Date: September 15, 2006 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was beautiful, and I almost cried at the end.
Date: September 15, 2006 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is seriously good. Loved the tone and flow of it. It has a nice edge - by turns raw and sexy, but quite poignant too. Especially liked Mrs. Ramirez - great image of her whispering to Pam, and Jim wondering what she sees when she looks at him...just really hits a great note.
Date: September 15, 2006 02:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
loved this--the little moments that you captured here that together add up to the progression of their relationship. love how you story was in turns vague & detailed, and super loved the image of jim waiting for pam the night before his move and the insecurities that stayed with him for a while once she moved in with him.