7 [Report This]Date: January 27, 2008 07:43 pm Title: On The Road
"An image of him sprawled on a hotel bed, her head on his naked chest, their bodies twisted in the sheets flashes briefly in her mind, but she forces it away and focuses back on the road."
I like the way Pam thinks! And I hope she did pack the condoms and lubricant.
Date: January 27, 2008 07:09 pm Title: Reaching the Ocean
Ok, you get us to the happy place where Pam has pushed though her doubts with Jim, and you leave us with that cliffhanger? I sure hope you don't make us wait as long for the next update.
P.S. I am still loving this story and that you have a fresh premise for them to explore together.
Date: January 27, 2008 07:07 pm Title: Prologue: The Call She Didn't Make
Yes, I have been waiting for an update to this! But seriously, who the hell is calling?!?!?
Date: January 27, 2008 06:58 pm Title: Reaching the Ocean
THANK YOU.
FINALLY! I was growing impossibly impatient over here, deerinthepark, but really, this was worth the wait. I love the tone you've established throughout this story, and the ominous twist here at the end has me on pins and needles. Can't wait for more! -CH
Date: January 20, 2008 08:30 pm Title: Las Vegas
Umm...Hello!?!?!!
Gettin' impatient here, deerinthepark!! More, more, more!!! :-) --CH
10 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2008 09:23 am Title: Las Vegas
I've never wanted to go to Las Vegas so much in my life. Think Pam will let me borrow Jim to accompany me?
This chapter was HOT STUFF. Can't wait for more.
8 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2008 10:39 am Title: Las Vegas
I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet! I've been reading it religiously since you started posting it...I apologize for my negligence.
I love this story! It's such a neat idea. You do the tension/awkwardness very well, and I love the running banter. Nice job! I can't wait to see what you have in store next!
Date: January 03, 2008 12:20 am Title: Prologue: The Call She Didn't Make
i lovelovelove this so far! (but the admin inside me needs to let you know that you should probably up the rating to M or even MA ;)
Author's Response: Whoops, I completely forgot about that! I hadn't planned on making it so explicit, haha. Thanks for the reminder :)
Date: January 02, 2008 04:46 pm Title: Prologue: The Call She Didn't Make
I can't remember if I have commented on this story but holy crap this is fantastic!!! Every update I go back and reread because I love it sooo much.
10 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2008 04:28 pm Title: Las Vegas
This is one of the best stories I have ever read! Made my day to get two updates! I'm a little nervous for the coming angst, but I'll trust you!
Date: January 02, 2008 03:20 pm Title: Las Vegas
yay for vegas :)
Date: January 02, 2008 01:00 pm Title: Las Vegas
Wow, I didn't expect Pam to get the guts to talk to Jim so soon. WTG, FNB! I'm interested to see what happens with her misgivings about being in a fantasy-land (Vegas is perfect for that, BTW) and what happens when harsh reality intrudes.
Date: January 02, 2008 12:26 pm Title: Las Vegas
That was HOT! So passionate, but still tense. This just keeps getting better.
Date: January 02, 2008 09:46 am Title: To Vegas
Oh gosh, seriously, after each chapter, i don't know how it can get any better, but it does! You really have been knocking 'em out of hte park!
She doesn't know if it's because she's practically naked and that's weird or because she's practically naked and that's erotic, but she shifts over to him anyway, wrapping his arm around her as she buries her face in his chest. The last thing she feels before she drifts off is his hand tracing circles on her back.
*dies*
So great, can't wait to see more deerinthepark, lovely job!
10 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2008 09:35 am Title: To Vegas
I'm just loving this! I was so excited to wake up and see an update, deerinthepark. You've done a great job with the banter and the tension, and I can't wait to see what happens when they get across the country (ol' Pam's never seen the Pacific, so I don't think illegal sex on the beach would be "inordinately extravagant;" it would be requisite--wink, wink).
Great work here, and I can hardly wait for the next update! -CH
10 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2008 09:30 am Title: To Vegas
This is one of those stoires where I get more and more invested with each chapter. It's become one of my favorites ever. I find myself getting frustrated with Pam, but then I remember this is S2 Pam, who hasn't learned the value of courage, so the way you write her is definitely in character. I think this is a very difficult scenario to write in a believable way, and you've done a tremendous job with it.
9 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2008 07:29 am Title: Denver
This is a great story and an original twist. Was a bit skeptical at first but your writing and knowledge of the characters has me hooked, good job and keep it up!
10 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2008 07:10 am Title: To Vegas
Thanks for the quick update! I love this installment. So in character that they can still be walking on eggshells even after having sex. Love it. Great job.
Date: January 02, 2008 06:34 am Title: To Vegas
yay JAM awkwardness ! :) more, please ?!
Date: January 02, 2008 05:54 am Title: To Vegas
Oh holy smokes, DITP! I didn't think you could keep up the sexual tension after they'd done the deed, but wow. You did. Nice job.
I especially liked the awkwardness and 'what can't we talk about', but tangled up with this newfound intimacy and random toplessness. Cannot WAIT to see what they do in Vegas.
Date: January 01, 2008 11:38 pm Title: To Vegas
I was sad and mad at the beginning but I held on till the end and it was worth it because that was so adorable
Author's Response: I hope the next chapter will make you a little happier ;)
9 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2008 11:32 pm Title: On The Road
This is amazing! It's so unpretentious. Like you're not always reaching for metaphors that aren't there, or elaborating on emotions so much that the dialogue disappears. But it's not too chatty either. I mean, so far it's a little dry, but like I said, I like that. It's not overwrought, and it shouldn't be, because the show is definitely not. And I'm sure that slightly less minimalistic things are just around the corner. Can't wait! As it is it's pretty close to perfect. Thanks for writing! :)
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for this review, because that's definitely what I'm going for in my writing. Nothing turns me off more than a fic that tries to be too poetic and emotional. I'm often afraid I overcompensate and end up with really boring stories where nothing really happens, but I hope at least it's a refreshing change from the usual stuff. Which, don't get me wrong, can often be great in fics, but I agree with you that the show is not overwrought and I try to reflect that in my writing. It's not always successful, but that is my goal! Thanks again for the review :)
Date: January 01, 2008 10:56 pm Title: Prologue: The Call She Didn't Make
Wowowowow! First of all, that sex update was awesome, haha! And this Vegas chapter was PHENOMENAL! I was cringing right along with Pam there in the beginning, but I liked how it turned out. Just hope they're gonna confront their "issues" soon enough.... Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!
7 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2008 10:33 pm Title: To Vegas
ok...at the beginning of this chapter, i was upset that pam ignored everything and jim let her. But you saved this with the last few sentences.....Bravo! Can't wait for your next update!
Author's Response: I'm sorry for that, but hopefully the next chapter will right all wrongs (or at least a few...)!
9 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2008 10:07 am Title: Denver
Yay for reposts--and what a repost!!!!
Author's Response: I was a little hesitant about it since I don't usually do steamy, but it's a pretty important part of this story so I thought I'd give it a shot. Thanks for your support :)