Date: January 13, 2012 07:55 am Title: Chapter 4
I can't believe this is where the story ended! i knew it was unfinished, but argh! Right when Jim would have picked her up, seen that Roy was abusive, and finally found out that was why Pam said "I can't". Not that Pam didn't love him or didn't want to, but she *could not" break up with Roy.
I didn't need to see them resolve everything, I was just hoping to see Jim's pain when he made the realization. :)
I was very happy that it was Jim she called and she stuck with her request for a ride even though it was awkward with karen being in the background.
Thanks for writing and sharing!
Date: October 28, 2009 08:05 am Title: Chapter 4
Right now my heart actually hurts from reading this. It's the worst feeling in th world, but you have to fix this!!!! Please, please, please finish this. This has to give Pam the happy ending she deserves. Even though I hate Jim for how horrible he has been to her, I know he still loves her. Please make this right. I can't take a story that ends with poor Pam being beaten up by ass Roy. :(
Date: May 14, 2008 12:41 am Title: Prologue
I absolutely love this story, but I'm so sad that you probably won't finish it...please update it!!! it would make my day!!! so good!!!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for taking the time to comment! I know I haven't updated in forever, but I've decided to re-work this one when I finish my other story. I wrote this before I'd even seen all the episodes of the show and I just feel like I need to start over with it. When my other story (Graceless) is complete I'll be back to work on this!
Date: March 08, 2008 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 4
I really like this story and i thought this chapter was wonderful. Pam's turmoil is heartbreaking, and i think you write her incredibly well. I hope you're not being too hard on yourself because I really do enjoy this story. I'm sure you can lead this story to where you want it to go. Please don't give up on it. You are writing beautifully. I hope to read more : )
Date: January 29, 2008 04:32 am Title: Chapter 3
Oh goodness! I love all this angst. You're doing a wonderful job. I am practically screaming in my head for those two to work it out, which i assure you is a testiment to your talented writing. I can't wait for the continuation, please update soon!
Date: January 28, 2008 10:31 pm Title: Chapter 3
The idea that Roy was abusing Pam actually makes a lot of sense - her behaviour screams it. I thought you made it totally believable while retaining her innate "Pamness".. Awesome writing. Can't wait to see where you're going with it.
Date: January 14, 2008 12:29 am Title: Prologue
Well done on starting your first multi-chapter fiction! I think this chapter sets up the rest of your story wonderfully. It doesn't dwell on any particular fact, it's elloquent, and seems very "Pam" - even if this kind of thing wouldn't happen on the show. But i think that you are right, and exploring things that doesn't/wouldn't happen on the show is exactly why fanfiction is writen. I mean, have you checked out the smut on this website?! I could only wish for that to happen on the show : ). The only thing i wasn't too sure about was Roy's "He never expected her to end this, especially when he is so close to complete control of her life" because it changes from Pam's perspective to Roy's momentarily, and it makes it seem like Roy's objective the entire relationship was to purposely and objectively control Pam's life, when i believe it would have been much more an ignorant behaviour (but not less violent, abusive, or destructive) on Roy's behalf. The line comes off a bit "evil genius". Basically, I don't think he's smart enough to actually be aware that he's nearly in complete control of her life. But, goodness, that's just nit-picking. I really do like your premise and your writing. I do hope Pam can get to Jim before anything (or anyone) gets in their way...but I'm sure it's not going to be that easy for them. I can't wait to read how you continue this. And again, well done!
Author's Response: I get what you're saying about that line, but just to clear it up (though I'm not sure it really matters!) - that part isn't really what Roy's thinking, but Pam's perspective on the situation, if that makes sense. It was confusing the way I wrote it, but it's all going on in HER head, so when she sees him stunned, she's processing why. I agree, he's not smart enough to come to that conclusion on his own :-). This is just how Pam sees it happening. Thanks so much for the thoughtful response!