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Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2020 04:40 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

So it turns out Grace is the true hero of The Job, and also that Jim basically can't handle hearing Pam mentioned without turning into a stammering tween. I love this.

I appreciate that you're addressing the whole "Jim Leaves Karen in New York" problem, too - I always felt pretty confident that he didn't actually abandon her, but it's nice to see him thinking about it beforehand.

I like the characterization of Grace here! Obviously an actress who answers phones to pay the bills is going to love seeing some drama playing out right in front of her.

Author's Response:

Yes. Jim is far from perfect but I could never agree that he would have left her stranded. 

 Grace is totally the hero! I loved writing her.  

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2020 04:33 am Title: A wretch like me

"It was like she wanted a grand exit, but everything just got small on her. Heh, except for the boobs." is a great line. Oh, poor Jan.

This feels very accurate to the final moments of Jaren, and again, feels like something Karen would just HATE to realize someone else sees. Like, she has to know she's making some bad decisions in the name of getting them through this rough patch, but this feels like something it would totally humiliate her to know someone else sees.

Author's Response:

Yes, I think the whole Scranton era is one Karen is probably not thrilled to remember. 

And the downfall of Jan is a story that doesn’t get enough attention. I mean, her facade was far too fragile to withstand Hurricane Michael. 

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 05, 2020 04:28 am Title: Amazing Grace

This is a really fun concept. I like the little hints that even buttoned-down David Wallace is also a little strange (Amazing Grace is definitely what Michael would call her). And seeing the outside perspective on the three of them waiting is very telling - the description of Karen as "Like she knows she’s special and she’s dying to prove it because she’s terrified you’ll think she’s not" and her read on the Jim-Karen dynamic is incisive, and I just kept thinking how much Karen would HATE to hear herself described this way. (Don't worry, Karen, things are about to get... well, worse, but in a "you're almost in the dark before dawn" sort of way.")

Author's Response: Oh this was one of my favorites to write. I loved creating a persona for Grace. I’m glad you like it!

Reviewer: Strider Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2008 02:03 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

I absolutely loved this! The story from Grace's point of view was just perfect! This was so clever and creative. Really great work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you found this older story. I had a fabulous time writing it (I was totally on a "It's a date" high at the time, of course). I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, it means a lot to me. And I'm also glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Strider Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2008 01:59 pm Title: A wretch like me

I really love Grace's take on Jim and Karen. Very nice.

Author's Response: Thanks! Again, I was trying to figure out what someone neutral would see when looking at those two. I'm not sure that Jim was really as aloof as I portrayed him here, but I think I got Karen spot-on. Heh. Thanks again!

Reviewer: Strider Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2008 01:55 pm Title: Amazing Grace

I love this point of view. I love that you are writing a character that few people seem to see, but who herself sees everything. I am also really impressed at how you work in Grace's point of referece--theater and singing-- into the way she speaks about everything. Really, really good.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I just thought about all the wackiness that went on in that room that day, and we had an observer sitting right there who, unlike us, doesn't really know these people (at least the Scranton folks). It was fun to create a new character and try to build a voice instead of trying to capture one we are all so familiar with.

Reviewer: pinkiepie172 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 09, 2007 08:00 am Title: Amazing Grace

I love Grace!! They should show her while Ryan is in New York. This is such a great story and I can't wait to read the rest of it!! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you, pinkiepie! I hope you enjoy the rest.

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed [Report This]
Date: August 03, 2007 06:58 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

Wonderful last line!  This just made me smile from beginning to end.  What a wonderful(and believable)story you have created about a character in the background.  Great stuff!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much- I'm so happy to make you smile! I am very, very pleased you thought it was believable (and "wonderful" is a pretty nice compliment, too!). Thanks again!

Reviewer: Cassandra Mulder Signed [Report This]
Date: August 03, 2007 01:24 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

Beautiful! *claps* You really made this believable, like Grace really did have such a part in all of this. And hey, maybe she did. I'm sold. :) Excellent work.


Author's Response: Thank you! At least at this point, we don't know that Grace wasn't actually the secret mastermind of the events behind "The Job"!  Hee. I'm glad she felt real to you; that was definitely my goal. I had a blast writing this piece. Thanks again!

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 05:49 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

Jim's reaction upon realizing that Grace knows/talks to Pam was perfect, and I love that he came up with a way to get her to stall Pam in a way that still left her completely surprised when he turned up to ask her out. Also love that he made arrangements for Karen.

And the last line - wonderful! You left me sincerely hoping she gets her big break soon.



Author's Response: Thank you! I actually re-wrote that "Grace knows Pam" section twice, so it is very good to read that I chose the right version! I love Jim and think he's a good guy, so I wanted to show him trying to be considerate of Karen while still finally making his move on Pam. Thank you again for reading, and for being a supporter of Grace!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 03:48 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

At this point, I had decided that, one: Jim Halpert was a nice guy; two: Jim Halpert wasn’t really that sold on his girlfriend, and three: Jim Halpert had something going on with sweet little Pam, the receptionist in his office.

Totally and completly true. Grace is rather smart. Although I think any monkey with half a brain could pick up on those facts.

:D:D:D:D:D. Yay. Now I really need to pack or the only think I will ahve to wear on vacation is.... well, not really sure because I am thinking all I have in my car right now is a plastic bag, a wet towel, and a backpack. Yikes! I really better pack.

Author's Response: Well, Grace had only been observing the situation for about an hour and a half at this point, so I thought she was pretty smart! Hee. I sincerely hope you got around to packing, although I'm sure you'd look cute in a plastic bag... Thanks again!

Reviewer: BeckySue Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 03:48 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

Very nicely done! You've planned this out very well and it's a great take on the Job. Very original! Congratulations on a job well done!

Author's Response: Thank you! I actually didn't plan the end very well, and had to sort of jiggle it to make it all work, so I'm VERY relieved to read that it came out well. I'm so glad you read and enjoyed this. Thanks, again!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 03:40 pm Title: Amazing Grace

So I am leaving for Scottsdale in just like 30 hours, and I haven't started packing. What am I doing instead? reading fanfic. I think my priorities are very messed up. But, then again, I am going to not be able to read for like 3 days and I need to read them now before I die of fanfic deprevation or something.

"you know how some people are really book smart but have no social skills or common sense? That’s Michael without the book smart part."
That is totally michael!

"just buy stuff so he’ll go away." my money is on that option

I love this take on teh receptionist, and I can't wait to click next!

Author's Response: We will definitely miss you while you're gone- have a great vacation! I'm glad you like Grace's take on the situation- I wanted her to be pretty perceptive. Thank you!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 01:51 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

YAY!  Oh it really turned out perfectly.  I adore the last line.  Her excitement was palpable.  I love that she even mentioned she was so caught up in Jim that she totally forgot about Jan and Michael.  Sounds familiar...

Author's Response:

Aw, thanks! Yeah, I sort of just completely abandoned the Jan/Michael storyline and realized that it felt a little bit abrupt, so I just had her mention it and then I was in the clear! Hee. I was actually unsure about the last line, so I'm very glad you like it- that makes me much more confident about it!  Thanks again, as always, for your help!

Reviewer: officefreak Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

Very nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 01:42 pm Title: Was blind, but now I see

OMG, OMG!  Grace is Amazing.  (I know, lame.)

Love the last line, BTW.



Author's Response: Heeeee. OK, lame, possibly, but it made me giggle, so that's fine! Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: downtown Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 11:58 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

perfect, perfect, perfect! I am grinning from ear to ear now. I love that Grace & Pam are "friends" and I'd imagine they speak to each other a lot now that I think about it!!! With all the communication between Scranton & corporate over the years... now I want to see Grace in the new episodes!!! :) This was so well done and clever... way to Jim!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm so glad I could make you smile. I am almost afraid they will show more of Grace and she won't be nearly as much fun as I've imagined her. Heh. Thank you, again!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 10:51 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

Really nice job!  Great read. 



Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with it. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Donnelly Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 09:55 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

soooooo cute!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much!

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 09:37 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

Okay, this chapter contains two of my new favorite metaphors/descriptions: Jim leaning over Grace's desk "like there was nothing more important in the world than our conversation"; and Jim leaving the NY office "looking like you imagine the Christians going into the gladiator arenas: terrified, but confident of their reward." 

Wow...just...wow! :) 



Author's Response:

"Wow" yourself! That's so nice to say about my turns of phrase; I appreciate the specific compliments. Glad you've enjoyed this story! Thank you!

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2007 09:34 am Title: Was blind, but now I see

That was so great. What a great ending. I found myself speeding through it, to get to the end, as if I didn't know what happens. But I was excited to experience it with Grace.
Looking forward to reading it again.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you stuck with it and enjoyed the ending. And thank you for liking Grace!

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2007 06:03 pm Title: A wretch like me

Ms. Lis.  You, like Grace, are amazing.  Such a unique idea and we are all just dying to know what really happened when Jim left corporate.

And I suspect you are about to show us.

Just...HURRY. :) Pretty please?



Author's Response: Why, thank you! I do want to finish this- I have other fic ideas floating around (including the final chapters of "New Clothes"). I'm glad you like Grace; she's my new favorite doll to play with!

Reviewer: Joni24 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2007 03:31 pm Title: Amazing Grace

Oh, what a grea idea! I love the new point of view!

Author's Response: Thank you ! It's fun to look at "our" characters from a new perspective. Thanks, again!

Reviewer: downtown Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2007 11:20 am Title: A wretch like me

Thanks for posting the next part so quickly! Awesome! Can't wait to see how she reacts to Jim leaving the interview... and what really happened! I know that's what we're all dying to know :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm definitely going "off script" for the last part. I hope you like how I imagine it!

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2007 11:04 am Title: A wretch like me

Ahh! So sweet! 'He gave me a really weird look as I answered the phone- like a wistful half-smile.'
Oh! And at the time she though! So at another time she will think otherwise! Yay.
I just love Grace's perspective. Nice work.

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, that look of Jim's was such a great moment, as he was reminded of Pam and realized that it would be a different receptionist up at corporate. I'm glad you're enjoying it. Hmmm, seems like you picked up on a clue for chapter 3. Hope you enjoy it, too! Thanks again!

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