You must login (register) to review or leave jellybeans
Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2019 06:59 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Love this. It's the kind of story I want follow up to but that totally makes sense on its own. Thanks for this.

Reviewer: support_the_rabid Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 01, 2008 07:20 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Love Karen and her Blackberry fetish! That was an easy visual!

Author's Response:

I know I'm late in replying to this but thanks so much s_t_r!   The idea came from a deleted scene where Karen was engrossed in her blackberry.   Glad it worked for you!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28, 2008 11:07 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Whoa.  What a fantastic and intense alternate take on that whole interaction.  The second tense really worked well here, too.  This sentence was simply a perfect encapsulation of the entire thing:  It's like high school, the way you're here with someone you like but not with the someone you want.

Author's Response:

Thank you.  I had it all written in first person but it sounded too much like something I'd heard before.  As soon as I switched tenses it all came together (or so I hoped).

I think that sentiment really sums up Jim and Karen's relationship.     It's not about Karen being less than Pam - or Jim being not enough for Karen.   I think - even without Pam in the picture - they would not have made it - because there was simply something missing there.  jmho of course - but that's the way I see it.

So glad you liked it.   The next story I'm working on has a different ending...since Jim and Karen weren't together during The Convention.  

I can't promise smut - but I can promise a tidier ending. :)

Reviewer: slpchic Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28, 2008 01:02 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

So good! Loved it! It made me really really miss the office.....

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!  I miss it too. :(

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: January 27, 2008 01:13 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

This may have started out as a gift for Shan21, but in the end, it was a gift to all of us.  So beautifully them, and with the honesty starting to spill out, it looks like a happy ending on the horizon. For Jim and Pam at least.  For Karen and Roy, not so much. 

Author's Response:

Well I'll all about the Jim and Pam happy endings - as you are well aware.

I didn't want it to be THE END though - I mean - Jim has to take Karen home...and then you know - talk to her about how it's not gonna work - and Pam has to let Roy down again and...

Maybe this does deserve a second chapter.  ;)

I'm kidding actually - I like it where I left it.  There'll be other stories....

Thank you so much for the review.  You're very sweet and I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 26, 2008 07:13 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

lovely dialogue - I found myself reading this over a few times, just to pretend that's what really happened.

So glad you're writing again, xoxoxo

Author's Response: Aww thank you.  I'm glad to BE writing again.   I know.  Sometimes it's nice to pretend things didn't happen they way they actually did in "reality". 

Reviewer: dancer288 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26, 2008 02:47 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

aww...wish this would have been the real ending!!

Author's Response: Me too dancer!!  Thanks for reading!!

Reviewer: Abigail Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 01:13 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

This story is just begging for additional chapters!  I hope you will reconsider the oneshot and add to it! 

Author's Response:

Oh geez Abigail.  I'm not really sure.   I like the quietness of the way this has ended - and second person is realllllllly hard for me to write. 

That said.  I can promise another story sometime soon.  I'll give you a bit of a spoiler - I'm looking to rework The Convention next.

So if you can be patient - maybe that'll make up for this oneshot. :)

Thank you so much for the review!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 11:44 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Now this is why they invented fanfic.  So we can go back in time and 'make things right'. 

(I hope this is the beginning of a string of productivity from you!!0 

Author's Response:


Thanks Ms Hoo!!

I'm a hell of a lot more productive than I've been in the past few months - I'll say that. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 10:49 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

"Suddenly the world comes back into focus, and you know this is it. After this, things will change."

You know when Angela says under no circumstances should we have a man strip off his clothes in the office, and Meredith says "SHUT UP, ANGELA!"? I have the opposite reaction to the above sentence, like "OH, YEAH, XOXOXO!"

I love how you have this where they just about miss the boat again, and they just barely, barely manage not to.


Author's Response:

I've written this scenario before and I've written it a lot neater (and sweeter).  I realize I've conveniently glossed over some of the obvious obstacles but I was trying to get to the happy without spelling it all out.   The near miss kind of thing helped accomplish that fact.  So it's not them dancing and then running out to make out in the parking lot ('cause yeah...I've had them do that) it's them acknowledging what they want - and knowing they can't fix it all in one night.   At least that's what I hope came across.

And I'm guessing (hoping) from your review that it did.

Reviewer: girl7 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 07:03 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Sorry for the double review, but I forgot to tell you how absolutely perfect the title is -- so good.  :o)

Author's Response: I never complain about double reviews!   I scoured lyrics to find the right ones and this seemed to work on soooo many levels.   So glad you agree!

Reviewer: girl7 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 07:02 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Oh wow.  It's a testament to how compelling this is that my breathing went shallow as I was reading it -- then stopped altogether when she actually alluded to CN.  This was just pitch perfect -- your Jim is so real, so painfully believable.  And I'll tell you what - the writers would've done us all a favor if they'd written the end of that episode this way. 

As usual, excellent work!

Author's Response:

Thanks girl7!!  I imagined Phyllis's Wedding any other way than the way it actually happened.   I didn't want to go the "and then they lived happily ever after" route because I think if they had gotten together that night - it would not have been sunny and bright right away.

Thanks so much for reading and for your lovely review. :)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 06:21 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Yes, THIS would have been better. Hee. Looking back, though, I'm very glad we got Pam realizing she had to be honest with Roy, and then the Beach, and then coming to a place where she could honestly say she'd be OK either way. But this would have felt better, that's for sure! Beautiful dialog, excellent details. Love.

Author's Response:

Lis - if you ask me that now - I'd have to say I agree.  But oh God.  Watching her walk away, looking at his face as she did, killed me dead. 

And Shan asked me to fix it.  So...I did. :)

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 06:19 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

You're not sure why you're surprised.   Every time you decide to take a chance where she's concerned you wind up feeling just like this.

Ouch! Y'know, there are certain episodes of S3 that I just can't watch anymore. The Merger, for instance, with the revisiting of the parking lot of doom. Or The Negotiation, where Jim reaches the acme of his bitterness. But Phyllis' Wedding... oh, the humanity! You've captured perfectly the angst of that night. Thank goodness you didn't wallow in the pain pool forever, though. You gave us a much better ending than the show did, and for that I thank you. 

Beautiful writing all around!  

Author's Response:

The Merger kills me too.   I have to say, I don't know what it is, but as much sympathy as I had for Mr Halpert in S2 - and trust me - I had oodles, there is something about the S3 Pam related angst that kills me dead everytime I think about it.

Thank you so much for your review.  I'm so very glad you liked it.

Reviewer: PuffingNoise Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 05:40 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

Oohh, this is so perfect! I had tears in my eyes by the end.
And I love that Jim notices the way Pam sways. hee.

Author's Response: I originally started this story based on their conversation about Pam dancing...but then I realized I wanted to move past that.  So the swaying's just a residual.  :)   Here's a Kleenex.  I needed one too while I was writing it.  It's been a long time since that's happened.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 04:54 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

LOVED this.  This is how is should have happened.  Great details--Karen texting, Roy taking forever to get Pam's coat.  Just great.

Author's Response:

Karen texting comes from a deleted scene - where Jim asks her how long she'll be on that thing or something. I know I saw it on the DVD - but I'm too lazy to go check it out and give you all the details. :)   This was a tough episode for me - so I'm excited to give it a happy (hopeful) ending.

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2008 03:36 am Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

From deep in the heart of the land of If Only. I love the tentativeness - I have a soft spot for fics about moments that are almost...and this captures the ache of that episode so well, then wrings some hope out of it. Just lovely. (And now can you stop with this prolific jag? Making me feel lazy here, lol.)

Author's Response:

Not my fault you're a slacker. ;)   It's been a long time since I visited this place.  I'm all S4 and fastforward to happily ever after.  I was struggling to get this to sound just right and then changed the whole thing to second person and it clicked.  At least I hope it did. 

In any case - I'm very glad you liked it.   Have had a rough few days here and it means a lot that you took the time to tell me so.

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2008 10:26 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

I will be doing some doubling down tomorrow, let me tell ya'.  What a vivid and dramtic scene you give us here.  You really capture how terribly difficult it is for these two to communicate and the terse, halting way they express themselves when they try. Wonderfully done. 




Author's Response:

Thank you.    It was difficult to go back there and revisit it, because I always find myself wanting to put tons of words in their mouths.   But in reality I think they wouldn't say too much right away.  So glad it came across.

PS - You're money, and you don't even know it.  Good luck!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2008 10:16 pm Title: I can see the destiny you sold...

LOVE IT. My, my, my I really like this prolific streak in you! KEEP. IT. UP!  Not that I don't love the way things have turned out now, but I really wish sometimes that THIS is what we would have seen on Phlyiss' Wedding!

Author's Response:

SO GLAD.  Not sure how long I can keep it up (twss) I was really just working towards finishing this little thing so I could have all my Christmas shopping done. :) 

It was difficult.   I went back and watched pieces of the episode to write this and I kept wishing it'd ended up my way too.   But - now we can have both!!!  :)

You must login (register) to review or leave jellybeans