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Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: March 04, 2008 06:25 am Title: Pineapple

The Michael/Creed dynamic is one of the more fascinating aspects of the show, isn't it? I love how you play with it here. I also really like the weariness you infuse in Michael's character. It really does seem true to the weird relationship he has with Jan. Spot-on, again!

Author's Response: It was hard to work pineapple into a story. Originally it was just the part with Creed being weird but I bracketed it with some of Michael's point of view to flesh it out. And now you know more than you ever wanted to.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2008 08:25 pm Title: Pineapple

I love when you write Creed, and I can imagine him doing this.  There's very little I'd put past Creed, really.  ;)

I'm glad Michael sold Jan's too-expensive book on eBay.  I've just re-watched the episode (Money, maybe?) where she's talking about redecorating his apartment -- "It costs what it costs."  Grrr.



Author's Response: Ha! That reminds me of Ryan's "it is what it is" line in one of his NY talking heads. It mus be a phrase the writers like making fun of.

Reviewer: JennInTheCity Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2008 03:51 pm Title: Pineapple

HA! That totally cracked me up! Great use of Creed!

Author's Response: Thanks, he's always fun to write.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2008 01:17 pm Title: Pineapple

So funny!  Just what I needed.  Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks. Creed is the gift that keeps on giving, isn't he? What's so great about him in general is how oblivious he is to all the social drama around him.  The thought that he carries a knife to conference meetings is a little frightening though.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2008 07:37 am Title: Table

OK, first off, thank you for posting this- I was starting to think I was the only sucker who actually tried to tackle this challenge!

Second, this is great. We don't get a lot of "Jim the narrator" stories, so it is fun to hear his POV in a way that isn't an anguished internal monologue (I like those, too, but variety is the spice).  Pam's reaction is spot-on. She was probably dying, but feeling Jim's mortification inspired her to rise to the occasion. Perfect. I can't wait to see what you do with the other words...like entourage. What a pain. Hee.



Author's Response: Yeah there were several hard ones that made me wonder if I'd get any ideas, including entourage. Thankfully we can leave out four, if necessary. I'm as surprised as you are that there weren't more entries posted yet. I got distracted for a while by life obligations taking away my time so perhaps that's what happened to the others.

Reviewer: JamLover101 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 11:05 pm Title: Table

This is so great! I love how you said so much in so little. Pam's reaction is fantastic. Keep it up!



Author's Response: Thanks. And TWSS.

Reviewer: Wendy Blue Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 04:30 pm Title: Table

Swedge.  Dude.  This was fantastic!  Way to turn the tables on the word "table."  Truth be told, I can't believe no one thought of this earlier.  But I'm glad that if anyone did, it was you.  Well done!


Author's Response: Great pun. :) Thanks for reading. I'd had this idea half-formed in my mind for a while and the challenge crystalized things.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 04:28 pm Title: Table

Excellent idea!  Love it!  I always figured that in Michael’s ideal life he’d have been a combination comedian and magician, like Penn and Teller only unsuccessful and stuck in Scranton.  You made me snort with that one : )

Author's Response: I hope I didn't mess up your keyboard. That was actually the first story I've written first person, so it was a fun experiment for me. In this collection, where possible, I tried to do things differently with each story. In order to try to both improve and keep the reader entertained.

Reviewer: JennInTheCity Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 11:39 am Title: Table

Oh hee! That was really good! Great use of Kevin's list and I love the confidence Pam has to shake things off now. Just fab!

Author's Response: Thanks. I was a little surprised the list never came back as a subject on the show.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 07:55 am Title: Table

"This is where I snapped out of my quiet reverie and felt quite alarmed" -- that's such a great little moment in this.  I also love how you've sprinkled little character bits in here, like Angela born looking uncomfortable and Michael wanting to be Penn and Teller.  Also the hecklers and security perhaps being on a lunch break are fun little moments. 

Only Kevin would evaluate a potential mate for her lead singer potential -- I'm not really sure how you thought of that.  Are you in a band? ;)  Good job putting yourself in Kevin's head there.

Also, you're entirely welcome. :)  I'm so glad to see the first chapter up!!  Yay! 



Author's Response:

There were other things in Kevin's head. Like Angela, cookies and Sting. I didn't stay long.

Reviewer: dreamscribe70 Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 07:22 am Title: Table

Very cute, really enjoyed the story. I can totally see Fancy New Beesly standing up like that.

Author's Response: Yes and Michael did see it, and liked it. I appreciate your reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2008 04:06 am Title: Table

Oh, Swedge, this was great!  The minute I read "Kevin" and "decision making", I knew what this was going to be about and I started shaking my head with glee.  I loved every word, and of course Jim had nothing to worry about. 

Can't wait to see more from you!



Author's Response: Thanks. There are definitely more on the way.

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