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Reviewer: MissCorporate Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2023 05:05 am Title: Chapter 1

You can't read this and not feel bad for Roy here. So, a bittersweet read. The only thing I would say here is that lines with Roy's POV were sometimes mingled with the dialogue from Jim and Pam, so a separation would have been clearer to read. I enjoyed the marriage twist at the end, but, as I said, painful for Roy.

Author's Response: I always thought that the show did a good job of mixing comedy with a whole range of other emotions. "Bittersweet" is exactly what I was going for. Thanks for reading and replying!

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 28, 2020 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ooooof. This is brutal for Roy (although really, there are some valuable lessons to be learned here if he's serious about the blonde). But a very cute AU. The detail of Jim remembering the conversation exactly makes sense, and I love to see that Jim is still paying that much attention (the Cobb salad!) a year later.

Author's Response:

Very AU! Jim in Australia, engaged at Chili's! But I do remember working hard on this one to strike that balance between cute JAM-fluff and the cold-blooded torture of poor Roy. Heh.

I'm having so much fun with your tour through my back catalog, you know that, right? It makes me want to write more!  

Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 24, 2017 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is really lovely and simple. The Roy perspective really makes it work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Hard to believe I wrote this so long ago-- before we knew how the story would turn out. I'm so glad it's still making people smile!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2009 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 1

WOW! okay, that was really cute, and then the ending is just so surprising, just WOW! very creative too, i loved the part about roy and the playful banter, so cute!

Author's Response: Wow, you commented over a year ago! I need to pop by more often...I'm so sorry! Thank you SO MUCH for reading and commenting and liking this little bit o'fluff.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed [Report This]
Date: August 20, 2008 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

Awwwwwwwwwwww poor Roy NOT lol :)

Author's Response: Hey, sorry I didn't notice this comment earlier, Hannah! Thanks for reading and taking the time to review!

Reviewer: GoIrish Signed [Report This]
Date: April 07, 2008 10:06 am Title: Chapter 1

Whoa! If that doesn't make you feel bad for Roy I don't know what will!

Author's Response: Yeah, Roy's not a terrible guy, just awful for Pam. I don't know why I wanted to torture him here! Hee. Thank you for commenting!

Reviewer: FinerThings Signed [Report This]
Date: January 30, 2008 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

Awww, that was so very romantic. I love the Pam and Jim banter, and poor Roy for being forced to listen to the cuteness.

Author's Response: Thank you! I think the show balances the cute/funny with the cringy/sad so well, that I was trying to capture that. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Sorry for the late reply- I was offline for a few months having a baby. :)

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 06, 2007 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

I wanted to say something about this, but I can't think of anything that hasn't already been said.  Your portrayal of Roy's pain is so tangible that it's a real threat to supercede the happy fluff.  It's like RoyJam.  Ummm... I just wanted to try the subscript thing.

Author's Response: Thank you! It was hard to balance, but it was a fun exercise. At it's best, the show is a mix of the bitter and sweet, right?

Reviewer: Team_Pam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 08, 2006 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh my freaking goodness!!! The ending?!?!! WOW! POOR poor Roy :) Wow... I just loved everything about this! The dialogue was right-on. Roy's reactions were priceless and totally heartbreaking. And you totally captured Jim/Pam's love. They laugh together. Jim pays attention. Awwww, perfect! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it- I have faith that they'll get there someday (but poor Roy).

Reviewer: yippee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 04, 2006 06:02 am Title: Chapter 1

My poor little reader's heart is so confused! They way that you wrote this really made me so excited & happy for Jim & Pam, and then so sad for Roy. Love the way you portrayed both sides...and loved that you had Jim proposing at Chilli's :)

Author's Response: Thank you! That mix of happy and sad is what defines the show for me, so I'm excited that you thought I caught some of that feeling.

Reviewer: Lawanda Anonymous 8 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved this!  Such an original scenario, there's a lot more that could be explored here.  I had no idea until the very end where you would be going with it.  My only question is that I don't know if I buy Jim proposing on a "first date", at a Chili's nonetheless.  Seems to me like he'd make much more of an effort for her, though of course the thought is nice.  But very interesting, very good read overall!

Author's Response: Thank you! It's actually the one-year anniversary of their first date (which was at Chili's, also).  My husband took me back to the place we went on our first date on the night that he proposed, which gave me the idea. I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: LittleKidLover Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

So good!!! I could totally picture Jim and Pam :) 

 loved it!

Author's Response: Thank you!!

Reviewer: TV_Buffy Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great story! Very well done. My heart feels for Roy, but my mind knows it was best for him to hear it. Hopefully, he'll be more attentive with his next love.

Author's Response: Thank you! I enjoyed writing it- I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved Jim and Pam's conversation - sounded just like them. And I loved Roy's thoughts, too - especially this - "It should have been simple to pay attention to her, as much as he loved her. Why hadn't he?"  And the proposal - how very sweet and unexpected!  Poor Roy but yea Jim and Pam!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm so glad you thought it sounded like them!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh that was good. Loved the line, Yeah, I, uh...I actually brought you here to ask you to marry me."

Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona!

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 10:16 am Title: Chapter 1

"Roy felt a wry triumph. At least he knew her that well."

Nice. Not well enough, Roy. Loved the cobb salad exchange - very true to JAM. This is a great way for Roy to see why

Author's Response: Yeah, Roy doesn't get to see what the audience sees (at least not yet!), so I think it was important for him to really understand. Thank you!

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 09:55 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh, the torture for Roy.  As wonderfully fluffy and sweet as Jim and Pam were, this story made me cringe so much for Roy.  Poor guy.  The idea that Jim and Pam had their first date at Chili's is hilarious.

Author's Response:

Thanks! I just totally see Jim thinking it is hilarious to make her go back to the scene of the crime, but also feeling really sentimental about the place because she first kissed him there.

Yeah, poor Roy.

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 09:12 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh, poor, poor Roy!  He's not a bad guy at all, is he? As you so wonderfully showed in this story, he just got comfortable and stopped paying attention.

Good job! 

Author's Response: Thanks!  I think it's too late now that she's got Jim, but if he'd just been listening I don't think she would ever have slipped away.

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 08:45 am Title: Chapter 1

Poor Roy! No one should have to endure listening to that! You wrote it so well, that it was a pleasure to read, even though I felt really bad for him.

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I have a soft spot for Roy, even though I know Jim and Pam should be together. I guess I showed both of those biases here!

Reviewer: Jonah5 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 08:33 am Title: Chapter 1

"Yeah, I, uh...I actually brought you here to ask you to marry me."

I totally did not expect that and let out such a squee.  Awesome story!

Author's Response: Yay for squee! (Thanks for the rec on TWoP, too!).

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 07:27 am Title: Chapter 1

Great job--I don't really know how to feel!  Jim and Pam are so adorable and fluffy, and you succeeded in making me feel bad for Roy, especially here: Roy felt a wry triumph. At least he knew her that well.

I love the 4am phone call to Australia, and I love that Jim brings her to Chili's for a proposal!

Author's Response: Thank you! I wasn't sure what tone to take so it ended up kinda mixed. I'm glad it didn't ruin it for you!

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