Date: May 31, 2008 10:18 am Title: Chapter 1
So great. Its simple, bu complex because of the analogies and such. Just like their relationship.
And Pam has won... but so has Jim. Because they have each other.
Psst - I added a disclaimer for you. :)
Author's Response: Oh! Thanks so much for doing that. I knew I'd forgotten something... I appreciate the review :D.
Date: May 30, 2008 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1
That was beautiful. I love the game imagery sprinkled throughout, of course, but more than that I love the acknowledgement that this isn't going to be simple for them. You chart the evolution of their relationship perfectly, with the pitfalls inherent in going from friends to lovers with a lot of pain in between. Also, I have a soft spot for concise writing, and this is a great example.
Author's Response: Thank you! Part of the reason I love the Jim and Pam relationship is the complexity of it.