Date: February 05, 2009 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is how that conversation happened. No doubt. Love Pam's subtle little prompts that Jim - of course - picks up. I have no doubt he's told her all those things many times before - but knowing he told her dad, and in that bittersweet context, was just so touching.Thanks for connecting the dots so well, Lovefool!
Date: February 05, 2009 07:13 am Title: Chapter 1
Snapping out of a long reviewing hiatus to say how brilliant and wonderful I thought this was. Especially perfect:
Jim bit his lip. "Thanks...I...She's.............I can't imagine not being with her. Or...wait," he said shaking his head. "I can imagine not being with her," Jim said, with an awkward smile. "Never want to go back there again."
A great idea for a fic and really, really well done.
Date: February 05, 2009 06:10 am Title: Chapter 1
I think you created a very realistic scene here. I like it! I could just feel what Jim was feeling. I like the interior thoughts you chose. There are too many for me to list. I'd end up including too much of the story!
Date: February 05, 2009 05:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Scruffy!John looks fine to me, so Jim could skip shaving every few days or so haha!
Guys suck! That is the way that happens. If the guy is not Jim Halpert of John Krasinski, he sucks. Okay, maybe a few other fictional characters don't suck. But real life guys, they do.
Date: February 05, 2009 04:39 am Title: Chapter 1
That was great!! I loved the evidence you included about buying the ring after a week to prove all the things Jim said to Pam's dad were true. And I also thought you handled the ending quite nicely too, with Jim thinking he had succeeded. I can definitely see this fitting into the canon really well; wonderful job!