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Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07, 2009 05:00 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

i'm going to thank you. as i was reviewing, i began to write my first fanfic, a short, passionate oneshot. right here in the review box! so thank you. and i'll get back to your story in a little while. gotta post my first story!!! (great job, yet again, though. this really inspired me!)

Author's Response: Thanks, pamelamorganhalpert - glad to hear you were inspired.

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07, 2009 04:30 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

that was great! i love how you can so perfectly capture all these little vignettes of jim and pam's love for eachother and put it into one bigger story. very impressive!

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 09:40 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Really lovely ending =)

Author's Response: Glad it worked for you! Thanks for all the comments, Hannah!

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 09:28 pm Title: Fortune Cookie

Your descriptions are awesome. I seriously love your style!

Author's Response: Thanks again, Hannah - that's really nice of you to say.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 15, 2008 09:18 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

I freaking love it :)

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2008 08:25 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

I've been catching up on my reading tonight and happily found this lovely story. First, I loved the Pam and Jim-ness of it all, but I loved the third character, that of NYC itself.  I've always wanted to go there and just love stories that take me there vicariously - I think that's what I mean. NYC is so sophisticated and I'd feel like I just fell off a turnip truck if I ever did go, so thanks for this laptop tour of some of the sights.  Your stories are always so engaging and real and awesome, and this is no exception!

Author's Response: I love that you loved 'the Pam and Jim-ness of it all.' And also that a strong sense of the city came through to you. But, I totally disagree that you'd resemble any fruit, vegetable or tuber (?) that just fell off the truck - you'd be amazed how many turnips you'd find in NYC! Even without Jim, I think you'd have fun (okay, having him in tow would add a certain, uh..dimension ;-) Anyway, thanks so much, kaystar!

Reviewer: kells8995 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 16, 2008 01:03 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

It's horrible that I am just now reviewing this, Colette.  I had read it and loved it, and then real life has been crazy lately and I'm just now getting back to review the stories I've really enjoyed - and this one is certainly one of my favorites.  

I can't put my finger on what it is about your writing.  You capture the mood and feeling so well.  I swear I could smell the restaurant when they went inside and I could practically feel the rain as they got caught in it.   Your stories always manage an almost tangible quality.  You are truly gifted. 

Also, the thought of Jim in a wet shirt?  Extra points for THAT, my friend :)



Author's Response:

I can't believe you put real life ahead of reviewing my story....horrible, I tell you! ;-)

Incredibly flattering to hear that my fics seem tangible to you. This particular one was really fun to write (a little hometown love) so I'm thrilled that it came alive for you too. (And, frankly, what story doesn't benefit from Jim in a wet shirt? Or out of one, ahem.) Thanks so much, kells - really appreciate your taking the time to review!

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 10, 2008 10:37 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Lovely. Just lovely. 

And what an awesome poem, I like. And I can definitely see how it inspired.



Author's Response: I guess posting that poem with my story is a little like Pam exhibiting one of her little drawings next to a Picasso...nervy or crazy, not sure which, lol. But I'm pleased you see the connection - really love that one. And thank you so much again for reading/reviewing StarShine!

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 10, 2008 10:27 pm Title: Fortune Cookie

Ok, besides the fact that your writing is perfect and beautiful, you manage to work in lychee (LOVE that stuff! But hated it as a kid) and Georgia O'Keefe, my favorite artist since I was a wee pre-teen--and had not a clue how... suggestive her paintings were, i just liked the pretty, interesting take on flowers. (Fun fact: I've done a couple of paintings of flowers in that style. The biggest one may or may not be hanging above my living room couch.)

 

On topic? I love this story. I truly do. 



Author's Response: Glad to hear this struck a couple of chords for you - was worried that only in my mind lychee and Georgia would somehow make sense together, lol. Also happy you liked this...many thanks, StarShine!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 06, 2008 08:43 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Finally got a chance to read this - it was wonderful.  Your intimate knowledge of the city makes it so poignantly special, and why I know I won't even bother writing a Pam in NYC fic.  I really really, enjoyed this, colette.

Author's Response: So glad you liked this, Mox...and that the local color rang true for you. But if you have a Pam in NYC fic in you - write it! I'm sure you'd more than do it justice. Anyway, thanks so much for this!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 03, 2008 01:50 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

So I've been on vacation with the family for the past two weeks and was able to check my e-mail a couple times while away (with my husband and son lurking nearby).  It killed me not to read this, but it was a treat to read it all in one shot today (we got home last night).  I knew I would be in for a treat.  You didn't disappoint, Colette; you never do.  This was absolutely beautiful.  I loved every bit of it.  Your work is consistently beautiful.  Your dialog is spot on, and your imagery is lovely.  Thanks for this.  It seems that a little bit of fantasy was just want I needed to help ease me back into the real world.

Author's Response: So flattering that you even thought of this story while on vacation! (And nothing worse than lurking spouses and offspring when a girl is trying to get her fanfic fix, lol.) Especially glad you think the dialogue works - it's always hard to know if what sounds right in your own head translates for others. And I know as a reader, one dissonant line (sometimes even one klunky word) and the illusion can be deflated. So, yeah, I worry about that, lol. Anyway...thanks for the generous comments - and for always being such a smart and encouraging audience, NanReg!! (And happy 4th, btw!)

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: July 03, 2008 12:05 am Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

oh man, I'm sorry I'm so late to the party for the last chapter here but boy was it ever worth playing catch up!  What a fabulous way to end. This chapter just dripped with sensuality and romance. Loved every minute of it. Thanks Colette!

Author's Response: Dripping? Yowza! Glad you had a chance to catch up, and that you liked. And as every, thanks so much for being such a faithful reviewer and telling me! 

Reviewer: girl7 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01, 2008 10:05 am Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Gah, so many amazing things about this chapter!  Loved the description of the little girls, particularly given that I have twin nieces around that age, and they would totally react the same way in that situation.  If I so much as kiss my husband on the cheek, it elicits squeals and giggles.  ...Um, from them, not him, lol.

And as usual, you write the heated stuff such that it radiates a frisson, yet never breaks the illusion that this is Jim & Pam -- recognizable characters, not two people who bear little resemblence to those we know so well. 

The e.e. cummings poem was like a little dollop of whipped cream on the top of a totally delectable dessert.

Thanks for writing this -- such a treat to read!



Author's Response:

Ah, come on...I bet Mr. girl7 squeals and giggles too.

As you know, writing steamy scenes believably in-character is always a challenge (cause we never actually see them that way. Dang.) So I'm especially glad you found them recognizable here. (I know exactly what you mean about smut where the characters are simply Jim/Pam doppelgangers.) And, I think I first read that poem in college, and it's stayed in my head ever since. Glad I finally figured some way to use it, lol. Thanks, doll...always love hearing from you!

Reviewer: girl7 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01, 2008 09:58 am Title: Fortune Cookie

Wow.  This chapter is the very essence of what you do so well; you offer up these tightly woven, succinct pieces that are simply atmospheric.  ...I'm fairly certain that's not a word, lol, so let me clarify: Reading this chapter, I was totally caught in the feel of it: could picture the rickety little place, the steam rising off of the food, Jim's expression at the waitress's "how to" (hee), and maybe most enjoyable of all, the electricity between the two of them.  Really, I was so caught up in this that when the chatper ended, there was this moment of almost disorientation for me -- as in, oh yeah, I'm sitting here in my office, not in the restaurant with Jim & Pam....

All this rambling to say: Excellent work, my friend!

And there's another chapter...?  Awesome!



Author's Response: Word or no word...I'll take 'atmospheric' ;-) It's great that you felt so caught up by this - I really wanted to express that sense of specific place and character, but it's always so hard to know whether what you see/hear in your head is what's coming across on the page. So hooray for that! And, thank you, my friend! (I get one more review? Wee!!!)

Reviewer: girl7 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01, 2008 09:54 am Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

Big contented sigh.

This was simply lovely; you capture here the essence of why I have no worries about season 5.  Love the fact that they're enjoying exploring the city together; love it even more that they sometimes don't leave her apartment for the entire weekend. :o)

Off to the next chapter....



Author's Response: Absolutely no worries. And I think there are plenty of things they'll explore together (no, not just that!) So glad you dropped by, girl7!!

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 30, 2008 03:03 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

I'm sorry to see this one end.  Still working on a way to write something myself.  It's not coming easily. :(

I keep saying this.  It's like a picture book, or a movie, or like...hanging back and following them around the city at a safe distance.  Except I'd also have to follow them up to Pam's apartment and get arrested for being a peeping Tom.  Ahem.  The point is - I see everything you write play out and it's all so accurate and descriptive - without being overly so.  I love how much care you take of these characters.  I think because I write about them we sometimes feel like they are mine - even though I know the truth.  All I can say is that I completely trust you with them.  :)  So thank you.  

PS this review is for Ancient Mayan Princesses.  I don't know why it says the first chapter.



Author's Response: Aw, I'm honored to be trusted...I promise, no characters were harmed in the writing of this story ;-) And, as I said earlier, I love hearing that you could easily picture this. Thanks so much, you Peeping Krissy, you!

Reviewer: PamPongChamp Signed [Report This]
Date: June 30, 2008 02:50 pm Title: Fortune Cookie

I would love to go to the chinatown you have described.  I avoid that place like the plague.  I can't take any more than 2 blocks of "goochi goochi chah-nel!!" and "hanbag? hanbag?" 

hot chapter.  that's what I meant to say 



Author's Response: True, you have to break through the evil force field of Canal St to get to the good stuff. And to be fair, some of my description is based on memories of it from years past...but, it's still there, if you look - gritty and a bit crazy, but I kind of like that, lol. Anyway, thanks much PamPongChamp!

Reviewer: Talkative Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 30, 2008 06:15 am Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Strange, since they're ostensibly about Pam, but I love the way that so many of these summer stories lightly touch on Jim's confusion about his own future. I'm learning from personal experience that it's difficult to write, but you do it so well here, Colette. Also, I love your Mayan princesses, the rain, and the kiss on the subway. You've done it again.

Author's Response: Yeah, I wanted Jim to seem still unsure, but just beginning to find his footing - and Pam to be encouraging, but trying to give him the space/time he needed. (Though maybe a bit frustrated by his always prioritizing her needs over his own.) Frankly, I'd like a Schrute buck for every smart, capable person  I know who was still sorting all that out in their late 20's; and 'career' wasn't always what ultimately defined them.  But, I digress. Thanks again, Talkative - appreciate all the reviews!

Reviewer: flonkerton Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2008 10:00 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

Seriously, I always love how intimate your writing is. You write these little quiet moments between them so perfectly. They just make me smile and feel warm =)

Author's Response: 'Intimate' and 'warm' are music to my ears. Thanks so much, flonkerton!

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2008 07:13 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

This one goes straight to the hall of fame.  Just absurdly wonderful, right down to the wonderfully apt bonus poem.  I suspect I will wind up reading this again and again.



Author's Response: And I'm absurdly pleased that you felt that way, brokenloon. And especially that you felt the relevance of the poem - I've loved that one for longer than I'll admit amongst an audience of twenty-somethings ;-) Thanks so much for all your reviews - this one meant a lot to me too.

Reviewer: WalkInLove Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2008 06:11 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

I may have squeed, just a bit, when I saw this was updated.  Once again, you managed to take me completely into this little world in which Jim and Pam found themselves.  I feel like I'm repeating myself here,  from my other reviews, but it all still holds true.

I love the way Jim is quick to support her in what she loves and that Pam has to coax it out of Jim in order to do the same.  That seems so true to character to me.  Jim has long been supporting Pam's desires and I can see him having trouble adjusting to being on the receiving end of that, simply because he is no more used to it than she was before Jim came along.

Okay, now I'm rambling.  I'll just end with very well done, as always.  Beautiful job from beginning to end.



Author's Response: I agree...I think S5 Jim is going to be about just that - figuring out what he wants besides Pam. And hopefully, her prodding him a bit (as opposed to pushing him towards what she thinks he should want...ahem.) Thanks so much, WIL - really appreciate your sticking with me here.    

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2008 05:59 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

*Melts*  Again.  Even though there were no 'actual' cookies in this chapter.  (Yes, I am using the air quotes to signify that.)

"as he comes gorgeously undone" << that was as good as a cookie.  A cookie everyone I know would like a bite of.  Yum.  Thanks for sharing this with us and making this week a titch more bearable.



Author's Response: No, thank you for always being such a fan - means more than you know. And I agree...that's one cookie no amount of willpower could resist. And, hell..willpower was never my strength. Thanks, Lisa - you're the best!

Reviewer: callisto Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29, 2008 05:00 pm Title: Ancient Mayan Princesses

So gorgeous! Your details and imagery are so vibrant and real. I loved the little girls and their mother on the subway:

Pam can’t understand the words, but the woman’s expression and tone are easily recognizable as universal mother-speak for stop staring and mind your own business.

Oh, there's too much of this that's perfect to even pick out particular lines. Their whole interchange back at the apartment and sleepy Jim saying 'mm hmm'... guh. But your dialogue with them was so real and true--like pulling teeth, indeed! Awesome. As always, a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing your city with us. :)

Author's Response: You know, I actually did see twin girls like those - and obviously they made an impression - so I love that they came across in this story.And I'm so glad the dialogue seemed real to you - always something I fret over. Thanks, so much, callisto. This one was a joy to write. ;-)

Reviewer: JennInTheCity Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27, 2008 08:44 pm Title: Over The Brooklyn Bridge

Oh, I just walked the Bridge this weekend, so this was a fabulous way to revisit it (no Jim with me unfortunately!). Great story!

Author's Response: No Jim at the end of the rainbow bridge? Oh well. Glad you're enjoying anyway, JennInTheCity - and many thanks!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27, 2008 04:40 pm Title: Fortune Cookie

"‘What, your mom never made you bear testicle tea when you were sick?’"  No, but I bet Dwight's mom did. And I bet she shot the bear herself.

Considering how big his hands are, he’s surprisingly adept with chopsticks.

Yeah, I would completely believe that. And I would believe that Pam, whom Jim called a klutz, would not be. :)

leaving him exposed, vulnerable, impossibly beautiful.

What a lovely, lovely word picture. 

at the rate she’s going, she’s thinking he might get laid right here on the table...she runs her foot up to his inner thigh, letting her toes linger for a moment at the point where the inseams of his jeans converge. It elicits a satisfying gasp from him.

Where is this restaurant and how do I get a reservation? :)

 

Ah, Colette, you never disappoint. However, I hope you've remembered that you always get, er, hungry again two hours after you've eaten Chinese food...Maybe Jim and Pam will go out for dessert? Or stay in. Whatever. :) I look forward to this lovely culinary exploration of each other New York. 



Author's Response: Oh, trust me...'dessert' will happen. Sadly, however, I hear reservations are hard to come by, Chez Jim - for one thing there's that minor detail about him being fictional. Dang. No matter - glad you're still liking this, NEJ - and I like that: 'word picture.' Many thanks!

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