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Reviewer: kaystar Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: September 28, 2008 08:04 pm Title: Christmas Party

I had tears in my eyes when I read what Jim had written in the card. Wow. So loving and romantic. Well done!

Author's Response: *breathes a sigh of relief*  I was an absolute nervous wreck about this chapter.  But I thought, if one person likes the card, then it's fine.  So thanks.  :)

Reviewer: Noodles Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: September 28, 2008 02:19 pm Title: The Dundies

I liked this last chapter best. I like the whole concept of this fic but if i were to have a criticism, it would be that each chapter has been very brief and short, maybe if they talked more about each episode and what they felt at the time or something it would be better

Reviewer: JamFan4 Signed 5 [Report This]
Date: September 26, 2008 02:43 pm Title: The Fire

I definitely feel like there could have been more to these... I love the idea, though.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2008 09:25 pm Title: E-mail Surveillance

This is one of my favorite epsiodes too - and you did a great job with their reactions to watching it. I had totally forgotten about  "Probably...because we're downriver from that old bread factory."

Reviewer: Iheartstanley Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2008 04:49 pm Title: E-mail Surveillance

:-) that's what the chapter made me.

Reviewer: Desslok Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2008 06:26 am Title: E-mail Surveillance

Ok, here's the deal. I love this story, and I need more. These chapters are way too short. As Jim told Pam, "You need to give the people what they want!" This is such a great idea for a story and you write really well.

Author's Response: Thankyou so much for your kind review.  I will attempt a longer chapter for the next one.  It's going to be "Christmas Party" and as I'm sure you all know, there's plenty to write about for that episode!  Might take a few days, but look for it soon!

Reviewer: flonkertonxx Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2008 05:22 am Title: E-mail Surveillance

I loved it! Very good, yet again.
I'm a little surprised you didn't mention anything when Phyllis was like "Well, don't you mean Pam and Jim" when Pam asked her about office romanced. But it turned out good without it, so kudos!

Author's Response: Ah yeah, debated about that line.  But I figure, they know what they were, how they appeared to everyone.  :)  Thanks for the compliments, so glad you're still enjoying!

Reviewer: untherapy Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2008 12:03 am Title: E-mail Surveillance

this is such a great story! Very original - there's not a lot out there about them watching the DVD from a secure relationship space. Very strong writing - keep it up!

Author's Response: thanks!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: September 23, 2008 06:19 pm Title: The Fire

Thanks for taking what could have been very angsty and instead making it a time for honest dialogue ending in a kiss!

Author's Response: aww thank you!  Tried to find the balance between angst and fluff. :)

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: September 23, 2008 06:15 pm Title: Office Olympics

This was so sweet. I loved that episode and need to rewatch it again.  Great job.

Reviewer: Iheartstanley Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 17, 2008 03:46 pm Title: The Fire

I love this and I'm looking foward to E-mail Surveillance!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17, 2008 09:12 am Title: The Fire

Aw. Yeah, I guess that ep would play differently for them than it does for us, who were desperate for some signs of the love between them. I also like that Jim tries to play it off with a joke at first before the serious conversation.

Author's Response: Sorry I'm lazy but the three of you who posted on this chapter get one response.  I just wanted to say thanks for the encouragement, I was really worried about this chapter!

Reviewer: Alamos Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17, 2008 08:47 am Title: The Fire

I like this road down memory lane. I think it's a nice parallel to the Jim and Pam story: reliving the moments of their love story.

Reviewer: flonkertonxx Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17, 2008 04:19 am Title: The Fire

Aw, yesssss! I loved it!
And the next one is going to be great, as well! Hurry hurry!

Reviewer: tellsomebodyit Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 05:08 pm Title: Office Olympics

What a great idea! And well done! Can't wait for the next installments!

Reviewer: jkfan9989 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 03:17 pm Title: The Dundies

I think I'm going to enjoy revisiting these episodes with Pam & Jim's take on them!

Author's Response: honestly, that's how I'm writing these. Watching the episodes and thinking how it would be to be Pam and Jim watching it for the first time. :)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 12:19 pm Title: Office Olympics

"Look at that smile.  You are so in love with me."  She's trying to tease him, but he just grins. 

OK, that made me feel all tingly. I love the idea that they can talk like that, now. I'm sure they do, when they aren't on-camera. Yay! Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: Alamos Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 10:49 am Title: Office Olympics

Nice story -- I think it's interesting premise for them to see what we (the viewer) saw, all the love, angst and drama between them. I cannot wait for the angst parts.

Reviewer: khand3stooges Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 07:34 am Title: The Dundies

I really enjoy stories when they go back over their times together.  I'm really enjoying this one.  Hurry back.

Reviewer: Pisa Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 06:33 am Title: The Dundies

This is a fun idea. I like it. Keep up the good work. I would love to see a longer chapter though, maybe it's coming up? ;)

Author's Response: Oh if only I had the time. :)  Definitely will be working on a long chapter for Casino Night. :)  Thank you for commenting!

Reviewer: Desslok Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 06:10 am Title: Office Olympics

I'm really enjoying this story and look forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: flonkertonxx Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2008 04:34 am Title: Office Olympics

FLONKERTON! Wooh, that's my pen name : )
But another well-written and just overall great chapter. I'm looking forward the fire considering it's one of my all time favorite episodes. I really enjoy this story. Keep it up!

Author's Response: thanks it's one of my favorites too, so hopefully I'll do it justice!

Reviewer: officeromance Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2008 07:52 am Title: The Dundies

I love the story idea. My only suggestion is that in this chapter you could have touched on that unknown question asked by Pam in the end. Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2008 06:27 pm Title: The Dundies

I like this trip down memory lane that they (and we) are taking. Looking forward to reading more.

Reviewer: Orfice Flan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2008 12:09 pm Title: The Dundies

I like the premise.  I can see how they would watch it with trepidation. I am not sure they haven't already talked things through but I am not sure how long they have been a couple so that remains to be seen.  It's good tho.  I'll keep reading if you'll keep writing.

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