10 [Report This]Date: June 08, 2008 12:26 pm Title: The Third Month
beautiful, just beautiful :) I really love your development of Pam. She seems so full here at the end - I think being one her own (ish) is really good for her, and this is just gorgeous writing!
Date: June 08, 2008 12:26 pm Title: The Third Month
What?!? It's over? Hee, naked pictures of Jim. Niiiiice.
Love the pacing of this, maybe it's the fact that it's like 96 degrees here, but I can feel the Brooklyn heat.
Hope to see more fic from you this summer and beyond.
Date: June 08, 2008 11:55 am Title: The Third Month
Oh, this is so great. From Jewish Jim (!!!!!) to the employees' reactions to, well, the proposal itself and all the scenes of Jim and Pam in general, it's so good. Well done!
Author's Response: How did you read this that fast... ? :) Thanks, tunette (nice name, btw). I'm pretty sure I don't have the market cornered on embracing Jim's Jewish roots, but he's pretty darn cute like that, isn't he?
Date: June 07, 2008 06:57 pm Title: The First Month
You're good! You're very good!! I absolutely love your writing style and this is the perfect setting for a proposal. Who needs Paris, when you have Brooklyn! Keep up the great writing.
Date: June 07, 2008 05:48 pm Title: The Second Month
This is a very very good story. You have such a wonderful balance of sweet, and romantic and sexual. Thank you for writing this.
Date: June 05, 2008 10:05 pm Title: The Second Month
"I kind of blacked out and didn't see it." Priceless! Great story, Talkative-- can't wait for number three!
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 10:02 pm Title: The Second Month
I'm so in love with this story, with your words. This story is so beautifully detailed and characterized. I just realized that I've got this huge grin on my face, and it's not just because of the honest joy of these characters in this story. It just love everything about this, its uniqueness, its heart.
If you've got a vault of unwritten anything, get to work! :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 08:48 pm Title: The First Month
This is simply beautiful. You're telling their story exactly how I want to imagine it. It's understated, but it draws emotion out of the reader. You have a beautiful style.
Date: June 05, 2008 08:37 pm Title: The Second Month
So great! Can't wait for more!
Date: June 05, 2008 07:01 pm Title: The Second Month
This is adorable! I love that Jim was so nervous and not remotely subtle about the proposal, but definitely made the effort to make it a perfect night. Very sweet :)
8 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 05:45 pm Title: The First Month
You did a wonderful job here capturing the place I hope dream am sure they are at right now. This story has a quiet. lovely way about it and you're painting such a vivid picture with your words.
I'm loving all these "In Brooklyn" stories. I think we might need to add a new tag to the archive.
Brooklyn seems a lot more fun that Stamford ever was. ;)
Really wonderful thus far. I cannot wait to see what's next.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 01:47 pm Title: The Second Month
Talkative, I really, really enjoyed this! Detailed but not overly so, very rich and true to the characters. I especially loved the description of their first time:
She could barely concentrate on anything beyond how strange it was that she was straddling his hips and she could feel him pressing against her, hot and solid.
And this:
Her mother had called when she was still in Jim's bed, naked and warm, planning to spend the day working past their needless fear. She hadn't been able to look at him while she talked to her mother, had only been able to think of the noise he made when he came. She has since heard countless variations on that surprisingly soft sound that seems to hide somewhere low in his throat, but she remembers how it sounded when they were brand new and her stomach drops.
Those are such sensual, haunting (in the best of ways) images with so few words. This is what, to me, makes sexy writing.
Really looking forward to more!
Date: June 05, 2008 10:19 am Title: The Second Month
Finally got a chance to read this - and it was just what the doc ordered after a rotten morning at work. Totally delightful - funny and tender without being schmoopy and very true to character. All the little details, from Pam's new clothes, to the CD's, to Jim saying the prayers, to her mom calling that first morning...and about twenty more. And especially like how straight forward your writing is here - really lets the wit and heart come through in a very natural way. Looking forward to month 3.
Author's Response: Fact: In an early version of this story, the seductive pink bathtub duck was named Colette. I am not kidding. That being said, can I have your autograph? :) Your compliments mean a lot. Thank you. When you posted "One Down, Ten to Go" shortly after I put the first part of this up, my heart stopped. I was feeling very tail between my legs for a moment there...
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 07:51 am Title: The Second Month
P.S. Just read this yet again. How could I forget to reference this: Sixth, the description of Pam and Jim's first night together is taken from a longer work that... I have not published yet. So, yeah. Prequel. I hope we have the pleasure of reading this now that you've teased us. Pretty please???? See what a bad influence you are on me? I'm making rude demands and this story isn't even complete yet. Oh, and, one more thing that I neglected to stress in my first review of this chapter is how very much I love your version of Jim's proposal. The details are just so beautiful. OK, done gushing for now.
Author's Response: The prequel? "Well, that's coming..." [/jim]. Soon. ish.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 07:03 am Title: The Second Month
This is marvelous stuff. Your real affection for the characters, and your deep understanding of them, is evident. Pam's friendship with Dwight is a sweet touch (he would absolutely send her pepper spray). The whole vision of them is just beautiful and such an absoulte joy to read. Thank you so much for this. Really, really great work.
Author's Response: Thank you, brokenloon. I'm fairly certain that Pam's lucky Dwight didn't send her a teeny little gun. Doesn't it seem like he might?
Date: June 05, 2008 05:43 am Title: The Second Month
Very sweet. Hope there will be more.
Date: June 04, 2008 09:52 pm Title: The Second Month
I can't get over how awesome this is. Really. Just fab!
Author's Response: You're making me blush, lady...
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 09:33 pm Title: The First Month
Oh my gosh...the proposal? It was absolutely perfect. I'm kinda speechless right now because of how much I love this story. Pam fitting so seamlessly into NY, the image of Jim buying the ring after he sees her wake up in his bed...everything from Jim's nervousness down to the pepper spray from Dwight, the mix CD's and the pink ducky just scream Jim and Pam, and it's a balance of the grandiose and ordinary that you've captured so incredibly well.
So yeah, I totally loved this. Also one of the best proposals that really keeps both of them in character and believable. I can't wait for the next part, even though I'll be really sad to see this one go.
Author's Response: Thank you, honeypioneer. The last part is coming either tomorrow or early next week.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 09:12 pm Title: The Second Month
Wow, wow, wow -- I love this story. Thanks for writing it! Can't wait for the third part.
Date: June 04, 2008 08:35 pm Title: The Second Month
I absolutely love this, first of all, second of all, I have to say that what I remember from high school French is "Je suis un pomplemousse" which I'm sure I'm butchering and which roughly translates to "I am a grapefruit."
But honestly? This story makes me happy down to my toes. I love the Jewish neighbor and I love that his brother calls Pam "little sister" and I just love, love it. Great job!
Author's Response: Eep! It's Bashert again! rnrnI didn't take French in high school. Spanish and German. But oeufs a la neige is still really fun to say.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 07:31 pm Title: The Second Month
.......I am quite literally speechless. Holy hell, that is some beautiful writing. Is there more? There's more, right? I need the third month!
Seriously, great great work.
Author's Response: Oh, there's more...
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 07:24 pm Title: The Second Month
This is just beautiful. Look forward to the next chapter.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 07:21 pm Title: The Second Month
Love, love, LOVE this chapter! It's perfect that Jim buys the ring the day after Pam gets up from his bed fro the first time. That now it iseems POSSIBLE.
I'm also getting a kick out of the little old Jewish ladies! More please!
Author's Response: I can guarantee more of Pam's collection of widows. And, like I said, the story about the ring is a story that I've... well, *almost* finished.
Date: June 04, 2008 07:01 pm Title: The Second Month
This story is just wonderful, so romantic, sexy, moving, and full of the heat and life of summer in NY. Just like before, Jim can't keep his proposal plans a secret from her - he's so transparent, it's really adorable. I love how she notices right away the differences between the rings, and later on, during temple, she ponders about how much better her life is now with Jim. As quickly evidenced by the fact that she tells her mom not to worry, that she's not planning the wedding alone this time, he's jumping right in with both feet too.
Looking forward to the rest of this lovely story.
Author's Response: Thanks for the compliments, EverybodyHurts. I'm... um... looking forward to the rest of the story, too rnrn*glances nervously at Microsoft Word*
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 06:54 pm Title: The Second Month
PERFECT COMBINATION OF STEAM + FLUFF + JUST JAM!
:-)
MOREEE. Which is something that she said.