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Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2008 05:55 am Title: Pam Gets Ready

Just read this along with the previous chapter.  Very nicely done.  I have to say that I like the idea of Pam having some new clothing choices in her closet.  Also, I think you did a good job at conveying her nervousness and excitement.

Reviewer: FinerThings Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2008 11:22 pm Title: Pam Gets Ready

OMG you can't stop there!!

Reviewer: FinerThings Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2008 11:16 pm Title: The Interruption

That was very sweet. =)

Reviewer: FinerThings Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2008 11:14 pm Title: The Break-Up

Awww poor Karen, I always feel bad for her. But eeee can't wait til the next chapter. =)

Reviewer: Mr Bill Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2008 03:43 am Title: The Realization

The entire story is so very well written and I love the way you began the first Chapter "Realization":

 

All thought stopped when the note fell out of the folder and into his lap.

“Don’t forget us when you’re famous – Pam”

It was the sum of what he’d be leaving behind.

Her.
Her smile.
Her friendship.
Her presence.
All the possibilities.

 

Very, very evocative. 

Reviewer: JAMtastic Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21, 2008 02:09 pm Title: The Interruption

I've really enjoyed this story.  You have a clear, descriptive writing style.  I like your interpretation of the events on that wonderful day!  Looking forward to the first date set of stories.

Reviewer: blanche deveraux Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21, 2008 08:10 am Title: The Interruption

Very good! Keep going!

Reviewer: hamrensel Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21, 2008 07:42 am Title: The Realization

I really loved the story. I can't wait to read your series on the date.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21, 2008 07:21 am Title: The Interruption

Fantastic first attempt!  Looking forward to more from you, Lexiconiful! 

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