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Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2008 08:03 am Title: Chapter 1

Poor Karen got the raw end of the deal, of course, but I love that here she remembers that even if she never touched Jim's soul, she also kept a part of hers just for herself, too. I like it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2008 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was so nice. I really like how you've captured Karen's fight against her own emotions. Like, she tries so hard to be strong that she forgets it's OK to be weak, too. And I love that she's happy to have not shared part of herself with Jim. That she hadn't given him EVERYTHING.

Author's Response: Thanks! I like to think that too. I don't like to think that she put everything into that relationship only to have it end like that.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2008 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

"Karen pretends her corporate parking spot is one of the ebony keys and she’s tapping C-sharp, and the spin of the world swallows down easier for a moment."

 

This was great - I love all the musical imagery - especially "the dick that dumped her as the fountain beat a piano-like melody in the background."

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2008 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

"The fact that this is the music that Jim listened to, about broken hearts and frosty silences and the death of irony, is just starting to make sense with all she knows about him now and that’s really the most depressing part of it all; the fact that she didn’t realize he’d left too much of his soul with someone else for her to claim any for herself."  Great line; great story.

Reviewer: Catie9 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2008 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 1

i'm honestly a little reluctant to review this because i don't feel like i have the words to do this justice. i'm not usually drawn to karen-centric fics, but i love billie holiday, and i love your stuff, so it seemed like a good idea. and i was right. this is amazing. i took a class in college on poetry, and we studied a lot of langston hughes in conjunction with the music of the era, and this story reminds me a lot of that. it reads like it's written in jazz, and the effect of this pulls me deeper as a reader. you nailed her character, and the imagery you created was beautiful. well done!

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