Date: August 20, 2008 10:28 am Title: Chapter 1
I loved this. It was so gentle and absolutely believable. Utterly in character. nqllisi had rec'd this one to me last week and I'm so glad I finally got to it.
8 [Report This]Date: August 17, 2008 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was sweet. I love S1 Jim and Pam. And the "Soprano's themed leadership conference" was so perfectly Michael! Great job!
Date: August 16, 2008 01:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very cute, it made me smile.
Date: August 05, 2008 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this. I love how you establish the dynamic between the two. In my mind it was always Jim coming in awkward, yet forward, getting the job done. But I like this scenario better. Pam's being forward enough to give him hope, not being shy. I also think you did a good job of getting inside Jim's head. I love how you emphasize that he's usually smoother, but there's something about Pam, a regular woman, that is just so irregular to him.
9 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2008 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved this story. Michael's Sopranos leadership lunch was hilarious and made me laugh out loud. Very well done!
9 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2008 09:30 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm totally enjoying this, but Jim trying to think of the right thing was just too cute!
And wait? PB and J is not a grown up meal? Because its totally what I had yesterday. And what I am planning on having today. Except, I'm still at the age where man, juice boxes and pudding cups yum. I swear I graduated college.
This was really sweet. Totally believable, all in character. And now I know all about Jim Halperts second day. Or at least his second lunch. :)
Author's Response: Hee. Your feedback makes me smile. My confession is that I got the idea about the PB&J exchange because that's what I happened to be eating at the time. Thanks for the review. I'm so pleased you liked this.rn
Date: July 31, 2008 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
You have a really great handle on the dialogue. Very natural, very true to character. I liked your story, I hope you decide to do Cugino's. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! The thought had occurred to me to do Cugino's, but I fear it's been done to death, and much better than I could ever do. Still, if these two don't stop talking in my head I may just have to get it all down or they'll drive me crazy.
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...I really loved this! Your characterization really matches Jim and Pam, and I like that even from this encounter, their banter and quick humor are really noticeable. I absolutely loved Jim thinking of conversation starters; that's so typical Jim. Great job!
Author's Response: Characterization and dialogue is very important to me and I really tried to get it right, so I'm glad you said that! Thanks.
Date: July 30, 2008 09:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this. I like the origination of the French onion chips and the frustration of not being able to get into your email at work yet. Really great "second day" introspection and analysis - really love this!
10 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh Blanca, I just adored this. It felt so real and so in character and just perfect. Pam's reaction when Jim asks her to lunch is spot on, and I think she says yes because Roy ditched her for lunch this day, didn't he? Just. Love it. Fabulous.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! Coming from you, that means a lot. You are exactly right about the reason for Pam's reaction and her agreeing to go to lunch. Very perceptive. I'm glad that came across.
Date: July 30, 2008 10:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice. I love:
"Your smile is the only thing keeping me from jamming a stapler into my forehead today." Too desperate.
I think your ribbon fell off. That happens whenever you update; you just need to ask a mod to put it back on! Congrats on the ribbon; that's exciting. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I figured that's what happened. I just had to fix something, and then it went away. Thanks for the good review, though!
Date: July 30, 2008 08:35 am Title: Chapter 1
I love it when a little snippet from the show gets fleshed out into an entire story. Lovely job with this, captures their early moments together so well.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I love missing scenes, too. I tried to include as many little bits of information as we know about them from that time. I'm glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 06:25 am Title: Chapter 1
While I will never agree with Greg Daniels that Pam was at DM first (I'm sorry...Jim was there first. Period. :D), I think you've done a really great job with showing just how many of their little quirks were there from the beginning. I'm thinking specifically of the use of "Beesly" and "Halpert" in their banter here, but there were lots of of other little things as well.
Great job!
Author's Response: I just can't see Jim staying at that job for very long without Pam there. I always figured she was the reason he never went out and got a better job, because he totally could have. And that was even before we got the backstory in Launch Party. I'd be interested to hear your take on it, though. I know I have my own personal cannon and it bothers me when the writers or the show punch holes in it. But anyway, thank you so much for your feedback! It is much appreciated.
10 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 06:16 am Title: Chapter 1
This is absolutely beautiful. You capture the universal feeling of starting a new job and not quite fitting in yet, the relief of finding a new friend, and that breathless fluttery feeling of a new crush. And you also keep both Jim and Pam so in-character that it is sort of amazing. I love her trace of sadness because Roy stood her up, and Jim sort of desperately trying to be cool because she's so utterly perfect for him. His internal thoughts about trying to strike up lunch conversation are hilarious. Great, great job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind feedback. I'm glad you picked up on the fact that Roy stood her up for lunch. I was afraid that might be too subtle. I worked really hard to keep them in character, so it means a lot that you thought so. I do sort of love a hopeless Jim. I'm glad I'm not alone!
Date: July 30, 2008 05:52 am Title: Chapter 1
Adorable and pathetic, a deadly combination. Plus the origin of the Cugino's 'date, french onion chips, and the unspoken conversations across the office. Sigh. Nicely done, Blanca.
Author's Response: I tried to throw in a few references here and there. I'm so glad you picked up on them! Thanks so much for reading and responding. :D
10 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1
VERY, very nice! Loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Glad you liked it.