Date: August 23, 2007 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Adorable. I loved this line: "(The twenty-second month anniversary of the Dundies night when she drunkenly kissed him? Nah, that was one he was still keeping to himself right now.)" Haha...great. You have their banter down so well and it reads so easily. Very cute (that's a good thing, just happy Jim & Pam are quite cute and a bit dorky).
Date: August 22, 2007 10:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Hee! I like the way this slowly moved from heavy and intense and dissolved into silliness. I must say, it features some of the best writing you've done yet. Really evocative beginning; I like the idea that Jim is such a Time Guy.
Author's Response: Wow - thanks, belsum! I sure appreciate the feedback!!
Date: August 22, 2007 08:46 am Title: Chapter 1
How did I not review this yet? Loved, of course. But also really impressed. I read numbers, and it was pretty much like reading Chinese. Very impressive, Moxie-controlled!Jim. Even more impressing? How much of a hussy Pam is. I tell ya, that boy tends to emphasize that trait in us females..
Author's Response: I don't think I fully comprehended the definition of hussy until I met Jim Halpert. ;-) Thanks for the review, Star!
Date: August 21, 2007 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
“So what would the 12 steps of our recovery program include exactly?”
Jim put his fork down and rubbed his jaw. “I'm not quite sure, but I can say with certainly that most of them would require being naked.”
Okay, you win. Best conversation EVER. :D
You know what? I can totally see Pam at a demolition derby. :D
Yes, I think our Pam is only half-kidding about going to the derby..... I think I'll have to come up with that list of 12 steps for Jim....
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: August 21, 2007 04:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Another winner, Moxie!
I can totally imagine Jim's growing sense of panic and despair as he counted the days down to June 10th. I really believe that he probably obsessed over it more than Pam.
And I can see them both being nervous about getting too serious too quickly. Being truthful with each other about their feelings is a relatively new experience. Can't wait to see how this is handled on the show. Hope it gradually unfolds over the season.
Thanks for sending us stories from across the ocean, Mox!
Author's Response: Yes, I agree with you - having them go slow as they get used to being around each other again sounds like a great deal of fun for s4 - I hope Greg Daniels is listening!! :D Thanks for reviewing, EH!
Date: August 20, 2007 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the look into Jim's mind. I love that, despite their insecurities, you still managed to show their growth. Both together and individually. I love how you capture the interaction between. And, of course, I completely adore you, but you already know that :D
Author's Response: Thanks - I so enjoy hanging out in Jim's mind! :-D
Date: August 20, 2007 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love it, as always! You always weave a fabulous tale.
Marrakesh?? There's one of those near Scranton, too? Did you read the rest of my chapters or is that a bizarre coincidence?
Author's Response: Haha - complete coincidence, I swear!! Great minds do think alike, don't they??? Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: August 20, 2007 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like how the first half of this takes place entirely in Jim's head. I'm not sure that Jim would be so 'Rainman' in his counting, but he is definitely aware, and sentimental, so you make a convincing case for Jim being a bit obsessive in counting the days relating to all things Pam.
Am I mean for thinking Jim would be all over celebrating every interval of time spent with Pam as opposed to the lame 6 month anniversary with Karen? Oh well, no surprise there.
“Forget that I don't have to hide how I really feel from you anymore, I guess,” she finally confessed. Give me a big helping of that dynamic in S4, oh please, oh please!!!
And I second the request for a sequel based on Jim's last comment.
Author's Response: Request duly noted. We'll see how it goes. ;-) As for the Rainmain thing, perhaps I could have been a little clearer - I do only think he's aware of such things if and when they apply to Pam. I mean, let's face it - the boy has had a lot of free time on his hands in the past to contemplate such things.... (hopefully he'll be much too busy in s4!) And I totally agree. Every anniversary they have will be remembered by Jim. Karen Who? ;-)
Date: August 20, 2007 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
As usual, you strike a lovely balance of their insecurity, their comfort, and their mutual humor. There's something so right about this- exactly the right level of intimacy for a new-but-not-really relationship.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your sweet review, nqllisi! It's really, really appreciated. :-) I'm pleased you think I hit the right tone.
Date: August 20, 2007 10:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Such sweetness. Great story as usual, Moxie. But this part:
“I think I'd rather be stripped naked and tied down with my own belt, necktie and shoelaces.”
Uh, sequel? :-P
haha! Hmm..... maybe..... :-D
Thanks for reviewing, Susan!!
Date: August 20, 2007 10:03 am Title: Chapter 1
I love the bit of Jim's neuroses we get here at the beginning. It is beautifully written, so true to Jim's character and just plain funny. 'Fortunately it was also the night he had been able to set the counter back to zero.' And that is just a beautiful line.
I just love waking up to a one-shot from Moxie! Yay!
Author's Response: aww - thanks, desert!! I'd hoped poeple wouldn't think I made Jim too OCD, but there are hints that he does a bit of it....
Date: August 20, 2007 09:33 am Title: Chapter 1
This is a little different for you, Mox...more of a complete story in a single conversation, than a multi-moment (multi-scene) narrative. Very effective (love your usual sagas too, of course, but this is a nice variation.) And just as sweet and funny. Great last line too. That Pam - always with her mind in the gutter ;-)
Author's Response: Well of course, Colette - Pam is the original hussy!! And thanks so much for your opinion on why this felt so different for me. I think you might be on to something.....
Date: August 20, 2007 07:31 am Title: Chapter 1
just a question - how much counting did you do to get all of those numbers (ex 372 days since the kiss)... cause, that is a heck of a lot of numbers.
Has it really been like 3 months. *counts* may-june, june-july, july-august.... wow this summer past fast. of course, until sept 27th will drag on and on! (38 days, 10 hours, 35 mins, 02 secs)
"seven million nine hundred forty eight thousand eight hundred seconds." too many numbers... brain exploding. don't you know its summer. besides, i am done with math classes, and numbers are just not worth it.
why can I not have a Jim?
Oh this was so good, and oddly enough reminded me of the show House also. So win win.
Emily, here's a secret: Jim has a password-encoded Excel spreadsheet that keeps track of all the numbers for him. :-)
Wow - reminded you of House? I'm delighted beyond words at that thought!
Date: August 20, 2007 06:17 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so sweet. You write JAM so well and I love that Jim would totally remember that it's their 3 month anniversary!
Author's Response: Thanks, Abigail! Writing JAM well is what I live for - so I really appreciate your comments!