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Reviewer: toyrundry Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 25, 2008 04:59 pm Title: Can I ask you a question?

i really really like it. it's a really good idea. jims too clean. he need a little blood on his hands ;)

Reviewer: toyrundry Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 25, 2008 04:56 pm Title: Let's get you into a tub

this is sooo good. omg i wish everything was like this

Reviewer: toyrundry Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 25, 2008 04:52 pm Title: Let's Break Up

a bad jim.


Reviewer: MintChocolateChip Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16, 2008 08:51 am Title: Can I ask you a question?

Whoa - NOW we are talking AU. I actually am enjoying this. I was trying to figure out why...then I realized that we all probably have some left-over resentment for Jim's miserable suffering during Pam/Roy. I think there's some small satisfaction seeing Jim lash out and control something, get some "power," even if it is in a horribly sick way that...hurts innocent people?? Geez. Maybe I'm the sick one.

Anyhow, kudos and write more soon. You have a fan firmly in your corner.

Author's Response: Thank you!  I don't think you're sick, I promise!  I'll update as soon as I can - I'm trying to be more careful with this story as I don't want it to just be a perversion of the character and the show... that being said, thank you very much for taking the time out to let me know your thoughts!

Reviewer: PrettyBlueDress Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 12:38 pm Title: Can I ask you a question?

Okay, I'm going to give the strangest kind of compliment, so bear with me. I am sick to my stomach, but in a good way. This is a brave foray into our beloved Jim's character, but I think you've done a brilliant job with it. Creepy and haunting, disturbing to read. Very well done.

Author's Response: Thanks.  I think I get what you're saying.  I normally don't have an issue rereading my fics, but with this one I find it quite hard to let myself go 'into' the story.  It's not pretty at all, but it's in my head and I have to get it out.  Thanks so so much for your kind words.  I hope that you continue to enjoy the later chapters. 

Reviewer: katiej Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 10:39 am Title: Let's Break Up

I'm really enjoying this. It seems possible--the crazies are always the people you least expect, right?

Author's Response: Thanks!  Yeah, they are... weird, huh?  Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 06:12 am Title: Can I ask you a question?

I find it strangely believable that Jim could sublimate his frustrations at his unrequited love for Pam into executing women for the crime of not being Pam.

I'm kind of looking forward to this Jim meeting Karen.  Is that mean?

Author's Response:

Is mean the right word?  :)  Just remember, Karen has a bit of bloodlust in her as well...

Thanks for reading, but more importantly, thanks for finding it (somewhat) believable.  I've been struggling to hold to canon with this, and soon I'll have to deviate from it, but it's important to me that you find these scenarios as not totally off base, but something that could happen, albeit in a warped dimension a few ticks away from our happy little show. 

Anyways, I digress.  Thanks, as always, for taking the time to read and review. 

Reviewer: Lynzee005 Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2008 11:43 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Ha ha... so I went in to read this fic thinking "What kind of A/U is this going to be?"... and now I know! But I have to say, as much as I was shocked and disgusted by our beloved Jim's actions (and the premeditation! What a sick puppy!!!) I really really like this story so far! Of course it's OOC -- it's supposed to be. And trust me, I can distinguish between canon Jim and your Jim, so I don't have a problem with this whatsoever. Very dark and uber-angsty, but I like that much more than super fluffy anyway. It's very interesting to see how far Jim will go to deal with the torture of being without Pam. I'd even go so far as to suggest that the Jim in your story could conceivably murder Pam just to satiate his jealousy. What a twist!


Bold move, but I think it's paid off. Stick with it -- I will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter (wait... does that make me just as sick as A/U Jim? :S) And I too offer my beta service if you need it! Great job -- very original.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  I really appreciate the encouragement.  I want this story to have a worthy resolution, and the solving of that has been giving me issues.  At any rate, hang tight.  I will post soon, but not until I have a significant chunk ready to post.  Thanks again!

Reviewer: fatjax Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 11:45 pm Title: Let's Break Up

This is really well done. I like seeing stuff that takes a different twist on some of the characters, (and I have a personal preference for dark stuff).

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  I really appreciate your feedback!  Hope that you enjoy the rest...

Reviewer: CashBasket Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 08:37 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Contrary to what everyone else is saying, I love the direction you're taking with this (very noticeably AU) story. From the rest of the comments and the author's notes, it seems like you took out a piece about arousal - Jim's arousal over killing Katy? arousal from the unveiling of Roy/Pam? arousal at being on a dark, spiraling path? I am very enamored of all the ways you could interpret this story, and while S4 Jim wouldn't be capable of such a feat (i.e. murder), his doppelganger S2 personality definitely would.

I can't wait to see where you take the story. If you need a beta, let me know!

Author's Response:

Oh wow!  Thanks!  The arousal piece - I went back and took it out.  I didn't really want to explore that aspect of this story after all, and working on the later stuff really brought that to light.  Basically, originally Jim found himself aroused after killing Katy, but he would deal with it later, when he was alone.  That's all that was stated.

Thank you so much for your encouraging words, and I may call on you for some beta work in the later chapters.  I really hope that you enjoy reading further!

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 06:16 pm Title: Let's Break Up

i have to admit that i found this really interesting. booze cruise could be said to be one of jim's lowest points, taking him to a really dark place. i like the idea of seeing what he would do with that. i can't say i can see the developed character of jim that we know murdering katy, and being aroused by it. i can actually see him more likely killing himself than someone else. but this story is really well written, and i'll definately keep reading. now don't get me wrong, i adore fluff with all my heart, but it's kind of refreshing to read jim as something new, not just the near-perfect boy we always see him as. you are really examining the dark part of his mind. ok, i don't think i'm making much sense here, so yeah. i think i got out what i was trying to say haha.

Author's Response:

Thanks very much - yes, you did make sense.  I agree, The Jim that we have seen would definitely not do this.  I couldn't even see him killing himself, but hey, here I have him murdering people. 

The arousal piece was the one that creeped my out the most, in writing it.  I really questioned putting it in, but I feel I will build on it later, and if not I will go back and take it out. 

Anyways, I really appreciate you taking the time out to read this dark little ditty and telling me what you thought. 

Reviewer: PamPongChamp Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 06:00 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Wow, I will say I'm creeped out...and that's hard to do seeing as the "Dexter" series are my favorite books..(I have a weird thing for serial killers)

I think I'll read the rest, but I'm pretty sure that my brain will make this protagonist someone not Jim...just so I can sleep at night you know?

way to step outside the box, I applaud you 

Author's Response: Thanks PPG!!!  I know, it kind of creeped me out as well, and it creeps me out more that I would love to see JK play a character like this.  Thank you very much for planning to read the rest.  I'm hoping i haven't bitten off more than I can chew here, and that I make this at least an interesting read for you.  Thank you again for taking the time out to read and review. 

Reviewer: khand3stooges Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 05:33 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Sorry this isn't my thing.  I admire you for trying to step outside the box with the characters.  I'm more of a fluff gal.  Good luck to you though.

Author's Response: Hey, thank you very much for at least reading the first chapter, and more for letting me know your thoughts.  I completely understand, this is taking Jim very OOC and it's very dark.  Thank you again for your time. 

Reviewer: ThreeHolePunchVersion Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 05:20 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Well written, no doubt, but I will not be reading the rest of this fic.  The only type of death fic I can take, for one, is accidental/outside of murder type stuff.


You have a good writing technique, don't get me wrong.  I care about Jim too much to believe he would murder.  Let alone murder Pam. 

Author's Response: No, thank you very much for letting me know your opinion.  I don't expect that this fic will appeal to everyone, because it is very dark and very OOC for the Jim we know.  Thank you though, not just for reading, but for letting me know your thoughts. 

Reviewer: BlueBustyGal Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 04:53 pm Title: Let's Break Up

Yeah, its definitely dark, and I'm not gonna lie, it's not the fluffiest thing to read, but I am interested to see where you take this and in Jim's motivations. Of course, its not the Jim Halpert we know and love, but I can see similar themes in this chapter to what we know of him. Especially in the line, "She regretted him." If there is more to what we will recognize from the show than just the characters' names, then I will keep reading.

Author's Response: Thanks BBG!  No, Jim will be very OOC in this fic - at least parts of him - no fluff here.  I'm going to work hard to make this believable and yet unbelievable, so yeah.  I love that you talked about recognizing more than just the character names - you will, but it will be very dark nonetheless.  Thank you VERY much for your candidness and the review. 

Reviewer: JamLover101 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2007 04:46 pm Title: Let's Break Up

this very dark

and i could never imagine Jim doing this was very well written and poetic in a way 

Author's Response: Thanks - I'm interested in the response to this, and I agree, Jim is very OOC, and will remain so for this fic, but thank you very much for reading and letting me know your thoughts!

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