10 [Report This]Date: August 30, 2014 11:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Ugh. The part about her alarm clock and the words like let’s and someday. I just can't with how good this is.
10 [Report This]Date: October 23, 2007 05:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
B E A U T I F U L ! ! !
Date: August 17, 2007 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. How can you turn something as mundane and sometimes annoying as a train outside the window and make it something so beautiful??
And why is Pam's alarm clock taped down??
10 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
ugh. so good.
Date: August 07, 2007 10:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Mmm, the symbolism of trains. Lovely, sensual piece. Also, very evocative for me personally- an old freight train rumbled through our neighborhood around 9:30 every night when I was a child. It put me to sleep- the sound of trains still makes me feel safe and sleepy.
Date: August 06, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
all i can say is that this is the kind of story that makes me think, "damn, i wish i wrote that." beautiful. just beautiful.
Date: August 05, 2007 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love stories that make you feel transported. This is just so elegantly written. Amazing.
Date: August 05, 2007 03:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Instead of quoting the entire story, I'll just say I love, love, love this and you never cease to amaze. Wonderful!
Date: August 05, 2007 01:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the sweet and intimate tone of this little vignette. What great images: "A surge of want swells deep within her, so overwhelming that her limbs feel restless with not touching him." And She wants him to feel the train push its way under his skin..." Very good control of language. I can feel what you're writing. Very cool!
9 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2007 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. I really like the mood it creates.
Date: August 05, 2007 08:35 am Title: Chapter 1
I love trains. A writing teacher once told me a writer should always try to live near trains... this story reminded me of that! Loved it.
Date: August 05, 2007 06:46 am Title: Chapter 1
I love how he wants to know everything that's important to her and shapes who she is. He's immersing himself in her world now both physically and emotionally. Lovely image of him standing there with the sun shining in the window.
As always, another wonderful story! Thanks.
Date: August 05, 2007 04:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Yup, this is how it would be. As usual, this is so quiet, yet vividly emotionally there too. Love his murmuring they should take a train someday - what a perfectly romantic and subtle way to signal an entire future. Just great.
10 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2007 12:14 am Title: Chapter 1
How did you get to be so awesome? Because this is just perfect.
10 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2007 12:07 am Title: Chapter 1
It's always a joy whenever you post anything. If I ever break my self imposed blockade on favoriting, it will be for you.
Date: August 04, 2007 11:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Such a beautiful ending to a beatiful little story. 'Let's' and 'someday' are great words...
Really nice.
10 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2007 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous.
Date: August 04, 2007 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautifully written!!
10 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2007 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
again, beautiful, beautiful, wow wow wow. this has like amped up my anticipation for the next season sevenfold or something.
Date: August 04, 2007 10:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Already commented, but I still adore this after reading it four more times in twenty minutes, so. Uhm. Just so you know. I keep finding new things in between the lines and the word and everything, it's just guh, so beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2007 10:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
just ... yes. so gorgeous.