Date: April 29, 2009 07:06 pm Title: Chapter 10 The Waking
This was a most fabulous ending to one of my favorite stories on this entire site. I would give you a standing ovation it you could actually see it. I am also impressed that it turned out to be exactly 10 chapters. I like nice, round numbers like that. But seriously, this story had me on the edge of my seat the entire time. I was so intrigued by the mystery and the suspense. I am as satisfied with the conclusion as I was with the entire story. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you SarahPlainandTall, I'm delighted you enjoyed the story and that the ending worked for you. I'm a big lover of mysteries and there aren't many written on this site, so I thought I'd give it a go. Thanks so much for your comments, I appreciate them all!
Date: April 28, 2009 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 10 The Waking
Oh Jazzfan, what a perfectly penned ending. Honestly, that was so well thought out and executed...I think Jim summed it up best when he was lying in bed contemplating having gone from mortality to immortality in the blink of an eye. I can't remember at what point I thought you were going here...at some point in the hospital though. I loved that you gave them such a happy ending after all that angst.
Let's hope that the writers of TO take a page from your book. :-) Again - what a great ride this was!
Author's Response: Thanks lovefool - I'm glad you thought the ending fit - because I was not at all sure I was going to get things tied up. (I probably wrote this last chapter half a dozen times) I wondered if folks would suspect the "Jam babies" ending (I did havbe that in mind from the beginning) - thanks for letting me know when that occured to you. I was afraid I'd hinted too early, but I guess not. I really appreciate the review. As to Jam babies on the show? Probably won't happen, but I'd love it.
Date: April 28, 2009 12:05 pm Title: Chapter 10 The Waking
Hey, jazzfan! So glad you finished this and on such a lovely, satisfying note.
Now, because I love to make a list, I give you my fav parts:
1)Jim refusing pain meds because he wanted to be clear-headed to talk things through with Pam...sigh.
2)Jim’s reaction to hearing that he may have saved Ryan’s life…ha!
“I might have,” Jim replied matter of factly. “But not on purpose,” he added with a wry look.
3)Jim the naughty patient: "He amused himself by making the unappealing food on his tray into interesting shapes and trying to freak out the nurses in various ways, usually unsuccessfully. They were a tough crowd." This had me chuckling.
4)Pam’s appreciation of ‘Defensive Jim’:
“It’s normal to defend yourself, Jim. And truthfully? I kind of like that,” she admitted with a mischevious grin. “it’s kind of hot.” It most definitely is HOT!
5)And this line…so beautiful: "He had, afterall, gone from near mortality to immortality in less than a week, he reflected."
6)And to top it all off, you named the pooch, Voldemort!!!
Loved it all. Great story. Great Job. Now I have GREAT expectations for your next foray into fanfic writing.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the detailed review BA. It's always good to hear people's reactions to specific parts in the story, and you've given me that in spades. I've always considered Jimpert a pretty passive guy, and I wanted to explore how he would handle it if Pam was ever actually threatened - and this is what came out.rnI appreciate your comments, and if I were Voldemort, I'd be wagging my tail like crazy.
Date: April 28, 2009 11:17 am Title: Chapter 10 The Waking
*sigh* I love a happy ending. You ended this perfectly and didn't leave any stones unturned as to what happened with Ryan and Alex and our favorite couple. I read something you wrote on the forum today, about how your goal was to get out the last chapter of a story that had been kind of a burden or something--I totally 100% know how you feel, because I'm in that same position...but I commend you for sticking with this. I know it's hard, but you did such a great job!
Author's Response: Thanks BigTuna, I'm glad you liked the happy ending. I'm a sap at heart. I wouldn't call getting this done a "burden" so much as it was difficult for me to figure out how I was going to deal with all the loose ends I'd created, and it started feeling a little like work. Totally my lack of foresight, but I guess this is a learning process, eh? Beering you strength and perseverance on your story as well. We'd like to read the conclusion.rn
Date: April 08, 2009 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1 Spirit in the Dark
I cannot tell you how much I love this story. I've been following this story for a while now, but I just got around to posting a review.
I'm not sure, but I think Ryan must be up to something not-so-good. But maybe I'm wrong. I was wrong about who was following Pam.
Anyway, this is one of my favourite fan-fictions I've read, and I cannot wait for you to update.
By the way, Voldemort's an adorable name for the dog. Even if it is just temporary. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks so much iJam, I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I appreciate your taking the time to review. I've been out of town, but I'm hoping to get cracking on the rest of this, and the pup will end up with a name.
Date: April 03, 2009 02:52 am Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
Officer Scarne!!! Nice touch. I think I may have guessed what Ryan's deal is but then again you've led me down a blind alley before now! :) Can wait to read more. Also, can I petition you to call the pooch Voldermort...so cute and so Pam and Jim? BA
Author's Response: Of course I've lead you down a blind alley, you're a Blind Assasin. What were you expecting? *grin* Seriously, thanks, and if you know what Ryan's deal is, please PM me. Because I don't. Thanks for the review and I will only promise that in the next chapter, the dog does get a name.
Date: April 03, 2009 02:45 am Title: Chapter 8 Crazy He Calls Me
Lordy, jazzfan...I was so not expecting Alex to confront Jim in the garage! The guy is nuts! Who got shot...is Jim okay? Did Ryan absorb the bullets? Or, did Art Boy get what was coming to him? Why am I asking these questions...I should just read the next chapter, right?!!! Great job!
Author's Response: Yay, Alex was a surprise - and he definitely has issues of the postal persuasion. Turn the page, silly. Thanks.
Date: April 01, 2009 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
jazz, how many twists and turns can you squeeze into one story???? Here I go off on a wee little trip across the pond and you've thrown in MORE things I hadn't anticipated. I don't believe Ryan and I really want to know what Pam needs to tell Jim.
And I knew that slimy Alex was up to no good! So, how injured is he?
I hope you post another chapter soon! (Am I back on the preview list?!?!?)
Author's Response: Hey, mis thang world traveller, it's great to see you back. All will be revealed next chapter, and of course I'd love for you to save me from my run on sentences, etc. The real question is, what are they going to name the dog? Thanks, and welcome home.
Date: April 01, 2009 03:04 pm Title: Chapter 1 Spirit in the Dark
ANOTHER surprise?!? Wow. I love this story, though! And NoFirewoeks here might just have an idea about what Pam needs to tell him...we shall see I guess.
Author's Response: Thanks NoFireworks, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. We shall see, indeed. Your review is much appreciated.
Date: March 31, 2009 11:17 pm Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
Officer Scarne. ::snort::
Uh, poor Jim with a collapsed lung! This is scary stuff. I really can't imagine what else you've got up your sleeve here. Hope we don't have to wait too long! :-)
Author's Response: I really felt bad about beating up poor Jim in this one, because I didn't start out to do that but it "served the story." I've promised my fictional Mr. Halpert that the next story I write he gets all the good lines and some lovin' instead of baseball bats upside the head. *grin* I'm out next week and then I'll get cracking on the end. Thanks LoveFool.
Date: March 31, 2009 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
because Alex is going to leap out of his hospital bed and try to strangle Pam with his IV cord!!!!!
... and that's why you're writing the story, not me :P Great work, as per usual!
Author's Response: Pam would kick his ass. Thanks, untherapy, for reading and reviewing, much appreciated.
Date: March 31, 2009 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 1 Spirit in the Dark
I have been waiting and waiting and waiting and waiting for this update-I literally went "YES!" when I saw it.
Awesome job as usual, you really had me on the edge of my seat with the last chapter and it's nice to see everything come together. I'm really looking forward to see how this story finishes!
Date: March 31, 2009 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
Officer Scarne??? You did that on purpose! This story just gets better and better! I'm so glad it's not over yet. What's Pam's big announcement? Oh, and by the way, if Jim needs an in-home nurse, I'd be happy to take the job :)
Author's Response: No, of course I didn't do it on purpose. Office Scarne just showed up at the scene - what can I say? If you're volunteering to take care of Mr. Halpert, be ready to take on Pam, because she thinks she's got the job. As to the announcement, maybe Pam has finally picked out a name for the dog? Thanks for your comments.
Date: March 31, 2009 10:34 am Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
I love this story, jazzfan! Please keep updating as soon as you can. I knew that skeevy Alex couldn't be trusted. And is that Officer Michael Scarne? If so, brilliant :-)
Author's Response: Alex is a full blown psychopath after all. Just goes to show Jim he should have trusted his instincts, right? I'm not aware of Officer Scarne's first name (I just saw his last name on the badge), but maybe I should do some research. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Date: March 31, 2009 10:05 am Title: Chapter 9 Everything Happens to Me
Whew. *sigh of relief* Awesome job, lady. BTW, love the mention of
Agent Officer Scarne :) Another surprise you say?! Can't wait!
Author's Response: Thanks Nan, Officer Scarne - I couldn't resist.
Date: March 09, 2009 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 8 Crazy He Calls Me
Woah...first of all, how were you possibly thinking that this would be the last chapter!? lol. Wow...actually I wasn't expecting it to be Alex. For some reason I thought it was a professor or something. Wow, wow, wow...poor Jim. Poor Pam. And now why the heck is Ryan there! Uh...so many questions!
I can't wait to see what happens next!!!!
Author's Response: I don't know, I guess I figured that finding out who the "bad guy" was would be the last chapter. I need to follow Dwight's advice - Would an idiot think that?rnYes. So I should not think that thing. *snork*rnAnyway, I'm tickled you didn't think it was Alex. And even after I dropped that line in the last chapter about him getting their new address? Most of your questions will get answered right away in the next chapter, but I am saving one little twist for the ending. *evil grin*rnThanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: March 09, 2009 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 8 Crazy He Calls Me
Oh... my... goodness! Ok, I kind of thought Alex might be behind everything, but I wasn't sure. And I NEVER thought he'd try to kill Jim!!! And how does Ryan fit into all of this? Are Ryan and Alex working together? When did they even meet? Oh, please, please, please let Jim be alright! I love this story! Please update soon!
Author's Response: Well thanks, SarahPlainandTall. I figured that folks would have Alex at the top of the suspect list, but would think he was after Pam (well - I guess he is after Pam but not that way...lol). You'll find out about Ryan's role and Jim's fate very soon. rnI really appreciate hearing about your reactions to the plot, it's always hard to know when you're writing this sort of thing, what people will think is going to happen.
Date: March 09, 2009 05:25 pm Title: Chapter 8 Crazy He Calls Me
Oooooooooooooh my gosh. I freaking love this story, every chapter has left me hanging by a thread. I love the suspense, and it's all so realistic. Amazing. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it. I felt kind of cheap for leaving this one where I did, but it was the only reasonable breaking point. Thanks so much for the read and the review.rn
Date: March 09, 2009 11:34 am Title: Chapter 8 Crazy He Calls Me
Jazzfan, you busy little bee! This chap is so tense and Alex is soooo creepy. Yikes. Glad that you're well into the next chap because I'm dying here!
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg, I won't leave you hanging very long this time. (TWSS)
Date: February 24, 2009 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 7 Nice Work if You Can Get It
I just read this story (so far) and it's really awesome. Very different from the show's overall lighthearted tone and I'm digging it! Just one request? Please don't let harm befall the as-yet-unnamed puppy. I couldn't take it!
Author's Response: Well thanks, Pamalamadingdong, I'm glad you gave it a try. Let me assure you, no puppies will be harmed in the playout of this story (though he does figure into the plot in an important way). It isn't the pup you should be worried about. I've sort of bounced between very lighthearted/silly (Smiling and Satisfied) and very very dark (Timing is Everything) when writing here - I love trying on different scenarios for these characters - not necessarily in the genre of the actual series. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. (I'm working on the conclusion now)
Date: February 23, 2009 12:06 am Title: Chapter 7 Nice Work if You Can Get It
Hmmm...I'm getting a sinking feeling about New York. Can't wait to see how you wrap this up...uh, this was fluff of the very best kind. PUPPIES = LOVE.
Author's Response: Hey LoveFool, I'm glad you enjoyed the fluff, and yeah, who can NOT love puppies? You may be right about New York. *cue dissonant music* Thanks for the review!
Date: February 22, 2009 03:00 pm Title: Chapter 7 Nice Work if You Can Get It
Wow, Jazzfan! This story is great. I’ve just read the whole lot in one go and now I’m sat here trying to keep a hold on all the theories whizzing about my brain. I have my suspicions about who the stalker/burglar is, but I’m taking nothing for granted. You’ve led me down a couple of dead ends already - I’m wise to your mad skills. Ha!
Here’s what I love:
1 - Jim. I don’t think you’ve once let ‘your Jim’ stray from character. His interactions with Ryan and Art Boy (love it!) are GREAT. When he lets Alex have it at the gallery, I actually hissed “yes!” out loud. Honest. Mr. BA shot me a ‘Care Bear stare’.
“Yeah,” Jim said slowly as he shrugged his shoulders. “How do you suppose Van Gogh managed to paint this and not be in New York?” He took a second to enjoy the look on Alex’s face. “Wait, there aren’t even any stars in New York, are there?” Jim tried to keep at least a hint of humor in his voice. “Wouldn’t have happened.”
Alex cocked his head and his look told Jim that Alex had underestimated him. That made him happy.
2 - Jim and Dwight – I loved their interaction. When Jim asks him to ‘maintain order’, I grinned like a damn fool – and bless him, he does. Although, I did think he was going to spray Ryan himself at one point.
“I want you to maintain order.”
“Okay, I will assist you. When and where?” - PERFECT Dwight speak.
And this made me love Dwight even more than I do already:
For a moment, Dwight looked at him with a new respect. Then he said, “A good provider and successful man protects his woman from harm, thus enhancing the survival of his offspring.” The moment was over.
I’m just sorry the ride is almost over. I don’t think I’ve read a JAM mystery story before. Gotta say, I doubted it would be my cup of tea…BUT it so is. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Blind Assasin (love the nic), for your detailed review. It made me happy that you find "my" Jim in character through all this. I was trying hard not to make him into some sort of action hero. I love Dwight and Jim together, so I had real fun writing that office scene. I'm delighted you're enjoying my little mystery, and all will be revealed soon. Thanks again!
Date: February 21, 2009 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 7 Nice Work if You Can Get It
Aw, cute doggie! Yours? And even with puppies, you still bring the mounting tension! Looking forward to the dramatic conclusion (well...not the end of the story, but your know).
Author's Response: No, not my doggie's picture (pic was totally ripped off from the internet) but I do have a German Shepherd and always will. I love them. I promise the conclusion next time. Really. Honest. Thanks!