Date: January 09, 2009 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Totally loved this! Sorry I didn't comment the first time I read it, but it was the only bright spot in that day, which I guess is a comment in itself, but whatever. Really great take on an elopement (how I think Jim and Pam will finally tie the knot) that feels perfectly them.
Date: January 09, 2009 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, Talkative...this was great. You wrote with suc a light hand, not bogging down such a sweet tale with drama or heavy dialogue. The beauty's in the detail here and I loved it. Thanks for such a great piece!
Date: January 08, 2009 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
The mix of just a little bitter with the sweet here is lovely; nothing terrible, just a few little pauses and oddities in their new life together. This really rings true for them.
Author's Response: Hi Sophia - here's what happened... When I saw your name on this review, I thought "Isn't she the one that wrote 99 Problems?" and visited your stories to check. It's one of my favorites - I love a sympathetic, angry Karen. As a result I've spent the past half-hour or so re-reading that, And Run Away, Borneo (which is one of my all-time favorites), Five Firsts, Jumping the Gun, and Vox. It's such a wonderful compliment to receive a kind review from an author's work that I enjoy as much as I enjoy yours. Thank you.
Date: January 08, 2009 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Once again I am reminded why you are one of my favorite JAM fanfic authors. I tried to read this story when it was posted earlier in the week, but only had a minute and quickly realized skimming just wasn't going to cut it. Now that I had a chance to really read it and savor it, I am feeling all kinds of warm and fuzzy!
Your attention to detail and your beautiful descriptions, not to mention that you write Jim and Pam SPOT ON to the point where I can picture them speaking your words, make you one of the finest gems of this site.
I just loved this story. Too many instances to quote and everyone who reviewed before me pretty much covered it.
Please keep writing and add more stories soon!
Author's Response: Abigail, you flatter me. I'm glad you enjoyed it - I'm guilty of trying to skim and having to come back to my favorite authors here, too. I'm actually working on two (or three? stupid plot bunny...) other stories right now, and I hope to have one of them posted very soon. I look forward to hearing everyone's thoughts when I finally manage it. Cheers.
Date: January 08, 2009 10:40 am Title: Chapter 1
I love everything about the things this story chooses to be. The quietness of the morning, the slow build to the amazing sex I'm sure they had (hee!), the Soul Asylum, the e.e. cummings. It's all amazing. I can definitely see Jim and Pam doing something like this. In fact, I'm kind of waiting for it to happen on the show! Maybe during the two-part ep in a few weeks? :)
Author's Response: I'm waiting for this to happen-without-happening on the show (Zen!). As I've said in other reviews, I'm really stuck on how insular Pam and Jim are this season - it's just so perfect. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Corking.
Date: January 08, 2009 10:15 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this idea. No cameras, no Michael, no Save the Dates, just them and their families and a beautiful dress (we know how impulsive Jim gets when she wears a beautiful dress). And the snow insulates them and gives them a chance to start building their marriage together. Perfect, perfect way to spend a snow day!
Author's Response: Lis, I didn't even think about it, but, yeah - the man is helpless in the face of haute couture. :) And, clearly, I love this idea, too. Let's keep our fingers crossed, okay?
Date: January 08, 2009 08:40 am Title: Chapter 1
So, this is romance. You capture the sense of them being gloriously alone in the world, in their own quiet, snowy cocoon. So many lovely details, but a few especially grabbed me: Pam knows that, really, it wasn't the after-Christmas sale at the mall that put the idea in their heads, even though that's how she'll probably end up telling the story. That part of it can be made pat, cute, someone else's business. She practices: Ah, so apt. And the detritus of the previous night - her fancy shoes, his cufflinks and still knotted tie (clearly hastily removed ;-) Her being affected by the idea of Jim having a context in the house as they start this new existence there together, her feeling content, yet slightly at odds and ends about lots of things...until Jim comes back and it all seems so calm and right. Really love him climbing up the bed to her, how naturally they remove each others' clothes while continuing to chat. And this is perfect romance: Jim, her husband, she reminds herself and this is perfectly scorching, yet so joyfully intimate: She laughs into the soft skin below his navel.
Well, I could go on, but will close this rather incoherent review by saying love, love, love. Oh and apparently great minds think alike when it comes to cummings - that's the same poem I used to close my fic August, that also partly inspired it. ;-)
Author's Response: Colette, your reviews just *kill* me, to say nothing of your writing (speaking of which - *cough*). Thank you so much for taking the time to point to specifics - I'm sure you know how helpful and meaningful that it is. And and and - it was you! I had been driving myself bonkers yesterday trying to remember where I had recently read that cummings poem, if only so I could find it and get the line right. Naturally, I found it in my Collected Poems at home, but it's nice to know where I originally got the idea in my head. So thank you!
Date: January 08, 2009 04:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this was gorgeous to come home to. The snow I had to tredge through to get inside my house was annoying but I found myself glancing outside when I was reading this story and grinning. Definitely put me in a better mood. :)
That said, I LOVE this idea. I think it's because I've given up ever seeing Jim and Pam get married on the show so if we can't see it, they should elope. Because that's just awesomely romantic and I just see that as.. them.. so very them so I absolutely adored that. I loved the quiet, lovely theme you set in this and the banter that is, once again, so them.. and I just loved it. It's always a treat to read your stories, Talkative, and once again... you do not disappoint. Beautiful job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review, oobadnama. I've actually come around to the point that I don't want to see them get married. I love this closed off, private sense of them that they're pushing this season and I want to see it keep going.
Date: January 08, 2009 01:42 am Title: Chapter 1
You had me at the title, one of my favorite cummings poems. And then this...every line artfully done, and the way you tell the story of the wedding by interleaving it into their everyday, ordinary life--wonderful. Just wonderful. I applaud you.
Author's Response: NEJ, you're sweet. Thank you so much for your kind review. I've always loved e.e. cummings' love poems, so I was glad to have a reason to use him here.
Date: January 08, 2009 12:41 am Title: Chapter 1
Lurve it! Is this set in the "Week Days" & "Better Version of Me" Universe? Just curious. I just want to see them married, darn it! I think that the fanfic writers should form some sort of union and storm on Van Nuys to teach those pesky show writers a lesson on how it's done. Enough with the waiting, already. Anyway, excellent, and nice to see something new from you, Talkative!
Author's Response: Hiya - You know, I hadn't even really considered if they're in the same universe as those stories. I don't think they are, though, as "Better Version of Me" has become AU at this point and, honestly, I like what TPTB did with the proposal much, much more than what I chose to do. Also, I think the canon proposal is more in line with what I did here. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I always appreciate it.
Date: January 07, 2009 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok, so that was perfect.
Everything from the quiet mood you created to the way you just subtly hinted at an elopement...her impractical silver shoes lying next to the bed, the cufflinks...This was really quite fabulous. You kept the trademark banter a staple of the piece, but it also managed to feel just so quiet and intimate.
Author's Response: Thank you, Lovefool. I realize that Jim and Pam engage in a bit of back-and-forth in almost all of my stories. I think I do it because it really centers and grounds the characters for me. I *know* them in that context, which helps me to move them in less familiar directions. I appreciate your review.
Date: January 07, 2009 07:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
This would be a perfect way for Jim and Pam to get married. I also liked that you included their families.
But, Jim's wedding ring was the star of this story: His hand, the metal of his ring slick on her skin, slides easily up her leg, between her body and the boxer shorts she's wearing.
Picturing Jim with a wedding ring on is just about as hot as it gets. Thanks for the gorgeous images you have painted with your words!
Author's Response: Pam would definitely want her mother there, no matter what. Which means that Jim's parents would be there, which would lead to grandparents and aunties and... Like I said in an earlier review, there is little in this world that's hotter than a good looking man wearing a wedding ring. It makes no sense, but there you go. Once I had the prompt, this story started with the image that you quoted above. Thank you for reading and for the kind review, Beeswax.
Date: January 07, 2009 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
You already know I love this, Talkative, but I was truly honored by your dedication. The real reward for me is just being able to read your work. I think the edits you made were just the right thing to smooth out the transitions.
Oh, and I noticed that this was new:
She thought of the breathless kiss that he gave her nearly three years ago; the way it pulled at something very basic and obvious in her that she wanted nothing more than to ignore.
And it's probably one of my favorite lines you've written (or it ranks right up there).
I just love the idea of Jim and Pam secluded in their warm little post-wedding bubble. You really manage to paint a picture with words, and what a lovely picture it is. I'm beyond thrilled to have had even some tiny part in inspiring this.
Author's Response: Aaannd it's the lady of the hour! I'm glad you liked how I cleaned up the transitions - hearing that I wasn't the only one who had a problem with them really helped give me enough distance to understand what needed to be done. That line was a very, very last-minute addition - I felt like there needed to be some sort of reference to their past relationship in there, if only briefly. You've done such a wonderful job supporting me this time around that I'm afraid I'm going to be bugging you far more regularly from now on. Thank you, thank you.
Date: January 07, 2009 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yep. I'm blown away, just like everyone else! I don't know why but I especially liked the $5 bet that Phyllis would assume Pam was pregnant. Seems like it would be a perfect first day of Halpert marriage. I really love the way you close the story as they just begin their life together.
Author's Response: Originally, it was a $5 bet that Angela would assume such a thing, but I think she's a little, erm, too busy right now to make making such assumptions, don't you? >:) I'm glad you enjoyed this, Vamp. Thanks for reading.
Date: January 07, 2009 03:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, the line pretty sure its illegal to marry your sister took me right out of the story. Because I honestly was just looking over my genetics notes, and we spent a whole day examining marriage laws and the genetic reasons behind them. I also can tell you its illegal (at least in SC), for a man to marry his mother in law. Even though there is no genetic basis for it.
Really, I would say that's pathetic, but every single class I was in, I related to The Office. So, its just... normal for me now.
Oh yeah, and its totally great they got married :). Because that would be the best Christmas present of all time if that happened on the show. (except then I would feel so gypped!)
Author's Response: Hey, Emily, don't you hate it when your weird hobbies and your very grownup life converge in odd ways? It happens to me regularly, but, then again, I have a weird job. Thanks for your review. I appreciate it.
Date: January 07, 2009 03:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
GORGEOUS. God, I'm never more excited than I am when I see that you have a new story. The atmosphere with the winter weather in this is just magical, and I love the impulse they had to get married. Just. Ugh, so pretty, all of it. No one writes Jim and Pam quite like you do.
Author's Response: Flonk! Someone needs to take you skydiving, because I'm much too dull a person to inspire such excitement. :) Thanks for your review - I always appreciate hearing from you.
Date: January 07, 2009 02:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Gosh, that was wonderful! Normally I am not a huge fan of Jim and Pam elopement stories, but this one seemed to hit all the right notes. Thank you!
Author's Response: Hey, Doves - I'm not a fan of Jim and Pam wedding stories, generally speaking, which is why... I decided to write one? Search me. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it.
Date: January 07, 2009 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
It is always a wonderful day when I see something new written by you!
This story is so lovely. I absolutely adore it. Can I sign a petition to have you write for the show? Count me as one of the folks who is slightly nervous about a Jim and Pam wedding on the show. But this… this just hits all the right notes. I’m crossing my fingers that the show can live up to your subtle, sweet, and beautiful version.
Eagerly awaiting your next stories!
Author's Response: A gig on the show would solve this pesky employment problem I'm having right now, so I'm going to go ahead and say yes to that. You might not want to mention the whole fanfiction thing when you're explaining why I should write for them, thought. ;) Thanks for your kind review, WhatAWaste. I've got a couple new ones I'm working on right you, one of your prompts included (it even has a title! how exciting!). Until next time.