this. It's just adorable and funny and awww, Jim, buddy, that was an invitation!
Seriously, dude, you need to write some more stories.
Author's Response: Thanks. I intend to. :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 05:13 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
A two word review:
Absolute. Perfection.
Author's Response: That's a really sweet review. It would also work as a vodka ad. ;)
Date: July 10, 2007 04:44 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
I really loved this. You have the voices completely down and made this work beautifully.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I'm still wondering what Jim's number 6 is though.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Awesome. Very well done. Man Pam was on. Would you consider doing some more?
Author's Response: We'll see. I have several things in different stages of development. But these little prose poems are addictive even if sometimes difficult. Notice how I avoided a 'that's what she said' there? Thanks.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 04:12 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
So this was awesome - I'm sitting here with a big smile on my face. Honestly, these little vignettes were so much like catching glimpses of them on the show: the dialogue is just so them. We say it a lot, I think, in reviews -- commenting that the dialogue is spot-on -- but in this case, it's not just their manner of speaking that you've nailed. It's the much harder art of capturing their subtleties - how the subtext often says way more than they do.
Love nervous Pam here and confident Jim; love the banter (Ebola and Dwight's assistant Andy and the sofa).
Just pitch perfect and a real treat to read.
Date: July 10, 2007 03:20 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Wonderful. So sweet. I was grinning the whole way through.
Pam for the win, indeed!
Date: July 10, 2007 03:16 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Wow. I never review but I had to this time. This is great..I LOVE how you captured them so perfectly. The sofa and the wager moments were simply awesome.